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I've been thinking a lot about my current title that I'm working on, under the name PROJECT: FEVER, and have decided to get an idea of audience reception. I am aware that an aspiring writer should never listen to critics, and remember that you are writing for yourself and your pleasure, not the critics. However, as there are many liek minded people here, I'm thinkin' of you Dusk xD, I'd share the Prologue to see how many 'bites' I get and depending on that I will share more..... sound like a plan?

Prologue

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July 15th, 2051. End of the school year. Another holiday....

A long journey, trapped in the family four-by-four, on a long road through the woods, to reach the small town they called home....

Father, with short, blazing red hair, green eyes and pale white skin drove. Mother, with flowing dark brown hair, hazel eyes and beautifully tanned skin rode passenger. In the back seat, leant back with arms crossed and eyes closed was the thirteen year old Son. Like his mother, he had a tanned complexion, but unlike either of the parents, he had a head of scruffy black hair. He wore his uniform, as all boys of his school did: anything they wanted provided they wear the black school coat. Today that consisted of a red long sleeve shirt and brown trousers under the big black coat. He had taken the liberty of customizing this necessity, the coat far too large for him, cutting the sleeves from it. He never had been one to conform.

“Looking forward to coming home?” Father asked, half-heartedly attempting to break the silence.

The boy made a neutral grunt of agreement.

“Your grades okay?”

“Pretty good this year,” the Son finally spoke, in a calm, but unnaturally low voice for child of his age; a voice that when heard felt like a warm embrace from a shadow itself: like it was there and inviting, but not actually there at all.

“They won’t last,” Mother chipped in coldly. The beautiful woman was sweet on the eyes, but far more bitter for those who knew her better, “You just wait ‘til next year. You’ll see!” in her ‘I-think-I-know-everything’ tone.

The boy’s mouth muscles twitched, struggling to remain in his contemplative state.

“And he knows it!”

“firetruck you,” he snarled, the warmth in his voice now a flare.

Both parents rounded on him, his father almost veering into a ditch, before quickly regaining control, and diverted his attention back to the road. A long silence ensued, but Mother would not let it last.

“We send you to school to learn....that?!” she spat, her hair spilling into her ever so beautiful face, “We should have sent you to...”

The boy finally opened his eyes, his chilling blue eyes that were alien to his blood, and looked his mother in the eye. In one swift movement, he struck the ranting woman across the face, choking her with her next words. She fell back to her seat, howling in pain and anger. Father began to sweat, but remained rigid in his seat with his eyes on the road, unsure of how to react to his son’s action.

With a smirk of hateful satisfaction he released his seatbelt, and opened his door. He jumped out, coat billowing black behind, into the fast moving empty road. He rolled twice before holding ground on one knee, grimacing from the rough impact as he fell forward onto his hands. Blood had already begun to run down his trousers and from his palms. He heard shouts of his father and the screaming woman from the vehicle he had so gracefully disembarked, which added its own screech as it skidded to a halt, but disregarded both and walked purposefully away from the noise.

It was only Father who came running towards the sight of the scruffy jet-black hair and billowing coat that passed the child’s knees. At the sound of shoes hitting tarmac, the child stopped and when the man finally drew close, he turned to face him. For what seemed like an age, they stood where they were: face to face; Father and Son; on the empty road through the woods, several miles from anywhere. Even the breeze seemed to still. Then they came together embracing: blazing and black hair, white and dark skins together, and the boy could hear his father whispering into his ear.

“Son...Just come home when you are ready. Return to the fam...Please.... I’ll always be here for you! I...”

His voice broke off into what the child knew unmistakably as tears, and a single tear ran down his own cheek.

 “I love you Fa...Dad,” he said in a level voice. Mother never approved of the ‘improper’ address.

“I love you too. I love you Son,” the man sobbed openly, unashamed.

With that, they broke apart and slowly, yet all too quickly, the child’s role model, family and old life walked away from him, closing the vehicle’s rear door before climbing in himself. He did not so much as glance back. The man simply could not bear to.

The engine restarted, and the boy watched the bulky green thing move on without him, his calmness lost, and an expression of complete loss and sorrow replaced the cool look and early maturity as another tear rolled down his face; a testament to his real age.

