Well I am writing many stories right now so I wanted you guy to tell me what you think.

 

In the world of ANTRIUM all is lost and forsaken, the evil tyrant Syntax has taken rule over the land. In this time of darkness only the good will stand up against his malice and take back their beloved land. Follow our heroes through an incredible journey of love, loss, action, adventure, betrayal, hardship, and death.

 

REDEMPTION:

The story of REDEMPTION is when a boy named Erik stumbles upon a hidden city deep beneath the earth of ANTRIUM. He finds himself being trained to be a samurai like warrior, amongst his training he becomes attached to this girl. As he tries to make a relationship and training to be a warrior he starts to have these burst of uncontrollable anger, soon these burst of anger turn into a beast that consumes him. Now eclipsed by darkness he tries to save himself from this beast, helplessly he looks to find his way to redemption.

 

Theme song: Savin' me by Nickelback.

Yes I give theme songs to my books, dont judge me I know you do it!!! lol joking.

Interesting, your use of vocabulary. I also being a writer find this as a repetition of classical literature and yet it is severed by originality. Through this concept I predict your story as it progresses to be interesting with many an addicting ways indeed.

 

I usually read everyone's stories on here as I wait for the next person to comment on my story T_T

hmm interesting idea. I'm sure this will come out great.

Thx guys I am glad you like it and thank you I do have a great vocabulary, I'm homedegmecated ya know lol

If only I knew how that felt T_T I am public schooled.

If only I knew how that felt T_T I am public schooled.

 

Honestly the only thing different is that I can see my underwear from my desk lol Joking!

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Hey I was making a joke man lol Now I was thinking that i could post some of the chapters on here if ya want. Idk if I am that good of a writer though. I dont line up the lines that the chars say in the book because I do that in editing after I am done writing the actual book.

Hey i'm just a kid in highschool. I'm not a professional author either but I enjoy writing. I don't like to write my chapters in paragraphs because i'm too lazy And I am done writing my book as well, well...as much of a book it can be.

Chapter 1: A Fall of A thousand Miles.

 

Erik walked along the blue moon lit path of stone, nothing in sight but barren stone. The blue stones reflected the moonlight as he kept his pace. The ground rumbled and cracked beneath him, separating like the Red-Sea, he fell into the deep crack beneath his feet. He was eclipsed by darkness with nothing to feel but the cold bitterness of the passing wind, for hours he fell into this dark abyss until he saw a blue light flicker . The light meant that ground was near and at the speed he was falling he was surely doomed. Placing his arms in front of his face he braced for impact, the ground grew nearer every second, he could now make out the grayish tone of the stone floor.

"Is this it? Is this how I die?" Was what ran through his head as he came closer to his doom. A blue light came around him, he removed his arms and found himself in a blue bubble like object, he looked around to see a small creature with brown cloths thrown about his body, his back was turned. "Be careful boy a fall down here is one thousand miles." He looked up at the crack that now showed the gleaming stars, "A thousand miles?" He repeated under his breath. The blue bubble dissapeared and I fell on to the floor, feet first, I steadied myself up against a stone wall, "Thanks for saving me," I said holding my head with one of my hands, "It was nothing." replied the creature, now turning around. His skin was red and he was short, he had massively long braids of white hair and a long white beard that hung from his chin, a walking stick in hand he said, "Now come with me, I have been expecting you." I raised my head and replied, "Expecting me?" He turned towards a large hole that was lit by torches, " I shall tell you later, for now follow me!" He headed into the hole and grabbed one of the torches that hing from the walls. We walked the hole for an hour, the walls were painted with drawings of what looked like great heroes fighting battles and saving the day, one drawing drew my attention, a man fighting a blue dragon like creature with a slithering body. I asked who were these people on the walls and the only response I got was, "Friends, old friends."

 

We came to a town with white clay buildings, the building's roofs were red tiles that swooped upward on the edges. The air was filled with a sweet yet savory smell, children played, women sewed and cooked, men worked. All was peaceful and tranquil. We came to two large red doors that were red with a golden dragon painted on the front, "Where am I?" I asked myself.

Hey i'm just a kid in highschool. I'm not a professional author either but I enjoy writing. I don't like to write my chapters in paragraphs because i'm too lazy And I am done writing my book as well, well...as much of a book it can be.

 

I know this book I wrote but it sucked, I hurried through it so it was so crappy that I couldn't believe I wrote it. Now though this remake is so much better. Oh and these chapters are so like dumbed down because like I would have 40 page responses if not, so this is not how the real book is.

I see. I have always been re-writing my stories...so much that...I remember them entirely by memory and can speak them at will. With each re-write makes the story better, added detail on each moment, different responses and characters etc.

I see. I have always been re-writing my stories...so much that...I remember them entirely by memory and can speak them at will. With each re-write makes the story better, added detail on each moment, different responses and characters etc.

 

yes that is so true, the original story was so dumb, now though I have added so much more emotion and what they say seem so real it's not even funny sometimes lol. By the way this is Erik but I am redoing his outfit so this si a very old picture of him.

interesting. If only I were good at drawing people or else I would draw my story's characters! lol.

interesting. If only I were good at drawing people or else I would draw my story's characters! lol.

 

Well I suck at drawing, my bro draws, you know him as LionheartXIII.

never heard of him. ROFL literally though...who?

never heard of him. ROFL literally though...who?

 

On the Forum there is user named LionheartXII look for him he is my bro.

I see, well I shall keep my eyes open then.

You put the bad pic of Erik on!

You put the bad pic of Erik on!

 

WELL IF YOU DREW THE NEW ONE i WOULD HAVE PUT IT ON... but you didn't so your lose man!! Please draw it dude lol

Am i interrupting a family affair now?

 

*ROFLMAO*

LOL!!! No im working on the new one