Wrote this in car the other day on my phone.

Comments/Critiques greatly appreciated.

 

wormwood.

 

[align=center]Whisper after whisper-

Lie after lie-

You called me yours, and I called you mine.

Serenades of fear and dread slip into my ears-

The hope I once had has mutated into fear.

They once called you an angel, beautiful, everyone could easily tell-

But now you are a monster, fallen from heaven to hell.

The temptress called The Blade un-knits my skin, I watch myself bleed-

Your raspy, blood-curdling voice persuades me you're everything I need.

The crimson drops slowly cascade onto the deserted earth below, releasing the last pieces of hope I have left-

Maybe this would have been different if we had never met.

You devious, cunning snake, you were simply a beautiful lie-

But now it's far too late, for the shroud of black that fills my eyes as if on cue reminds me it is time to die.[/align]

thats really good!!!! i luvs it

Thanks. (:

Deep, meaningful. I LIKE IT:)

Its very..dark tho. I'd aim for a more..positive? ending. I dont know. Thats just what id do.

REALLY GOOD THO.

Thanks. (:

And lol, I have trouble writing uplifting, positive stuff. I have fallen into the darkside and now I'm stuck.