Hell's Dragon an Original story written by Me I plan on writing this story like a short Novel and i just wanted to get some crit on it for now so heres the First chapter of the first Arc of Hell's Dragon. Also i would like to greatly thank Stardustblade358 who has been helping out with my story by doing all the original character designs for me and has been helping me get some ideas for different story ideas along the way Thanks a mill Star
Hell’s Dragon
Male protagonist
The Year is 2020. Tristan Mahon an average boy of 17 years who has spiky Black hair and green eyes finds his life to be rather dull but over two months ago Tristan along with the rest of his family moved to Ireland for a change in life style and Tristan has taken it upon himself to make it so his new life in Ireland won’t be as boring and lonely as the one he lived in America. Sadly for Tristan he may of bit off more than he could chew with that idea.
Chapter 1
Tristan
Tristan sat in the back of classroom in the last class of the school day. Tristan sat in the class patiently waiting for the school bell to ring to let him know the day was finally done. A few moments later the bell then finally rang signaling the end of the school day. Slowly as if not even bothered Tristan began to throw his books into his bag and then throwing his bag over his shoulder slowly Tristan began to move out of the classroom and out into hallway alone.
"It's been two months and I still don't have any real friends this dam school sucks but then again was back home really all that much better" Tristan began to walk silently down the hallway as he then stopped for a moment as he noticed a girl with long light brown hair pass by him Tristan stared for a moment as the girl walked past him until suddenly she also stopped. Tristan paused slightly stunned for a moment but then quickly before the girl turned to look at him Tristan turned in the opposite direction and headed off down the hallway at a fast pace. The young girl looked at Tristan as he near ran away. "That boy? There's something about him he couldn't possibly be?" Another girl then walked up beside the girl who Tristan had just passed by "Alexis is everything okay?" "Yes everything's fine"
Alexis gave a slight smile but then looked as Tristan made his way around a corner and out of sight
"Elie that boy who was went around the corner do you know who he is?"
"Owe that's Tristan Mahon he's a new student who emigrated from America just over 2 months ago. I believe he's in Fourth Year same as use but why do you ask?" "No real reason" "Alright then so shall we go?" "Yes I suppose we should it would be best if we didn't leave the others waiting" Tristan was walking in a large park alone at sunset after school when he gave a large sigh "So much for my big plan. It'll be different to America I said. I'll make allot of friends here easy I said. I'm a complete idiot I say" Tristan gave a large sigh as he dropped his head as he then sat down in the grass and leaned against a nearby tree. The taking a deep breath Tristan sighed again and he pushed his back against the tree. A cool breeze began to blow through the area causing Tristan to shake slightly. Quickly Tristan pushed his back up against the tree again as he crossed his arms around his chest to try and stay warm. "Man Irish weather sucks it’s always so cold" A sharp breeze blew past Tristan once again as he gave a slight shiver. Tristan then quickly looked to the watch on his wrist to check the time. "7pm huh guess I better head home before mom starts ringing to find out where I am" Tristan the leaned against the tree using it as a ledge to lean on to help him stand. Slowly Tristan turned towards the direction of the park exit as a cold breeze blew past him once again but this time the breeze was followed by an even colder voice. "Where would he be? Where would he be? Where might the boy be who I very much need to see? Would he be here or there high or low owe who would really know but where owe where owe where could he be where is the boy I need to see?" Slowly Tristan turned to see a girl with long purple hair that stretched down as fair as her waist. The girl stared at Tristan with her deep black eyes all Tristan could do was stare back until he finally spoke out slightly. "Sorry did you say you were looking for someone?" The girl looked at Tristan as she then slowly raised her right hand and then with her index finger she pointed at Tristan. "I said I was looking but that's not really true see what I was looking for is really you!" Tristan stared at the girl slightly confused by everything she was saying since it was mostly in rhyme. "I'm sorry but did you say you were looking for me" "That is correct yes correct indeed you see you are in fact the boy I seek the boy I seek the boy I need the boy who must die you see" Tristan's eyes narrowed instantly as the girl finished yet another of here rhymes "A sorry did you just say must die" "You are correct in what you just heard so would you please stay right where you are while I ripe out your heart sir!" Tristan stood and stared as he began to back away from the girl slowly "Who the hell are you?" "Who am I? Who are you? I am Rosalinda. Rosa to you" Rosa then gave a dark smile as she began to move towards slowly one step at a time. Quickly Tristan quickened as he pulled away from Rosa faster until he turned away from her completely and began to run for the exit. But then suddenly and without even the slightest of warming a black