So, I'm planning to enter the GMV Awards 2011, and I'm entering the Best Emotion category.
I decided to work on a poem for my video.
It's going to be a Namora video and I highly recommend listening to
while reading since it will be the song I use.
The poem is writing in Namine's point of view you could say, but do to the song I'm using, if you know of Homestuck, it could be interpreted in her POV as well.
Or you could read it and not associate it with any characters, it makes just as much sense
Childish Daydream
If you found me on the brink of death
Would you stay by my side?
Would you hold my hand?
Would it be alright?
I’d be happy if the last I saw was you
Your shining eyes
Your bright smile
And your lips giving me a kiss goodnight
When I died
Did you even notice?
Did you even care?
Or did you just forget?
My missing body
And the absence of my voice
Where you saddened?
Or is that just another false hope?
Did you even find
The notes scattered around?
The clues I had left?
Or were they just lost?
They were my heart
Poured onto paper
They were my love
And they were my hope
The dream of us
The thought of us
My love for you
And everything you’d done
Did you even know
How much I cared for you
How I wished you were mine
How I wished I was yours
It was a childish hope
A childish dream
A childish love
A childish delusion
A little girl
Young and naive
Cradling my love
That wasn’t meant to be
The horror of death
Creeping up on me
Terrified of the emptiness
And loneliness beside me
So I had lain
Alone in my despair
Waiting for my saviour
You weren’t there
Since I want my poem to be perfect and emotion provoking, please please offer me advice to improve it (such as wording things differently, grammar, etc)
So, I'm planning to enter the GMV Awards 2011, and I'm entering the Best Emotion category.
I decided to work on a poem for my video.
It's going to be a Namora video and I highly recommend listening to
The poem is writing in Namine's point of view you could say, but do to the song I'm using, if you know of Homestuck, it could be interpreted in her POV as well.
Or you could read it and not associate it with any characters, it makes just as much sense
Childish Daydream
If you found me on the brink of death
Would you stay by my side?
Would you hold my hand?
Would it be alright?
I’d be happy if the last I saw was you
Your shining eyes
Your bright smile
And your lips giving me a kiss goodnight
When I died
Did you even notice?
Did you even care?
Or did you just forget?
My missing body
And the absence of my voice
Where you saddened?
Or is that just another false hope?
Did you even find
The notes scattered around?
The clues I had left?
Or were they just lost?
They were my heart
Poured onto paper
They were my love
And they were my hope
The dream of us
The thought of us
My love for you
And everything you’d done
Did you even know
How much I cared for you
How I wished you were mine
How I wished I was yours
It was a childish hope
A childish dream
A childish love
A childish delusion
A little girl
Young and naive
Cradling my love
That wasn’t meant to be
The horror of death
Creeping up on me
Terrified of the emptiness
And loneliness beside me
So I had lain
Alone in my despair
Waiting for my saviour
You weren’t there
Since I want my poem to be perfect and emotion provoking, please please offer me advice to improve it (such as wording things differently, grammar, etc)