Each day I will try to post a new chapter. Please comment your opinions suggestions  ideas and criticism (don't worry about being hash, it'll only make me better just don't be douche about it.)

 

Prologue

 

Many years ago there was a man from a world called Destiny Islands. This man was insane and a genius. This man was named, Xehanort. Xehanort believed that from destruction comes creation. Xehanort wanted to start a war of mass destruction constructed of Keyblade wielders fighting for the original Keyblade (X-Blade). This was was known as, the Keyblade War.

Keyblade were weapons, swords, that were shaped as keys to resemble the X-Blade. The Keyblade chooses it's wielder and only chooses those with strong hearts. Xehanort was too, a Keyblade wielder. Even though his heart was corrupted by darkness, it was still strong.

Xehanort caused serious damage to many people and caused worlds to fall to darkness in goal to gain Kingdom Hearts. Keyblade wielders everywhere would battle to also gain control of Kingdom Hearts.

Seven Keyblade wielders harnessing light stood up to Xehanort and his followers and returned the world to light and saved many people. These seven heroes were forever thanked and were entitled "The Seven Lights"

Now a new bringer of darkness will try to gain complete control over Kingdom Hearts and new seven lights will have to step out from the shadows and rise against the darkness brought from this new foe. 

Edited January 2, 201312 yr by NadryxReversexRebirth320

Chapter One

-Radiant Garden

 

   Sitting up on top of a building with his best friend  well... his only friend, was a teenage boy by the name of Alex. Alex has straight white hair that is tossed to one side, barely passing his right eye... which are blue. He wears a white, unzipped jacket with short sleeves and a black hood over a black shirt with no real design. He also has just a simple pair of blue jeans and a black white checkered belt that is only in one belt loop on his left side, causing it to slouch to the right. Alex is 17 years old but only feels as if he was only half a year. Why is that you ask? Well that is just because he can not for the life of god recall anything from his past. The last thing he remembers if the moment he met, Tiffany. Tiffany is the only person he knows, or at least that he remembers. Tiffany is the same age as Alex and very beautiful. She wore a blue silk skirt over her black leggings, and a jacket that seemed to match both. Her hair was long and golden and seemed to shine just like her blue eyes, simply amazing. 

 

   "Hey Tiff..." Alex began as he looked down upon the people walking around the square. "Do you remember how we met?" For some strange reason, that moment has been troubling him.

 

   "Of course!" She said as she turn her attention from the crowd to the clouds moving by. "How could i forget!"

 

   ~ FLASH BACK ~

   I Was walking home from this exact spot, walking down an alley. It was very late and very dark, I was scared. That's when i saw a boy sitting next to a dumpster, lost and confused. The expression on your face was blank... as if you had no life in you. Your eyes were plain and zombie like, staring of into nothing. 

 

   "Hiya! What may your name be?" I greeted. Silence. "Huh?" I tilted my head, puzzled by your lack of response. "Well my name's Tiffany!" I smiled. 

 

   It was a that moment that i turned around because of a sound but before i could even realize where it came from a creature attacked me. A shadow of some sort, with antennas and two big, glowing eyes. That's when it happened! Like a flash you were in front of me, on your feet and no longer lost. You saved me with some key like weapon. I was in awe my that key. Even though there was no light, it still seemed to sparkle....You turned and faced me and said...

   ~FLASH BACK ENDED~

 

   "...Alex.....Is my name-" Alex interrupted  He continued to stare upon the people, lost in thought. "Isn't it getting late? Maybe i should walk you home." Alex stood up and looked down at Tiffany who only then changed her focus fro the sky to Alex and they both smiled. Alex held out his hand and helped he  up. "C'mon!" Alex put Tiffany on his shoulders and jumped of the building into the crowd. Vanishing from the scene.

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 2-Land of Departure

Four guys stood in a room… a big room at that; some sort of hall or announcement chamber. There was a lot of open space, two entrances that were on the same end of the room but on opposite walls facing each other and three gigantic chairs; thrones if you will on the other side of the room. One man was standing in front of the center throne facing the others who were standing in formation. He must be in charge in some way, perhaps a master?

