I decided to start a romance story. http://kh13.com/forum/public/style_emoticons/default/happy.png

 

Chapter One

BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- click.

Justin rolled out of bed. He landed on the floor, and looked at his dresser. -What'll I wear...what'll I wear...- he got up and slipped on a shirt and a pair of shorts. He brushed his teeth after eating some Corn Flakes.

-School is so boring....- he thought, walking out the door. He walked to the bus stop. He adjusted his black shirt nervously, and let his backpack hang with one strap, as he saw how some others were doing. Then he looked down the street, and saw a girl. She was about as tall as Justin, with black medium-length hair. She wore a red sweater that had the word Aeropostale down the side. Her gray under the knee shorts pushed against her legs as the wind blew. Being a new student, Justin didn't know anybody. Then when she came up she gave a smile and said, "Hi!" Justin was about to reply when someone pushed him back and said, "Hey, toothpick, she's mine!" -Toothpick?- thought Justin with disgust. He was the average 16-year-old weight. He landed on the ground in a sitting position. "Sergio! I told you a thousand times! I'm not going out with you!"Sergio grunted, sighed, and said, "Are you sure?" he asked, lingering on the word 'sure' for a bit. "Yes, I'm sure, dammit!" He sighed, and walked away as Justin got up. "Who was that?" Justin asked. "Sergio. A-rank jock with a fetish for me. I'm Catalina. What's your name?" Justin smiled. "Justin. Justin Brown."

Chapter One Finish

I thought it was pretty good. YUSH

So far so good.

Certain details you may need to skip if you're just running over them. Like, "He brushed his teeth after eating some Corn Flakes." That just seems kind of randomly stuck in there. If you're going to talk about his routine, you go into more detail about it. Or, you can just skip from his waking up to going out the door to make things easier. Also, side note: When including thoughts ("What'll I wear...?"), you italicize them.

Chapter 2

Justin slumped in his bus seat, behind Catalina. He leaned back, and closed his eyes. He heard sounds that don't normally belong on a bus. Kissing sounds. He sat up and looked behind to see two girls making out. Slowly, he returned to his original seating position. -This school scares me more than I thought it would, and it hasn't even started.- he thought with a sigh. "We're here!" yelled the bus driver in a scratchy voice. He rose from his seat and walked down the aisle. He felt a tug at his loose shoelace. He fell down the bus stairs. -Bullies, I see.- he thought and saw Sergio laughing next to his friend. He looked at his shoelace, which only hung out a centimeter at the ground. -So it was intentional.- he thought, standing up and continuing to walk into the school. Inside, it smelled like a half dead skunk crawled into a week old burrito. He coughed and walked into the office for his schedule. "Ah. In there." said the secretary. He walked into the principal's office to see a 35-year old woman bent over the window frame. "Umm...Hello?" she turned around. There was cigarette in her hand, lit and smoking. "Whaddaya want, kid?" she said between coughs. "Um, my schedule." She coughed and picked up a piece of paper. -Wow....- thought Justin, taking the slip from her hand. He left her office and into the hallway. Justin hoped the smell was a one day thing prank. He read his paper: Homeroom: C. Kaletka. "Room 196..." he read quietly. He walked into the room and saw paper airplanes and spitballs flying around like the room was a miniature war battlefield. -I hate school...- he said with a sigh.

Chapter 2 Finish

 

And, @Exlon, it's just the way I do thoughts. Between hyphens, because I don't like italicizing them. And yeah, I'll improve the routine details.

Chapter 2

Justin slumped in his bus seat, behind Catalina. He leaned back, and closed his eyes. He heard sounds that don't normally belong on a bus. Kissing sounds. He sat up and looked behind to see two girls making out. Slowly, he returned to his original seating position. -This school scares me more than I thought it would, and it hasn't even started.- he thought with a sigh. "We're here!" yelled the bus driver in a scratchy voice. He rose from his seat and walked down the aisle. He felt a tug at his loose shoelace. He fell down the bus stairs. -Bullies, I see.- he thought and saw Sergio laughing next to his friend. He looked at his shoelace, which only hung out a centimeter at the ground. -So it was intentional.- he thought, standing up and continuing to walk into the school. Inside, it smelled like a half dead skunk crawled into a week old burrito. He coughed and walked into the office for his schedule. "Ah. In there." said the secretary. He walked into the principal's office to see a 35-year old woman bent over the window frame. "Umm...Hello?" she turned around. There was cigarette in her hand, lit and smoking. "Whaddaya want, kid?" she said between coughs. "Um, my schedule." She coughed and picked up a piece of paper. -Wow....- thought Justin, taking the slip from her hand. He left her office and into the hallway. Justin hoped the smell was a one day thing prank. He read his paper: Homeroom: C. Kaletka. "Room 196..." he read quietly. He walked into the room and saw paper airplanes and spitballs flying around like the room was a miniature war battlefield. -I hate school...- he said with a sigh.

Chapter 2 Finish

 

And, @Exlon, it's just the way I do thoughts. Between hyphens, because I don't like italicizing them. And yeah, I'll improve the routine details.

 

Much better, more flow.~Nayn