Yayy 2nd week of November and I only have this much of my story for NaNoWriMo. FML.

I progress so slowly.

Crit is appreciateed.

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Not every mind is a stable one. Some are like small, cramp and dark rooms behind a what seems a normal and perhaps beautiful door. Others are like a wide and spacious plain, with the blistering light shining over head.

Generally peaceful. Calm. Beautiful.

Others are complete darkness, filled with echoes of past memories, being slowly tucked away into the deepest, darkest corner you can find. Shrill screaming filling your head and your own crying for it to stop. Trying to erase everything until only a blank slate is left. And the door is like a chipping mask, falling apart, barely hiding the horror behind it.

But that could just be me.

I always wished I could read minds. I

Lulz. I remember when you and me were thinking of a name.

This is beautiful lahv.

I like how you start off but the ending is wierd like you said.

I NEED MOAR. C:

Awesome I'm doing nanowrimo as well i was going to do it with a group of friends but they bailed so i decided to use my fanfiction and start it up again. its here

 

http://kh13.com/mybb/showthread.php?tid=10857

This is wonderful, I love how you describe each single detail of the feelings and the scenery surrounding, it makes the resders be into the story, seeing what you see, feeling what you feel. Loved it.

At first I was like O__O

Then I was like :|

And finally after reading this, I was like

 

This is what I would call Grade-A writing. Seriously, the details are greatly described, and your narrative, first person structure is excellent. Usually I find first person to be dull, but this is perfect.

 

A very fine story 8D

At first I was like O__O

Then I was like :|

And finally after reading this, I was like

 

This is what I would call Grade-A writing. Seriously, the details are greatly described, and your narrative, first person structure is excellent. Usually I find first person to be dull, but this is perfect.

 

A very fine story 8D

 

Thanks! 8DD

That's exactly the reaction I wanted to get out of people! 8DD! Mission accomplished.

 

I'm still working on this, slowly, perfecting it. I basically gave up on NaNoWriMo it'self and this has become my baby and I hope to finish it some day.

C:

Thanks again~ <3