thorn whip appeared in Rosa's hands. Rosa then gave a slight smirk as she then spun the whip in her hand and then launched the end of the whip towards Tristan then rapping it around his neck. Quickly Rosa then pulled down on the whip causing it to tighten around Tristan's throat and pull him to the ground. Tristan coughed out in pain as he put his hand to his throat to then feel blood dripping out from his throat because of the thorns on the whip that were digging into his neck. Slowly Rosa walked towards Tristan giving a dark laugh as she did. "Ha-ha Humans, humans you are so weak. So weak indeed compared to me!" Tristan looked back at Rosa a worried look on his face "Why the hell are you trying to kill me? What the hell did I ever do to you, you crazy bitch!? " Rosa then gave a serious look at Tristan "It’s not what you did but what you might if we let you live long enough" Tristan stared at Rosa confused when suddenly a pair of black bird like wings appeared on Rosa's back. Tristan stared in shock. "What the firetruck wings? What the hell are you?" Rosa just smirked "Owe don't you worry your cute little head about what I am. After all it’s not like you’re going to be alive long enough to make any sense of it" Tristan looked at Rosa and then began to glare "Stupid Bitch!" "Owe don't use such a foul mouth with me human" Rosa then pulled back her whip again tightening its grip around Tristan's throat again as it also dropped him along the ground. Tristan's eyes narrowed has he attempted to cough but couldn't as the whip was so tight around his throat that he was now unable to breath. Rosa then moved closer to Tristan until she was standing right over him. Rosa then gave a slight pout. "It's so sad here I had been told I was off to kill someone who would be a great threat to us but in the end you turn out to be nothing more than another weak human how boring owe well in the end orders are orders had to kill you whether you were a threat or not sorry about that" Tristan stared at Rosa as his vision began to blur
"She’s only killing me over orders that might even be wrong. Dam it of all the ways I could have died why the heck I have to die like this unable to even fight back against my own end. Dam it please someone help me I'm not ready to die yet. I need to live longer please someone anyone"
Tristan's then completely lost consciousness from the lack of air and was just on the verge of death Rosa watched with an expressionless face. "Humans so weak it’s almost sad" Food steps then began to ring in Rosa's eyes "Hum someone’s coming this boy better die fast or I'll have to waste my time killing more humans" A soft and sweet voice then rang out in the distance Rosa looked forward to see a young girl with long brown hair speaking "Now if I may ask Fallen Angel who gave you permission to try and kill that boy" Rosa stared at the girl "You you know who I am that means you’re no ordinary human" "Who said I was human" Rosa glared at the girl as she moved towards her "You your no ordinary human or special human your a demon" The girl smirked at Rosa as she was now less than five feet away "Nice to meet you Fallen Angel my name is Alexis Gregory heir to the Gregory family" "Gregory!" Rosa's black thorn whip then released Tristan from its grip and then suddenly disappeared "If you really are a member of the Gregory family its best if I take my leave here and now and besides from the look of that boy’s body I've already completed my mission" Rosa then backed away from Alexis "Well then if you'll excuse me" Rosa then flapped her black wings as she then flew into the air quickly disappearing from sight. Once Rosa was gone Alexis quickly looked to Tristan. "Let’s hope I wasn't too late" Alexis then quickly knelled down to Tristan quickly placing her ear against his chest checking for a pulse. Alexis laid on Tristan's chest for what seemed like hours to her until finally she heard a slight heart beat. Slowly Alexis raised her head giving a sigh of relief until she looked at Tristan again. "Thank goodness his hearts still beating but he’s still not breathing at this rate he'll die unless I do CPR" Alexis then bit down on her lip as she moved in close to Tristan's face. Slowly Alexis opened her mouth and moved in closer and closer to Tristan's face until her lips and Tristan made contact. Quickly Alexis began to blow into air into Tristan's body at a constant rate until Tristan began to cough out. Alexis then pulled back from Tristan giving a sigh of relief. "Good he's alive but now let’s get you out of here before people find us"
Hell's Dragon an Original story written by Me I plan on writing this story like a short Novel and i just wanted to get some crit on it for now so heres the First chapter of the first Arc of Hell's Dragon. Also i would like to greatly thank Stardustblade358 who has been helping out with my story by doing all the original character designs for me and has been helping me get some ideas for different story ideas along the way Thanks a mill Star
Hell’s Dragon
Male protagonist
The Year is 2020. Tristan Mahon an average boy of 17 years who has spiky Black hair and green eyes finds his life to be rather dull but over two months ago Tristan along with the rest of his family moved to Ireland for a change in life style and Tristan has taken it upon himself to make it so his new life in Ireland won’t be as boring and lonely as the one he lived in America. Sadly for Tristan he may of bit off more than he could chew with that idea.