   “By now… I am pretty sure you know why I have called you here today.” The Master began. The Master wore silver royal armor with broad shoulder pieces and a cape. “Darkness has once again threatened the worlds as it once has before in ‘The Era of The Seven Lights.' I, unfortunately, do not know who is behind the darkness. But whoever it may be, has taken action in a serious crime… three Princesses of Heart have already gone missing. Killed or taken, this cannot be good.” The three students’ eyes widened when they heard this but remained focused. “I want you three to go forth, save the princesses, and figure out who is behind the darkness.” The master’s coal black eyes narrowed and his face tensed. “Only four remain… but for how long?” He then combed his grey bangs that rested on his brow out of his face, and they fell back into place while he smirked. “This will be the first test of your Mark of Mastery Exam.” He turned around and his silver transparent cape whirled with him. He put his hands behind his back holding his wrist. He walked between two thrones and behind the one he was standing in front just moments ago. “If you live after finding this new bringer of darkness, meet me at Disney Castle… I must go and speak with the king. We’re going to hold down the fort there.”

 

 “Master! Where should we begin?” One student asked eagerly. You could almost fell the tension in his voice. His spiky, upright, black hair just barely moving by some breeze entering the room; his brown eyes staring at his master for more information. 

“That is for you three to decide…” Is all the master left them with before dismissing them. The three students left the audience chamber to the courtyard outside.

 “Where do you think we should go?” Asked Zaiz, the one who asked the master the same exact thing, standing there in a yellow short-sleeve shirt with a dark blue sleeve (yes only one) on his right arm and a gauntlet on his left hand. 

 “I think we should split up, we could cover more ground that way.” Raynd answered. 

 “I will go check on the remaining princesses and warn them of the dangers. “ Turk volunteered. Dressed in a black zipped up vest over a yellow long sleeved shirt. He hit some circle shaped device that was on his left arm that began to light up, immediately making a full body suit of black armor with golden trimming appear. He then summoned a key shaped sword, a keyblade. He took the keyblade and threw it into the air like a boomerang and when it returned to him, it was no longer a keyblade but what appeared to be a cross of a scooter and a pair of skies. The device that was once his keyblade, and strangely resembles it, hovered. Turk got one and gave Raynd and Zaiz a two figure salute fair well, with a grin and his green eyes gleamed with confidence through his slick, blue bangs the just only barely revealed his eyes. He said good luck and took off into some type of portal that opened in front of him. 

 “Where will you go?” Raynd asked Zaiz. Raynd was ready to get going and become a master. Anyone that was looking at him at that moment could tell just by the way his bright blue eyes shined with eagerness. He turned towards Zaiz after watching Turk fly off. Standing there in his black short-sleeve jacket; unzipped showing off a red shirt. His brown spiky hair blowing with the gust of wind that blew when he spoke.

“Well we need to stop the spreading of the darkness so I guess I could go and start sealing keyholes.” Zaiz suggested.

   “Good idea, I will head out and scout for information about the master mind behind this.”The two nodded in agreement and simultaneously hit their arms triggering their armor to appear. Raynd’s was red with black trimming and Zaiz’z was blue with yellow trimming. The two threw their keyblade’s into the air and they returned as gliders just as Turk’s did. Raynd got on his which resembled a hover board while Zaiz resembled a bike. They flew off threw the same portal Turk did and it shrank from existance.

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter Three

-Radiant Garden

 

  Alex was walking Tiffany home after spending the day together. The two were in a dark alley way and because of the buildings surrounding them and the setting sun, they were in shadows; no light could reach them. No one was around...it was silent. 

   "Why did you want to walk around this way this time?" Tiffany asked, it was the longest way to her house. 

   "Dunno, just felt like it..." Alex responded Thoughts of his past pulse through him, but why now? 'What makes today any different?' He thought silently. They came up to a dumpster and Alex stopped. "This is....."

   "...Where we first met." Tiffany finished with a smile, then she looked at Alex and the smile quickly melted. "What's wrong?" Alex's face was full of shock and worry as if he knew something that she did not. “Did I miss something?” Alex’s keyblade appeared out of nowhere, it was the first time since they first met.

“You sure have a great sense of danger…” A mysterious yet familiar voice interrupted the moment. Alex spun around to find himself staring at silhouette with a serious tone in his eyes. “But you’re still not ready.” Th figure finished as he walked out of the shadows revealing his face, which much surprise look suspiciously like Alex himself; same hair. Same clothes but they were black and his eyes were yellow and felt cold when you looked into them. “, Alex.” He smiled.

Alex’s eyes widened when he saw the man’s face but quickly reversed. “Who are you?!” He said, keyblade in hand prepared to defend.