I can never go back...Can I.....?

He gritted his teeth and tried to fight his tears, and as the car finally disappeared from sight, he turned up his collar and walked with head down into the trees, tears rolling down his young face.

*

 It was many hours later before he finally returned to his home, and to find it empty. The car was parked in front of the garage, connected to the large old building, and nothing seemed obviously out of place or missing, save his parents.

The door was not locked, and with a sudden chill he realised that he hadn’t expected it to be. The front door led directly into the sitting room, and faced the staircase that ascended to the bedrooms and bathroom. It was here he sat, at the foot of the stairs, for hours that turned to days, only moving for necessities and waiting for a familiar face to come through that door. Even his forsaken mother would be of some comfort to him, but as the third day drew to a close, the thirteen year old boy knew that his father had abandoned him.

For time unknown, the child stayed home alone. As fortune had it, there was plenty of food in the house, but he did not eat much. He took his bedding from the tiny room he felt he had been ‘imprisoned’ in for so much of his life, and moved it all down to the sitting room. Soon, with the aid of his father’s old tool box and a lot of rip-work, he made a long ‘hammock’ of rags, strung across the length of the living room with a large number of nails in the wall at both ends. Customizing things had always been in his nature.

But the basics were easy. Things got a lot tougher. He began feeling strange bursts of energy, often leading to headaches and dizziness. But the blackouts were the worst, waking from something far from sleep in the midst of destroyed furniture, torn clothes and other broken objects, always feeling hot and at a complete loss of memory. The wreckage was almost certainly his work, so why could he not remember?

Time came and went totally irrelevantly, and the boy lived on (of course), always cautious of the next episode (as there certainly would be), and fighting to control himself. He lay in his long makeshift hammock in a plain white vest and jeans (holes singed just above his right knee and another just below his left) hands behind his head, eyes closed.

Remain calm. Think Clearly. Be ready...

This was the state he was found in.

 

 

0.5

 

The boy awoke in his hammock one morning to the sound of rattling at the front door, which led into the sitting room (now also his bedroom): somebody was trying to get in. As a marksman is well practised for the shoot, so was he. Instinctively he reached into his father’s toolbox, now kept under his hammock, and drew a large, heavy wrench. The door finally clicked open and the boy hurled the tool with extreme force and precision at the newcomer. There was a splintering crunch as the projectile took a chunk out of the old oak door and crashed against the wall in a small explosion of pale orange plaster, before clattering to the floor.  The marksman had missed his mark, but not by far, as a large, pale white head came around the door. The boy’s hand froze as he caught the glint from the blackglasses, his hand already hovering over his box of projectiles, as the man’s body came through the door.

He was a large man in an expensive black suit and pale blue shirt full of belly that hung over his trousers, his shoes polished to perfection. He was old, with deep creases across his forehead, his eyes hidden by the small blackglasses mounted on a large protruding nose. Despite being almost totally bald, he had a long, bushy moustache of the purest white, whiter than his own skin even, like two small bleached fox tails. 

It took a moment, but the boy, rising from the hammock and taking a few steps forward, finally recognized the aged intruder.

“Grandfather?” he breathed.

“Ha ha! Child, you almost killed your own blood!” the man raved happily, “It has been quite a while, Grandson.”

A look of hope spread over the boy’s face, reflecting his youth, but quickly disappeared, “They’re not here.”

The wide grin also faded from his grandfather’s wide face, “Yes, a week now? Getting on two?”

The boy remained silent, searching the empty black lenses in vain. His grandfather seemed to almost forget him, and did a once over of the room. It was a large room with faint orange wallpaper and a wooden floor. It had a burgundy leather sofa (not long ago it had contained two), a large plasma screen television and a vast fire place dominating the room. It was a sitting room for those who could afford to make it so, but now there was wreckage of all sorts cluttering the floor and by the doorway to the kitchen was where one end of the ‘hammock’ was now pitched.

He smiled and, almost as if thinking aloud, said “I thought you would have a little more imagination, you know. Your own house and all you show for it is this rag?” He had turned to look at the wall, now with many more nails in than it had a week ago, and a great number more than it had had two weeks ago.

