Kingdom Hearts: A New Beginning

 

 

Kyo a typical high school student who wanted a little adventure in his life but never thought it was possible to do such things in his lifetime. He was always with his friends Robert, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin. None of them really pay any attention in class but most things people call complicated they call child’s play.

 

Robert, a.k.a. Turbo is the smartest in the group. Whenever he comes up with a plan it is always work.

Alice is the most popular girl in the school mainly for her beauty. She encourages everyone in the group. Crystal is the flist person at school. She’s the fastest one in the entire school. Kevin is all about sports. He is the quarterback on the football team. Kyo is layback and a player. He kissed eight girls under mistletoe last Christmas just because he was bored.

 

 

Now it is the middle of the school year and everyone is just counting down till the end of the year, there has been strange weather like wind strong enough to throw people, huge pieces of hail able to make car roofs sink in. A month later all the weather eased up. Kyo, Turbo, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin were play basketball then a portal opened up. Kyo said “we should go in just for fun”. Turbo said “thats worst possible thing you do”. Kyo said “you’re a pussy or what. Think of it this way any scientist would want to explore the unnatural events” so they all decided to go in. They all passed out as they entered. They woke up in an ally. Robert, Crystal, and Kevin blamed Kyo that they were going to die but

Alice encourages everyone that they could go to talk to someone and ask where they are. They all entered a store Kyo said “look at all these poor bums”! Alice and Crystal punched him in the head. They asked the owner where they are. He said there are at Myx Town. A town for those who escape their own world end up on. “Own world, you mean we ended up in another planet” said Turbo. Kevin said “way to go we should all go in the portal you dumbass”. “You’re the dumbass since you went in too”. “Wait you came in the portal, that means you all are keyblade wielders. The legend said five people would come from another world to stop the darkness that’s occurring to stop the five shadow keybladers”. “What the hell is a keyblade” Turbo said. It is a weapon that chooses its wielder” the owner said. “The heartless there outside hurry”! “What do we do” Kevin said. “We fight, lets go” Kyo said. “What this giant key just appeared, the keyblade! Now we are ready to take out the heartless” Kyo said. Crystal was the first to be defeated then Alice then Turbo then Kevin. Kyo was left to finish off the heartless. Kyo was left defeated in after being blasted through a building. “Damn you five suck, I guess I will help you this time, but next time your going to die” “Who are you” Kyo said. “You will find out soon enough”. "Hey wait, come back"!

 

 

Come on guys wake up. “Who are you”? “The name is Angel”. “I treated your wounds”. “So you are the keyblade wielders”. “Yeah, so what we could not take out twenty heartless so someone else could do it”. "The keyblade can be used by keyblade wielders. So you five are the only ones that can stop them”.

 

 

 

 

 

 

tell me what u think of it so far

Great beginning, can't wait for the rest. Keep writing!!!

thanx

good story but you could have a more creative name on the world...

Kingdom Hearts: A New Beginning

 

 

Kyo a typical high school student who wanted a little adventure in his life but never thought it was possible to do such things in his lifetime. He was always with his friends Robert, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin. None of them really pay any attention in class but most things people call complicated they call child’s play.

 

Robert, a.k.a. Turbo is the smartest in the group. Whenever he comes up with a plan it is always work.

Alice is I'll stop highlighting is now. the most popular girl in the school mainly for her beauty. She encourages everyone in the group. Crystal is the flist person at school. She’s the fastest one in the entire school. Kevin is all about sports. He is the quarterback on the football team. Kyo is layback and a player. He kissed eight girls under mistletoe last Christmas just because he was bored.

 

 

Now it is the middle of the school year and everyone is just counting down till the end of the year, there has been strange weather like wind strong enough to throw people, huge pieces of hail able to make car roofs sink in. A month later all the weather eased up. Kyo, Turbo, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin were play basketball then a portal opened up. Kyo said “we should go in just for fun”. Turbo said “thats worst possible thing you do”. Kyo said “you’re a pussy or what. Think of it this way any scientist would want to explore the unnatural events” so they all decided to go in. They all passed out as they entered. They woke up in an ally. Robert, Crystal, and Kevin blamed Kyo that they were going to die but

Alice encourages everyone that they could go to talk to someone and ask where they are. They all entered a store Kyo said “look at all these niggas” Alice and Crystal punched him in the head. They asked the owner where they are. He said there are at Myx Town. A town for those who escape their own world end up on. “Own world, you mean we ended up in another planet” said Turbo. Kevin said “way to go we should all go in the portal you dumbass”. “You’re the dumbass since you went in too”. “Wait you came in the portal, that means you all are keyblade wielders. The legend said five people would come from another world to stop the darkness that’s occurring to stop the five shadow keybladers”. “What the hell is a keyblade” Turbo said. It is a weapon that chooses its wielder” the owner said. “The heartless there outside hurry”! “What do we do” Kevin said. “We fight, lets go” Kyo said. “What this giant key just appeared, the keyblade! Now we are ready to take out the heartless” Kyo said. Crystal was the first to be defeated then Alice then Turbo then Kevin. Kyo was left to finish off the heartless. Kyo was left defeated in after being blasted through a building. “Damn you five suck, I guess I will help you this time, but next time your going to die” “Who are you” Kyo said. “You will find out soon enough”. "Hey wait, come back"!

 

 

Come on guys wake up. “Who are you”? “The name is Angel”. “I treated your wounds”. “So you are the keyblade wielders”. “Yeah, so what we could not take out twenty heartless so someone else could do it”. "The keyblade can be used by keyblade wielders. So you five are the only ones that can stop them”.