Chapter 1
Tristan
Tristan sat in the back of classroom in the last class of the school day. Tristan sat in the class patiently waiting for the school bell to ring to let him know the day was finally done. A few moments later the bell then finally rang signaling the end of the school day. Slowly as if not even bothered Tristan began to throw his books into his bag and then throwing his bag over his shoulder slowly Tristan began to move out of the classroom and out into hallway alone.
"It's been two months and I still don't have any real friends this dam school sucks but then again was back home really all that much better"
Tristan began to walk silently down the hallway as he then stopped for a moment as he noticed a girl with long light brown hair pass by him Tristan stared for a moment as the girl walked past him until suddenly she also stopped. Tristan paused slightly stunned for a moment but then quickly before the girl turned to look at him Tristan turned in the opposite direction and headed off down the hallway at a fast pace. The young girl looked at Tristan as he near ran away.
"That boy? There's something about him he couldn't possibly be?"
Another girl then walked up beside the girl who Tristan had just passed by
"Alexis is everything okay?"
"Yes everything's fine"
Alexis gave a slight smile but then looked as Tristan made his way around a corner and out of sight
"Elie that boy who was went around the corner do you know who he is?"
"Owe that's Tristan Mahon he's a new student who emigrated from America just over 2 months ago. I believe he's in Fourth Year same as use but why do you ask?"
"No real reason"
"Alright then so shall we go?"
"Yes I suppose we should it would be best if we didn't leave the others waiting"
Tristan was walking in a large park alone at sunset after school when he gave a large sigh
"So much for my big plan. It'll be different to America I said. I'll make allot of friends here easy I said. I'm a complete idiot I say"
Tristan gave a large sigh as he dropped his head as he then sat down in the grass and leaned against a nearby tree. The taking a deep breath Tristan sighed again and he pushed his back against the tree.
A cool breeze began to blow through the area causing Tristan to shake slightly. Quickly Tristan pushed his back up against the tree again as he crossed his arms around his chest to try and stay warm.
"Man Irish weather sucks it’s always so cold"
A sharp breeze blew past Tristan once again as he gave a slight shiver. Tristan then quickly looked to the watch on his wrist to check the time.
"7pm huh guess I better head home before mom starts ringing to find out where I am"
Tristan the leaned against the tree using it as a ledge to lean on to help him stand. Slowly Tristan turned towards the direction of the park exit as a cold breeze blew past him once again but this time the breeze was followed by an even colder voice.
"Where would he be? Where would he be? Where might the boy be who I very much need to see? Would he be here or there high or low owe who would really know but where owe where owe where could he be where is the boy I need to see?"
Slowly Tristan turned to see a girl with long purple hair that stretched down as fair as her waist. The girl stared at Tristan with her deep black eyes all Tristan could do was stare back until he finally spoke out slightly.
"Sorry did you say you were looking for someone?"
The girl looked at Tristan as she then slowly raised her right hand and then with her index finger she pointed at Tristan.
"I said I was looking but that's not really true see what I was looking for is really you!"
Tristan stared at the girl slightly confused by everything she was saying since it was mostly in rhyme.
"I'm sorry but did you say you were looking for me"
"That is correct yes correct indeed you see you are in fact the boy I seek the boy I seek the boy I need the boy who must die you see"
Tristan's eyes narrowed instantly as the girl finished yet another of here rhymes
"A sorry did you just say must die"
"You are correct in what you just heard so would you please stay right where you are while I ripe out your heart sir!"
Tristan stood and stared as he began to back away from the girl slowly
"Who the hell are you?"