“How did you know? How did you know they were gone?” the boy’s warm shadow of a voice rose in tone slightly as he slipped of his rag sheets and stepped towards the old man. However his grandfather was still scanning the room, and did not answer.

“Grandfather!”

“Child, not for a moment believe that I am here for no reason, nor by mere coincidence,” he snapped impatiently, still facing away from him, but he could see his white moustache bob with every word. His voice becoming stern, “Do you have any idea what your future could hold? Surely you don’t intend on living here in solitude until you can no longer keep yourself alive?”

“What do you...?”

The old man turned to face him at last, creases deepening across his forehead, “You have something nobody else has! You have no idea!”

“But Grandfather, I have nothing.”

“Nothing?! OH-HO-HO!” he leaned back, which looked remarkably like a large egg tilting, and laughed long and loud. His laugh was like a screeching roar, the bushy moustache bouncing with a life of its own, but all too quickly he was forward and serious again, “Dear boy, do you really believe that you are like everybody else?” He raised a white gloved hand to his temple in thought before looking up again, “Have you not been suffering for some time now? Insomnia? Loss of memory perhaps?”

The boy did not reply, but merely looked at his balled fist, opening it and flexing his nimble fingers, frowning. However, his grandfather had seen the answer in the child’s eyes. His small blackglasses gleamed, and when the boy finally looked up, he saw his own chilling eyes staring back at him.

“You want to control that. You want your memories. You... not even I understand fully what is at hand here!”

On saying this, the large man noticed a heavily burnt sofa, one of burgundy leather, tidied away to the far corner of the room, half in and half out of the cupboard under the stairs. He only noticed now the light smell in the stuffy air of the scorched material.

“But how?”

Once again the elderly man’s glasses gleamed as a wide grin broke across his face, “Grandson, I am a man of great intellect!” Tapping his bald head with a gloved knuckle, “You know, I am one of the world’s leading scientists, and together we will...hmm... fix you, if you take the term.”

The boy looked down at his feet. No he didn’t. He didn’t understand most of what was going on. What was wrong with him? What is this thing he had that interested his grandfather so? He had no family besides the man before him, no real life or friends. At this he bit down hard on his lower lip, holding back the tears of loneliness. All he had was this forsaken house, and a slowly depleting store of food. He was only thirteen for Christ’s sake! One thing was sure in the boy’s mind however: he needed answers.

Slowly, turning on his heel, he returned to his hammock, closing his eyes, and lay in the way he had become accustomed to, wishing the world away.

“I know this is difficult,” the elderly voice came from close by, suddenly morose, “but things will get out of hand if you don’t learn to control yourself.” He heard a clattering sound on the floor as his grandfather kicked away shards of plates. “If you grow up with these problems, in fear at that, who knows what will become of you!”

The child in the hammock bit back the retort that rose to his lips; something about him not being afraid. He would have been lying. He was very alone, confused and afraid. He lay still, taking it all in, stretching the silence.

“How long have you known?” the warm, soft voice came at last.

There was another silence, this time broken by Grandfather’s response.

“I’ve had suspicions for years: suspicions that there may be some...unique piece to your puzzle, if you catch my drift? You have your very own project in the central laboratory! Yes, ever since a very early age, you have had files with your name on in the database.”

“And you never cared to tell me that I’ve been a part of one of your little experiments?”

“You could not understand! The information was to be kept from you for a later stage in your life, but I suppose fate has its way ultimately. Even as a scientist, I can accept that. Your father knew....”

“My father?” he spat in a mixture of surprise and resentment, before questions came to him that he should have asked before: “Where is he now? Dead, maybe?” His eyes flicked open, his cold blue eyes fell on the old man, and not even he could not resist a flinch. His eyes were frightening, sharp and dangerous. Grandfather hung his head in silence. He feared those eyes, but he had also seen the flicker of flame in his grandson’s eyes.

“Is he?” the warm, dark voice becoming hot and more forceful, yet mesmerising at the same time. His chilling gaze locked onto the large man’s glasses. He now looked like an egg tipped forward.