 

 

 

 

 

 

tell me what u think of it so far

 

I started highlighting the grammar mistakes but I thought it'd be better if I just told you by chat.

Kingdom Hearts: A New Beginning

 

 

Kyo a typical high school student who wanted a little adventure in his life but never thought it was possible to do such things in his lifetime. He was always with his friends Robert, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin. None of them really pay any attention in class but most things people call complicated they call child’s play.

 

Robert, a.k.a. Turbo is the smartest in the group. Whenever he comes up with a plan it is always work.

Alice is I'll stop highlighting is now. the most popular girl in the school mainly for her beauty. She encourages everyone in the group. Crystal is the flist person at school. She’s the fastest one in the entire school. Kevin is all about sports. He is the quarterback on the football team. Kyo is layback and a player. He kissed eight girls under mistletoe last Christmas just because he was bored.

 

 

Now it is the middle of the school year and everyone is just counting down till the end of the year, there has been strange weather like wind strong enough to throw people, huge pieces of hail able to make car roofs sink in. A month later all the weather eased up. Kyo, Turbo, Alice, Crystal, and Kevin were play basketball then a portal opened up. Kyo said “we should go in just for fun”. Turbo said “thats worst possible thing you do”. Kyo said “you’re a pussy or what. Think of it this way any scientist would want to explore the unnatural events” so they all decided to go in. They all passed out as they entered. They woke up in an ally. Robert, Crystal, and Kevin blamed Kyo that they were going to die but

Alice encourages everyone that they could go to talk to someone and ask where they are. They all entered a store Kyo said “look at all these niggas” Alice and Crystal punched him in the head. They asked the owner where they are. He said there are at Myx Town. A town for those who escape their own world end up on. “Own world, you mean we ended up in another planet” said Turbo. Kevin said “way to go we should all go in the portal you dumbass”. “You’re the dumbass since you went in too”. “Wait you came in the portal, that means you all are keyblade wielders. The legend said five people would come from another world to stop the darkness that’s occurring to stop the five shadow keybladers”. “What the hell is a keyblade” Turbo said. It is a weapon that chooses its wielder” the owner said. “The heartless there outside hurry”! “What do we do” Kevin said. “We fight, lets go” Kyo said. “What this giant key just appeared, the keyblade! Now we are ready to take out the heartless” Kyo said. Crystal was the first to be defeated then Alice then Turbo then Kevin. Kyo was left to finish off the heartless. Kyo was left defeated in after being blasted through a building. “Damn you five suck, I guess I will help you this time, but next time your going to die” “Who are you” Kyo said. “You will find out soon enough”. "Hey wait, come back"!

 

 

Come on guys wake up. “Who are you”? “The name is Angel”. “I treated your wounds”. “So you are the keyblade wielders”. “Yeah, so what we could not take out twenty heartless so someone else could do it”. "The keyblade can be used by keyblade wielders. So you five are the only ones that can stop them”.

 

 

 

 

 

 

tell me what u think of it so far

 

I started highlighting the grammar mistakes but I thought it'd be better if I just told you by chat.

I like it so far! Your grammar needs a bit of improvement--try spellchecking your story. Otherwise, it's pretty good!

heres a updat on the characters

 

 

 

Kyo a spiky blonde, who is a bit of a hothead. He considers the world to filled with nothing but evil. He was an orphan for nine years until he was adopted by a rich family. They gave him everything he wanted, but his friends are what mattered to him the most. He has hassle eyes and is sixteen.

 

 

Turbo is a know-it-all. He has black hair and brown eyes. When he was five he became a wiz at chess. He defeated the current chess champion in a friendly match in ten turns at the age of ten. His family wants him to be a great scientist. He is sixteen.

 

Alice is a redhead with blue eyes. She is the kindest person they have ever met. She encourages them in every way she can. Her best friend is Kyo after he saved her from drowning at the beach. She’s been grateful ever since. She is sixteen.

 

 

Crystal

is a blonde with golden eyes. Her family is the richest in the world. She loves to shop and is sometimes cold to people, but she knows the right thing to do when it comes down to it. She is seventeen.

 

 

Kevin has black hair and brown eyes. When he is on your team you can’t lose. He is all about team work and doesn’t know the meaning of give’ in up. His family hates that the fact that he likes sports instead of being a musician like the rest of his family. He is seventeen.

“What do you mean the only ones? We just got our asses handed to us so there has to be some other keyblade wielders out there!” Kyo yelled. “There are, but their not exactly the ones that would want to help us out ya know” Angle said. “So who exactly was that guy I saw that defeated those heartless? He had a keyblade, but we were the five, so that means he is a shadow keyblader”! Kyo thought. “Hey Kyo you alright you seen more down than usual?” Alice asked. “Na, its nothing”. Kyo replied. “Are you sure, is it because you lost a fight for the first time in your life”? Crystal asked. “NO

leave me alone”! Kyo yelled. “Way to go now you know how he is when he gets pissed off”! Kevin interrupted urgently. Kyo left and started walking down the street.

 

“Damn they think losing a fight gets me all down and stuff” Kyo thought. Just then a few shadow heartless showed up. “Yes a time for a rematch! Hey why isn’t the keyblade appearing? Kyo wondered. “You must know the name of your keyblade to use it.” ???? suggested. “Hey you’re that guy that saved us from the heartless! The name of it you say, that easy MC, metal chocobo!” Kyo yelled. He quickly defeated the heartless. “Hey what’s your name”? Kyo demanded. “Its Zeke let us fight the next time when you are stronger. Zeke declared. “But have this locket, when it is open you get a special ability that can be quite useful in time, see ya” He vanished. Kyo was trying to open the locket but it could not open. The keyblade could not even dent it so he just kept on to it.