“Why… you should know better than anyone.” The man rushed towards Alex with shadowy after images followed, he had darkness encasing his hand in flames as he palm thrust Alex’s gut causing him to fold over in pain and dropping to his knees. The man then picked up Tiffany and slung her over his shoulder. She pounded on his back but that didn’t faze him. With a flick of his wrist he opened a corridor of darkness and left thought it, leaving Alex with a great pain and a few parting words. “Come and get me.” He snarled with a grin.

Alex laid there hopelessly, unable to move after that blow to his gut. “How could I be so weak?”

 

 

 

Chapter Four

-Radiant Garden

 

Just arriving at the world, Raynd was on his Keyblade Glider. He chose this world simply because it was a great source of information since it was somewhat of a traveler’s refuge. ‘Wonder where to begin…’ He thought as he landed in the shadows of the night, several hours have passed since Tiffany was taken.

Raynd was up on a high building where he could see nearly everything around him. The moon was behind him gleaming with the reflection of the sun; making his hair shine. His glider turned back into his keyblade in his hand then vanished. He took a quick glance around him to get a feel of his surroundings then put his hood on; hiding his face. He looked down and saw someone or something based out in an alley way. ‘Is his okay?’ He leaped of the building to another; one roof top to another, gradually getting closer to the man on ground level.

He finally reached the man to find him lying on his side still holding his stomach. Raynd crouched down and woke him up by lightly pushing his shoulder. “Are you okay?” He said just loud enough for the man waking up could hear him.

Alex’s eyes slowly opened to find someone he has never seen before crouched down beside him. “How long was I out?” Alex asked, forgetting about what just happened to him.

“I’m unsure, I just arrived here.” Raynd answered as he stood up and held out a hand, offering Alex help up. Alex took the gesture and rose to his feet. “What happened to you?” He asked Alex.

“I… don’t remember…” Alex said. He started thinking really hard then got a troubled look on his face. “Tiffany!” He exclaimed. “I’ve got to save her!” He said in a worried yet eager tone. He began to run off but quickly stopped and looked back to where the person who attacked him once stood. “But where did he even go?”

“Where did who go? Can you tell me what happened?” Raynd was completely clueless; Alex’s reaction was so sudden, something must have happened.

“I don’t know who it was.” Alex said, remembering his attackers face. “Who are you anyway? Nobody I know would care about some guy in the street, they would have walked pass… you not from here are you?”

Raynd nodded. “You pretty observant, aren’t you?” Raynd took of his hood and revealed his face. “Name’s Raynd. I’m looking for information about a spreading of darkness, it’s a little complicated but I’m afraid I cannot give you all the details. But as it seems you’ve just had something dark happen to you, huh? Your reaction to my question told me that. So, tell me what happened and I can promise you that I will help you if I can.”

Alex then told Raynd about what happened and about the man that looked just like him and what has happened to Tiffany.

“This guy might as well be the person I am after and if so then he has it for you for some reason that is unclear. But if this is so, then you need protect. I’m not supposed to do this but I will bring you with me.” Raynd then realized how he travels from world to world. “… I can’t, I can’t take you with me. I have no way for you to join me.”

The out of nowhere heartless appeared from the shadows and then Raynd summoned his keyblade. “Don’t worry, I’ll handle these guys!” He exclaimed but his words were spoken to soon because Alex was already charging at them with his keyblade which Raynd did not see appear. He stared at Alex’s keyblade in shock. ‘He too wields a keyblade?’ He thought to himself. 

Edited January 7, 201312 yr by Zephyr_320

I love it! Keep it coming man

This is great, I'll keep reading.As a suggestion, I'd say to add more detail. For example, instead of "Xehanort wanted to start a second Keyblade War", it could be more in-depth, along the lines of "Xehanort, primarily due to curiosity, wanted to start a second Keyblade War. This would cause light and darkness to clash and forge the legendary X-Blade and of course, summon the source of all in the worlds, Kingdom Hearts." Nothing specific, but that'd probably be best, especially in the event of someone not knowing what this or that is. This problem was frequent in the prologue but not quite as much in Chapter 1.

Edited January 2, 201312 yr by CloakedSchemerX

I fixed the prologue 

Chapter 2 is posted; i added it to the same post as chapter 1

Chapter 3 is now up, i posted with the others.

Chapter 4 is now up and posted, tell me what you guys think!

This is great man please keep it coming! ^^

This is pretty good so far! Keep it up!

