"(chorus) You can beat me down

throw me to the ground

have me dwell in hell

and walk streets in heaven

 

however...

 

I do say to myself these are just confinements...

of what may truly be

not enough to make me happy

this world has hate

does't surprise me...

 

(chorus)You can beat me down 

throw me to the ground

have me dwell in hell

and walk streets in heaven

 

You can be me 

obtain all the glory that is my works

I will take my sin (and yours...)

and waste life away...

 

(chorus)

 

Bring this on (giving it all away)

Bring your worst (bring you sin to me)

Bring your sin I will take it (bear it on my soul)

on my cross lies me and all the pain (hoping to see the light)

 

(chorus)

Now this is how it will be

you and me

watching you go to to heaven and me...

 

Down I be

Thrown to the ground

Smoking in hell

and hoping just to see heaven" -SSR-

 

Well this is a song of mine. feel free to criticise it. heh

TBH, I kinda like it. The start was kinda bad, and the grammar is off. But another then that. It was is pretty good, and don't worry. Nobody gonna steal any songs from here.

 

Don't understand the pic at the end tho.

TBH, I kinda like it. The start was kinda bad, and the grammar is off. But another then that. It was is pretty good, and don't worry. Nobody gonna steal any songs from here.

 

Don't understand the pic at the end tho.

I add Blade pics to a lot of my posts. 

Thanks for the feedback

note: this is a song written in less than 10 min. I have others that are actually altered and fixed.

I add Blade pics to a lot of my posts. 

Thanks for the feedback

note: this is a song written in less than 10 min. I have others that are actually altered and fixed.

You should always take a few mins to check your work before you post it. Unless you are bored and you just don't care lol.

You should always take a few mins to check your work before you post it. Unless you are bored and you just don't care lol.

Next time I will. I will post only the nearly finished ones.