The man sighed. “I don’t know, in all honesty.” He thought under the cold glare, finding the words before looking into the chilling eyes, “We were going to tell you together, your father and I. He decided that he would leave you to me. He didn’t want to disrupt your progress, you must understand, but...” He turned from the boy, shaking his head, and gazed out of the window across the room, by the corner with the television in it (it was remarkable how the set had not been scathed by the child’s unexplained wrath) and his blackglasses were now catching the full glare of the rising sun. “He wasn’t supposed to have left! Not now. Not at all...”

The old man said no more, but it was enough: the pieces were coming together. He began to understand. He had been abandoned. Father had left him. Grandfather turned and stepped towards the hammock, his beady eyes hidden behind the black lenses.

 “I won’t force you to do anything you do not wish to, Grandson, but for the greater good please come with me. I will help you hone your abilities. I will teach you to control the fire inside....” He extended a hand to the boy, “But of course, the choice is yours.”

For a minute, the boy just lay there.

 I need to find the answers... Power...Fire inside...  Knowledge... Knowledge is...power, right?

When he opened his eyes, the hand was still there. So the boy with the scruffy black hair took his grandfather’s hand, and got up onto his feet.

Edited by Ajexmi

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This was a pretty great and interesting story, Ajexmi! I enjoyed it! Hope to see more of it. :)

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This was a pretty great and interesting story, Ajexmi! I enjoyed it! Hope to see more of it. :)

 

 

Thanks Keys, hope this gives some motivation and encouragement *wink wink* looks like it's not too hot on the community though!

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for kicks, here's the first  and second chapter following the prologue above as they are quite short. Again, depending on popularity I may post more (I have recently finished Chapter 6).

 

 

1.

He was running.

He did not have to be, but he was anxious. He had something that did not belong to him, and the fear of being discovered with it brought his feet one in front of the other that little bit faster. However, his own curiosity also burned inside of him, and could not wait to stop and look at what he had taken the night before. He had not dared to look yet.

Miles Teleί was a 12 year old boy attending Homewood High School. He had a messy mass of sandy hair, watery blue eyes and a small nose, dotted with a few sparse freckles. A faded brown rucksack bobbed up and down on his back as he went.

He ran past the Homewood front gate and the low hedgerow, rounding into the staff car park. There were only five spaces here, so even for staff it was exclusive. They had planned to meet here early, so there was only one car, a black BMW, outside the main entrance, and perhaps only two dozen kids on the playground. There, leaning on the gleaming black vehicle, was Molly.

The girl was admiring her beautiful blonde hair, that was just breaking over her small shoulders, in the car’s wing mirror when Miles came running, but did not break her reflection’s gaze until she was done looking. When she was finally satisfied, she averted her emerald green eyes to the now panting Miles. She looked at him blankly for a moment.

“You ran here?” she asked, with some content.

Miles frowned at her, “No I... caught the... bus! Of course I...  ran!” he replied sarcastically between pants.

“Okay Mr. Funny-Guy, did you get it?”

Miles nodded. He looked fearful, but he was too far gone to go back on what he had done. He was right where Molly wanted him. He swung the rucksack off his back onto the ground, and slowly unzipped it. They both kneeled down behind the car to inspect the stolen artefact. Miles pulled the book out of the bag.

Their breath stopped when the thing came out: Miles in a mixture of fear and awe; Molly now that her prize was finally within her grasp. The book had no title, no lettering on the spine, no blurb. However, such a thing did not need these things to attract the eye. Its cover was made from black leather, cracking with age, looking like some sort of antique heirloom from some long past generation. But it was beautiful, and on the front, right in the centre, was a single picture, with white outlines to contrast the black: two roses with their stems twisted together; one blood red, the other a deeper black than the cover itself.

Neither Miles nor Molly had never seen the small treasure so close up, nor touched it, let alone seen what lay beyond the cover. Molly had been the one to point this out, and also the one to lay the idea of ‘borrowing’ it seductively upon Miles. As he had many times before, he had done as she liked.

He dropped into a sitting position on the tarmac and just stared at it, turning it over and running his hands across the texture.