"Who am I? Who are you? I am Rosalinda. Rosa to you"
Rosa then gave a dark smile as she began to move towards slowly one step at a time. Quickly Tristan quickened as he pulled away from Rosa faster until he turned away from her completely and began to run for the exit. But then suddenly and without even the slightest of warming a black thorn whip appeared in Rosa's hands. Rosa then gave a slight smirk as she then spun the whip in her hand and then launched the end of the whip towards Tristan then rapping it around his neck. Quickly Rosa then pulled down on the whip causing it to tighten around Tristan's throat and pull him to the ground. Tristan coughed out in pain as he put his hand to his throat to then feel blood dripping out from his throat because of the thorns on the whip that were digging into his neck. Slowly Rosa walked towards Tristan giving a dark laugh as she did.
"Ha-ha Humans, humans you are so weak. So weak indeed compared to me!"
Tristan looked back at Rosa a worried look on his face
"Why the hell are you trying to kill me? What the hell did I ever do to you, you crazy bitch!? "
Rosa then gave a serious look at Tristan
"It’s not what you did but what you might if we let you live long enough"
Tristan stared at Rosa confused when suddenly a pair of black bird like wings appeared on Rosa's back. Tristan stared in shock.
"What the firetruck wings? What the hell are you?"
Rosa just smirked
"Owe don't you worry your cute little head about what I am. After all it’s not like you’re going to be alive long enough to make any sense of it"
Tristan looked at Rosa and then began to glare
"Stupid Bitch!"
"Owe don't use such a foul mouth with me human"
Rosa then pulled back her whip again tightening its grip around Tristan's throat again as it also dropped him along the ground. Tristan's eyes narrowed has he attempted to cough but couldn't as the whip was so tight around his throat that he was now unable to breath. Rosa then moved closer to Tristan until she was standing right over him. Rosa then gave a slight pout.
"It's so sad here I had been told I was off to kill someone who would be a great threat to us but in the end you turn out to be nothing more than another weak human how boring owe well in the end orders are orders had to kill you whether you were a threat or not sorry about that"
Tristan stared at Rosa as his vision began to blur
"She’s only killing me over orders that might even be wrong. Dam it of all the ways I could have died why the heck I have to die like this unable to even fight back against my own end. Dam it please someone help me I'm not ready to die yet. I need to live longer please someone anyone"
Tristan's then completely lost consciousness from the lack of air and was just on the verge of death Rosa watched with an expressionless face.
"Humans so weak it’s almost sad"
Food steps then began to ring in Rosa's eyes
"Hum someone’s coming this boy better die fast or I'll have to waste my time killing more humans"
A soft and sweet voice then rang out in the distance Rosa looked forward to see a young girl with long brown hair speaking
"Now if I may ask Fallen Angel who gave you permission to try and kill that boy"
Rosa stared at the girl
"You you know who I am that means you’re no ordinary human"
"Who said I was human"
Rosa glared at the girl as she moved towards her
"You your no ordinary human or special human your a demon"
The girl smirked at Rosa as she was now less than five feet away
"Nice to meet you Fallen Angel my name is Alexis Gregory heir to the Gregory family"
"Gregory!"
Rosa's black thorn whip then released Tristan from its grip and then suddenly disappeared
"If you really are a member of the Gregory family its best if I take my leave here and now and besides from the look of that boy’s body I've already completed my mission"
Rosa then backed away from Alexis
"Well then if you'll excuse me"
Rosa then flapped her black wings as she then flew into the air quickly disappearing from sight. Once Rosa was gone Alexis quickly looked to Tristan.
"Let’s hope I wasn't too late"
Alexis then quickly knelled down to Tristan quickly placing her ear against his chest checking for a pulse. Alexis laid on Tristan's chest for what seemed like hours to her until finally she heard a slight heart beat. Slowly Alexis raised her head giving a sigh of relief until she looked at Tristan again.
"Thank goodness his hearts still beating but he’s still not breathing at this rate he'll die unless I do CPR"
Alexis then bit down on her lip as she moved in close to Tristan's face. Slowly Alexis opened her mouth and moved in closer and closer to Tristan's face until her lips and Tristan made contact. Quickly Alexis began to blow into air into Tristan's body at a constant rate until Tristan began to cough out. Alexis then pulled back from Tristan giving a sigh of relief.
"Good he's alive but now let’s get you out of here before people find us"
Tristans Appearance: http://starkittytheartist.deviantart.com/art/Tristan-367085702 (Just imagine he has black hair for now his appearance is still being worked on)
Alexis Appearance: http://starkittytheartist.deviantart.com/art/Alexis-367083964
I Hope you all enjoy and please tell me what you think
Edited by Joemahon1