I'm so in to slow rock songs lately that I made one myself during class. But I'm a complete amateur so I need your help in opinion about this: (please imagine this is sung in slow rock)

 

Real-World Fantasy

 

Life is all days' job

And no one can change for you

But you

 

Come in the first look of today

Get out and play in the street before work

That way you'll today is fun

Who cares the real thing they say

When you can live in real world fantasy

Forever

 

Among the shattered dreams

There are still some that come true

Look at famous people in history books

They are those who hold on to their real-world fantasy

Real-world fantasy

Real-world fantasy

 

Ah... When I was a kid

I hope I could become the heroes on TV

People said as I grown up I would forget it all

But I don't want to, because I want it to become my real-world fantasy

Real-world fantasy...

 

Among the shattered dreams

There are some that come true

Look at famous people in history books

They are those who hold on to their real-world fantasy

Real-world fantasy...

 

Try to remember today's date

Looking at the clock thousand times a day

That way we know we live life in the fullest possible way

We have nothing to lose, we have been doing our best

 

Among the shattered dreams

There are some that come true

Look at famous people in history books

They are those who hold on to their real-world fantasy

Who knows if it's real after all

Oh wowww...

That was tottally wicked!

Sorry for x2 Posting! o3o

On a more critical side, I really like this style of writing... I even find myself humming along to a non-existent tune in my head... but on the same note, it can get a bit repetitive... but. a lot of songs do that...

All in all, a big thumbs up to this!

i think is a great song

Thank u everyone, Coo-Ste and Sora~~ you're really encouraging me ^_^