Okay, I was wndeirng is this is good. It has to be 6-8 sentences, and here are the directions:

"Write a paragraph about and old cat. Use lots of vivid detail"

this week in ELA we are learning more about Detail, and this is what I wrote

 

He was sitting, right there. On his back leaning into the couch, his fur fat made his small head sink into it. White with orange stripes or orange with white stripes, I don

It's good detail, just go back and fix the grammar mistakes ^^;;

i know, I do grammar LAST! it was wayy worse though! lol

Well once the grammar is fixed, it'll be perfect (: 100 IMO!

YESH!

!! Oh, and you didn't spell the subject of the thread right ;D Just pointing it out!

yeah, i did it on purpose cos my sarcasm shows! get the joke?

Not at all (:

it's good.

 

off topic Larxene I like you profile pic.!

 

Still, there's plenty of detail.