im-axel-fear-me-NOW 10 Posted July 29, 2009 *inhale exhale* mah first poem...here goes... roses r red violets r blue... O.O....JUST KIDDING!!!!!!! just had to do that though XDD heres the actual thing What's Written on my Heart The rain is everlasting Storms fill my soul as I thirst for peace There's nothing left to do But stare back as you leave me alone.... Alone and dying You used to be my helper My healing tourniquet Yet you leave me to walk on my own To fend for myself But you will forget me And I will watch as the seasons change Alone and on my own Everything we had before will turn to dust And the only thing I will have left... Is what's written on my heart ....ok so i was quite bored i was thinking of random things and im making u suffer for it ^^ constructive critizism NEEDED Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
PrincessToriAlly15 2 Posted July 29, 2009 kinda dark to me... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Cellar Door 652 Posted July 30, 2009 Oh, dude, i really liked it. You should keep writing. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DigiMoon93 2 Posted July 30, 2009 Its nice really. i like it. It sounds like a chorus of a song ....*POEM RELATING* ....... its Axel to Roxas in a painful way....jes...... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rose Riku 39 Posted July 31, 2009 @Blazer - if you're not into poetry then why click on a thread that says POEM?! I think it's beautiful in a melancholy way. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
im-axel-fear-me-NOW 10 Posted August 2, 2009 :blush: thanx everyone! and yeah digimoon93 it kinda is.....i was humming a tune in my head and the word popped up and i wrote them down so i wouldnt forget Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zexionrox13 3 Posted November 17, 2009 That was awesome! I mean like that was wicked good Axel! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
im-axel-fear-me-NOW 10 Posted November 20, 2009 thanx!!!!!!! 8D Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites