I feel like writing a whole new story, please read and tell me how it looks like:(notice the characters and beggining of my story is based on my first fanfic "life without a heart")
CHARACTERS
Aros(A-rose)- A black haired boy. Yet not the toughest fighter, has great ability to dodge and great motivation. Poseses much inteligence. He has a scar on his right eye ( His right ). Has small brown eyes. Posses much hidden power.
Kya(K-Eyea) - A mysterious girl with big green eyes, brown hair, and light skin. Aros's love interest. A flexible warrior. Yet not as ineligent as Aros, sometimes she seems to know more then him, and uses her inteligence better then him. She's not strong or weak. Her past seems to be a big blank.
Crad- a Dark boy who claims to know Kya. He seems to have enough power to speperate worlds.
Genkei (Jen-Key)- A mysterious Old Man who seems to serve as a guardian to Crad. [Have to get him into the story]
STORY:
Aros and Kya are getting ready to go out for a party, when Aros collapses. Kya, worried, had no one to call, and lied him on his bed.
While Aros was collapsed, he dreamed of a foggy, dark forest, where he was standing. After hearing a voice saying that he didn't have enough power for himself, he was terrified, but listened to the mysterious voice. It spoke about lending him power, and so he did. Light emarged from his skin, getting brighter and brighter until he was blinded, and he woke up. Aros decided not to tak about this to Kya, and he just said that he didn't get much sleep.
After they arrived at the party, Aros saw a boy- Crad-, who loked at him with a suspicious look.
Next to him was an elderly man with tanned skil, long, white hair and what apeared to be dark yellow eyes, almost green-Genkei- who slowly walked away of the party. Aros decided to follow the two. They seemed to have gone inside a secret door inside the building of the party. Aros showed up in a rather weird place, what seemed to be a foggy forest, where pieces of the floor floated. The forest looked a lotlike the one in his dream. After he reached the man and the boy, they realized they were being followed, and the boy simply faded away in the fog. The man turned around to show bright red eyes and a sword filled with blood in right right hand. The Elderly bended down a little, to holdthe heavy weapon better, wth a single hand.
Aros, terrified, ran for his life, while being stalked by the old man. After reaching the place where the forest started, he realized the door he had used to enter was now gone, and turned around to see the old man striking at him with his sword. Aros dodge-rolled out of the way, to hear the same voice from before:
The power given
Can be used and shared
But to preform such a ritual
you must reach for your belt.
Aros had not noticed he was wearing a belt, so he reached for it, to find a sword attatched. When the old man striked, Aros blocked furiously, and countered with a spinning attack, with a single hand. The fog made it hard to see. The counter cut the elder's lip, and the samethrew his sword at Aros, who ducked and managed to avoid getting hit. Aros grabbed the old man's sword, and just when he was abot to hit the old man with the two swords, all the fog suddently focused itself on Aros, who got kicked into the party again, and thrown right on top of Kya. None of the swords, or the belt, were with him anymore. Kya seemed shocked, as he just popped out of nowhere.
Aros didn't know what was going on. When had he ever learned how to fight like that? Was the old man injured?
I feel like writing a whole new story, please read and tell me how it looks like:(notice the characters and beggining of my story is based on my first fanfic "life without a heart")
CHARACTERS
Aros(A-rose)- A black haired boy. Yet not the toughest fighter, has great ability to dodge and great motivation. Poseses much inteligence. He has a scar on his right eye ( His right ). Has small brown eyes. Posses much hidden power.
Kya(K-Eyea) - A mysterious girl with big green eyes, brown hair, and light skin. Aros's love interest. A flexible warrior. Yet not as ineligent as Aros, sometimes she seems to know more then him, and uses her inteligence better then him. She's not strong or weak. Her past seems to be a big blank.
Crad- a Dark boy who claims to know Kya. He seems to have enough power to speperate worlds.
Genkei (Jen-Key)- A mysterious Old Man who seems to serve as a guardian to Crad. [Have to get him into the story]
STORY:
Aros and Kya are getting ready to go out for a party, when Aros collapses. Kya, worried, had no one to call, and lied him on his bed.
While Aros was collapsed, he dreamed of a foggy, dark forest, where he was standing. After hearing a voice saying that he didn't have enough power for himself, he was terrified, but listened to the mysterious voice. It spoke about lending him power, and so he did. Light emarged from his skin, getting brighter and brighter until he was blinded, and he woke up. Aros decided not to tak about this to Kya, and he just said that he didn't get much sleep.
After they arrived at the party, Aros saw a boy- Crad-, who loked at him with a suspicious look.
Next to him was an elderly man with tanned skil, long, white hair and what apeared to be dark yellow eyes, almost green-Genkei- who slowly walked away of the party. Aros decided to follow the two. They seemed to have gone inside a secret door inside the building of the party. Aros showed up in a rather weird place, what seemed to be a foggy forest, where pieces of the floor floated. The forest looked a lotlike the one in his dream. After he reached the man and the boy, they realized they were being followed, and the boy simply faded away in the fog. The man turned around to show bright red eyes and a sword filled with blood in right right hand. The Elderly bended down a little, to holdthe heavy weapon better, wth a single hand.
Aros, terrified, ran for his life, while being stalked by the old man. After reaching the place where the forest started, he realized the door he had used to enter was now gone, and turned around to see the old man striking at him with his sword. Aros dodge-rolled out of the way, to hear the same voice from before:
The power given
Can be used and shared
But to preform such a ritual
you must reach for your belt.
Aros had not noticed he was wearing a belt, so he reached for it, to find a sword attatched. When the old man striked, Aros blocked furiously, and countered with a spinning attack, with a single hand. The fog made it hard to see. The counter cut the elder's lip, and the samethrew his sword at Aros, who ducked and managed to avoid getting hit. Aros grabbed the old man's sword, and just when he was abot to hit the old man with the two swords, all the fog suddently focused itself on Aros, who got kicked into the party again, and thrown right on top of Kya. None of the swords, or the belt, were with him anymore. Kya seemed shocked, as he just popped out of nowhere.
Aros didn't know what was going on. When had he ever learned how to fight like that? Was the old man injured?