Larxene12 86 Posted December 12, 2009 Okay, I was wndeirng is this is good. It has to be 6-8 sentences, and here are the directions: "Write a paragraph about and old cat. Use lots of vivid detail" this week in ELA we are learning more about Detail, and this is what I wrote He was sitting, right there. On his back leaning into the couch, his fur fat made his small head sink into it. White with orange stripes or orange with white stripes, I don Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHnub 0 Posted December 12, 2009 It's good detail, just go back and fix the grammar mistakes ^^;; Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Larxene12 86 Posted December 12, 2009 i know, I do grammar LAST! it was wayy worse though! lol Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHnub 0 Posted December 12, 2009 Well once the grammar is fixed, it'll be perfect (: 100 IMO! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHnub 0 Posted December 12, 2009 !! Oh, and you didn't spell the subject of the thread right ;D Just pointing it out! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Larxene12 86 Posted December 13, 2009 yeah, i did it on purpose cos my sarcasm shows! get the joke? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHnub 0 Posted December 13, 2009 Not at all (: Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zexionrox13 3 Posted December 13, 2009 it's good. off topic Larxene I like you profile pic.! Still, there's plenty of detail. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