“Miles,” the small blonde girl said sweetly.

“Yeah?”

“Open the stupid thing!”

“Sorry, I was just kinda....”

She struck him, a little harder than playfully, on the side of his head.

“Wake up! You’re wasting time.”

Miles hesitated. He lowered his gaze “Maybe this was a bad idea, Molly.”

He was sure she would probably hit him again, or snatch the book away, but the blow that came was much harder than any Molly could have dealt. As soon as the words were out of his mouth the book was indeed snatched away, but by someone standing behind him who then struck the back of Miles’ head with it hard enough to send him sprawling onto the tarmac before he even noticed the book was out of his hands. The book looked delicate, but the leather cover took such usage without cracking further.

Molly backed away, intending to run, but only to find her back pressed up against another figure’s legs. The two younger children looked up into the beautiful face of Claire, Molly’s sixteen year old sister. She was incredibly pretty, and looked a lot like her younger sister. However, what differentiated between them was their hair. Whilst Molly’s hair was bleach blonde (and ever changing in style), Claire’s was a beautifully unique blue-gold: more gold than blonde, with a blue gleam that was simply stunning. Unlike her younger sister, she always let her hair fall naturally in wide ringlets, as Molly herself had hers today.

“Well now,” she cooed patronizingly, her hands on her hips, “what do we have here?”

A deep chill swept through Miles, the throbbing pain in his head forgotten. If Claire was here, that meant he was here too! He got to his knees and turned to see that his assumption was correct. He knew it. He just knew it.

 Standing over him, the early morning breeze making his coat dance dramatically about his legs, satchel over one shoulder and the book in hand was Raymond Blaine; black needle-like hair cascading about his dark, handsome face. Miles’ eyes locked with Raymond’s: the cold, frightening blue piercing his own.

“Thieves, that’s all,” his shady voice replied devoid of interest, but Miles knew better. He was not happy about this. Not happy at all.

Before Molly could make her escape, Claire crossed her arms across her chest, holding her where she stood.

“And what should we do with these thieves, do you think?” she said casually, bending over to look her younger sister in the eyes. Her sister looked back with the pinch of fear Claire wanted from her, and also a little resentment.

“Do what you will with your own.” Raymond leant over the small boy and pulled him up by the shirt with his free hand. With that he turned and walked around the black BMW towards the school playground, slipping the book carefully into his satchel as he went.

“Hey,” Claire called after him, “where are you going? You’re letting him get away with stealing that? You know how important that is to us!”

The metal gate slammed shut behind him.

“Urgh, that boy!” she growled. She let go of her sister and slid over the BMW’s shiny bonnet, before swinging herself very nimbly over the gate after Raymond. Miles and Molly watched Claire chase after Raymond for a few seconds from behind the BMW before Molly cuffed Miles about the head.

“What the hell, Molly!? Haven’t I been hit in the head enough for one morning?”

“You idiot! We never got to see what’s so special about their stupid book!”

 

 

2.

 

Although their stolen prize had been lost, it seemed that Miles’ beating was not over for the day, as he soon found out after school ended that day.

Not long after the final bell rang through the corridors of Homewood School at 3.30pm, the double doors leading onto the playground were thrown open and a slow trickle of kids started to pour out down the concrete steps and on to freedom, gaining velocity every minute until there was a gushing flood of bodies.

Miles was one of the last to appear out of the doors, walking slowly out into the afternoon sun. He looked incredibly tired, even though he had done nothing at all strenuous that day. The thought of his bed flooded his mind, dozing off to the sound of his new Ceasefire album perhaps, when his foot didn’t make contact with the next concrete step. Instead he kicked against something less solid, sending him sprawling down the steps. He landed hard on his side in attempting to recover from the fall before he landed. The impact painfully numbed his right arm, and the books in his rucksack flew forward inside and gave him the day’s fourth knock on the head.

As he slowly pulled himself up a cruel shrill laugh came from behind him. He rose to one knee as he turned to see who had sent him down the steps.

“Oh no, Teleί, get back down on all fours, like a dog! That look really works for you.” This was followed by more shrieking laughter.

