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i look at the sky il be brave il fall but il get up il see the way back

i know il stay up tall. il find the way

im the one that fight back... call me mean il show u mean il seee the way back im the one that fight back push me everday il came back tall

 

not done yet hope u like or hate [/color]i really don't care

Ugh. Grammar and spelling, I cannot stress this enough.

 

For starts, you've screwed up basic grammar rules taught at a rudimentary level- starting each line or sentence with a capital letter (although I can't actually tell what this is supposed to be; it's just a few random lines of ranting, seemingly) and "I" NEVER is left lower case.

 

"il" is I'LL, dear lord, I don't know why you would write the damn word so often if you can't spell it.

 

Just... ngh. Please, try and improve before you spam up the section with stuff like this.

Such a tortured spirit

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i look at the sky il be brave il fall but il get up il see the way back

i know il stay up tall. il find the way

im the one that fight back... call me mean il show u mean il seee the way back im the one that fight back push me everday il came back tall

 

not done yet hope u like or hate [/color]i really don't care

 

Two words, for the 1000th time, spell check. If your school taught you to spell like this, I advise you enroll into a different one.

It was really cool (even though its not one) but yea just check spelling but otherwise awesome =D