I really enjoyed the story, it captured the feel of Kh well. And the characters voices are very distinct. There were some grammatical errors though, which I will add in these quotes for ease of reading. Do it out of love Shera. I messed up on the quoting a bit so it might seem scattered.

Edit: Edits need editing.

 

Each day I will try to post a new chapter. Please comment your opinions suggestions  ideas and criticism (don't worry about being hash, it'll only make me better just don't be douche about it.)

 

Prologue

 

This man was insane, but also a genius.

Xehanort caused serious damage to many people and caused worlds to fall to darkness in his goal to gain Kingdom Hearts. Keyblade wielders everywhere would battle to also gain control of Kingdom Hearts.

Chapter One

-Radiant Garden

 

   Sitting up on top of a building with his best friend  well... his only friend, was a teenage boy by the name of Alex. Alex has straight white hair that is tossed to one side, barely passing his right eye... which are blue. He wears a white, unzipped jacket with short sleeves and a black hood over a black shirt with no real design. He also has just a simple pair of blue jeans and a black white checkered belt that is only in one belt loop on his left side, causing it to slouch to the right. Alex is 17 years old but only feels as if he was only half a year. Why is that you ask? Well that is just because he can not for the life of god recall anything from his past

This is more of a comment than an edit, but I'd remove "Just" from the sentence as it undermines what happened to Alex. Also, if you mention god be prepared for backlash.

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   "Of course!" She said as she turn her attention from the crowd to the clouds moving by. "How could I forget!" Mostly just me nitpicking on caps and such.

 

    It was very late and very dark, so I was scared.

 

  I was in awe my that key.

  This could go a few ways actually. I was in awe, my that key. Or, I was in awe from that key I WANT A KEY It just depends on what you meant to say.

 

   "... Alex held out his hand and helped heR  up. "C'mon!" Alex put Tiffany on his shoulders and jumped off the building into the crowd, vanishing from the scene.

 

Chapter One

 The master’s coal black eyes narrowed and his face tensed. I like the description here.

“Only four remain… but for how long?” He then combed his grey bangs that rested on his brow out of his face, and they fell back into place while he smirked. “This will be the first test of your Mark of Mastery Exam.”  He walked between two thrones, and behind the one he was standing in front of just moments ago as well.

“ Turk volunteered. Turk got one and gave Raynd and Zaiz a two figure salute farewell, with a grin as his green eyes gleamed with confidence through his slick, blue bangs even though they only just barely revealed his eyes. He said good luck and took off into some type of portal that opened in front of him.

 

  “Good idea, I will head out and scout for information about the mastermind behind this.” Mastermind is one word.

 

Raynd got on his which resembled a hover board while Zaiz's resembled a bike. They flew off through the same portal Turk did and it shrank from existence.

 

 

Alex responded Thoughts of his past pulse through him, but why now?

Could either be Alex responded. Or Alex responded, as thoughts of his past pulsed through him. Unless you meant to say Alex was saying thoughts of his past pulse through him atm, if not then it needs to be pulsed.

‘Wonder where to begin…’ He thought as he landed in the shadows of the night, several hours have passed since Tiffany was taken.

I suppose this connects the 2 stories but, as far as I can remember the town wasn't mentioned as Radiant garden prior to this. And having the hours info connected to his story was slightly jarring. Might be better as 2 different sentences with the one mentioning Tiffany first.

Raynd was up on a high building where he could see nearly everything around him. He looked down and saw someone or something based out in an alley way.

Based out? Did you mean passed out, knocked out, or out of it?

 

‘Is he okay?’ He leaped off the building, jumping from rooftop to rooftop, gradually getting closer to the man on ground level.

Rooftop is one word.

 

Nobody I know would care about some guy in the street, they would have walked past… you're not from here are you?”

 

“This guy might just be the person I am after as well, and if so then he has it out for you for some reason that is unclear.

 

But if this is so, then you need protection.

 

Then out of nowhere heartless appeared from the shadows, and Raynd summoned his keyblade ready to defend himself and Alex. “Don’t worry, I’ll handle these guys!” He exclaimed but his words were spoken too late because Alex was already charging at them with his keyblade which Raynd did not see appear.

Edited February 8, 201312 yr by Indecypher

thanks everyone for your input! I'm sorry i haven't been posting on here I've been really slacking here lately to thanks to the interest of a couple of new fans i think i'm going to pick up the slack and post the next chapter soon