Miles got to his feet and stood up straight, facing the boy who had tripped him, trying to hide his discomfort. The boy leaning against the wall was older than he was, 16 or 17 in Raymond’s year, but very short. He had a squashed face, which looked like someone had been using his face as a punch bag with too little sand in, with small eyes and nose, dotted with freckles. The small face was topped with very short ginger hair, and it looked like the kid was also trying to grow sideburns: little orange bristles outlining his jaw.

He was not alone. He was flanked by two bigger boys, both about 17 and unlike the ginger kid they were actually taller than they meant to be. Obviously his ‘henchmen’, if you could call them that. Their eyes were both spread too widely apart, and a mess of unwashed blonde hair splayed across their foreheads. The two were evidently brothers.

By now the ginger boy had stopped laughing and was glaring at him loathingly.

“You really ought to listen to my advice, runt. It may do you some good!”

Miles sneered. “I’ll let you know when I’m at rock bottom and need your advice, when we’re on the same level, Hammersmith.”

Hammersmith and the Goon brothers all took a very aggressive step forward before catching themselves in mid-step. A small dash of fear swept Hammersmith’s face. Absolutely nothing passed over the Goons’ faces.

“Very witty, kid.  That was a real bombshell,” Raymond said dryly from behind Miles, clapping patronisingly. Miles turned to look at him but saw that he was not looking at him, but at Hammersmith. Claire was waiting further behind him, with Molly stood just behind her. ‘How long had they been there?

“What the firetruck do you want, Blaine? Don’t you have something better to do than watch this little runt?”

Raymond used a hand to gently brush a few stray black needles from his eyes. “Not especially. Question is, Wayne, don’t you have anything better to do than pick fights with little kids - three on one?”

“You watch it Blaine, or you’re gonna get it!” Hammersmith snarled as the Goon on his left cracked his knuckles.

At this point Claire had obviously decided that she wanted to be a part of the action and had come over to stand on the other side of Miles.

“Get what, Wayne? What you were probably gonna give poor little Miles if you had kept him on all fours?”

Although the joke sailed over Miles’ head, it coaxed a smirk from Raymond, and slightly more from the knuckle cracker, who snorted loudly and laughed deeply to himself. Hammersmith reacted to this by swiftly bringing his fist into the large kid’s crotch, toppling him down and turning his sniggers to whines. A sick grin passed over his face.

“Yeah, you better watch it. Watch your runt and your bitch, Blaine.” He took a step towards Claire. “I might just do to you what you think I was gonna do to him, but it won’t matter if you’re on all fours or not!”

The joke didn’t seem too funny to anyone anymore. Claire, however, recovered quickly.

“Uh huh.... Tall order, buddy!”

Hammersmith growled and stuck his middle finger up at her. “F*ck you.”

“Hey, I didn’t realise how small your digits were, Wayne-o. You know what they say ‘bout small hands, right?” She gave him a wink.

Hammersmith turned a deep red and spat on the ground. “We’re gone, but we aren’t done with you. Come on!” he snarled, storming away for the metal gate by the front entrance, the Goons lolloping after him.

Miles looked up at Raymond, having not understood half of what had been insinuated. Raymond stared emotionlessly after Wayne Hammersmith until they were out of his sight, but Miles knew Raymond could tell he was looking at him. He averted his gaze to Claire, as if asking with his eyes what had just happened. She smiled down at him and ruffled his sandy hair, before walking over to Raymond to bring him back into the real world, as Hammersmith had disappeared already. Molly just looked at him blankly. This was one of the few times she had nothing to say, and Miles had to ask himself why that was.

Claire crossed her legs and fell slowly against Raymond’s shoulder, folding her arms and using him as support. They stood there like that for a minute or two, Raymond sill staring beyond the gate, before Claire broke the silence.

“You know, have you ever wondered if those two cronies actually have names?”

At this Raymond, did not laugh, but offered her a smile. She always could overlook trouble and remain carefree. He shoved her gently back into a standing position.

“Come on. Let’s head off.”

Edited by Ajexmi

Pretty good chapters! :) The story is getting quite interesting. Hope to see more of it.

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