I'm working on something new. This was the history of a game that I was working on, but I canceled it, so now I'm putting the history to the book. Here is the history (a bit hastily written for the topic)"A long time ago, in the country of Keta, a civil war broke out. The south fought for equality amongst all peoples, while the north fought to uphold traditions and social classes to remain. (The rich are those who lived in the northern section.) The two ends fought for many years, and when it seemed that there would be no end, the south had lost. Tave, the king of Keta, to keep peace in his country, banished those who fought against traditions across the seas. Vale, leader of the southern rebels, protested, so he was put to death. The other southerners knew that there was no use resisting, so they accepted their fate. There was an 8 month journey for those people. ( a lot of information here is cut out) By the time they hit land, nearly three hundred of them had died from disease. After burying the dead, the people held a ceramony to honor the dead, and celebrate their survival. This later came to be known as "Ceremony of Rebirth" which we still uphold today. Though it seemed that the rebellion had seemed in vein, it was not. This new land had no inhabitants, except those of strange animals and many strange tree's and fruits that had never been seen before. The people then took a vow. A vow claiming that they would uphold what they fought for. Freedom and Equality amongst all people. They wrote the vow on paper, naming it "The Constitution of Equality." They had named the land 'Valetia" in honor Vale, the one who opened the eyes of many. Today, the constitution is still upheld, and the peaceful country grew into something marvelous. Towns had been settled, and trade routes with other countries had been established. This is the history of Valetia."This is what I basically had for the history. The story itself is told through the point of view, of a young Mage named Caymen.Does the history sound interesting enough? What I did pretty much was look at the history of many countries, and add my own twists and turns, but I feel it may need more spice. What is your opinion?
I'm working on something new. This was the history of a game that I was working on, but I canceled it, so now I'm putting the history to the book. Here is the history (a bit hastily written for the topic)"A long time ago, in the country of Keta, a civil war broke out. The south fought for equality amongst all peoples, while the north fought to uphold traditions and social classes to remain. (The rich are those who lived in the northern section.) The two ends fought for many years, and when it seemed that there would be no end, the south had lost. Tave, the king of Keta, to keep peace in his country, banished those who fought against traditions across the seas. Vale, leader of the southern rebels, protested, so he was put to death. The other southerners knew that there was no use resisting, so they accepted their fate. There was an 8 month journey for those people. ( a lot of information here is cut out) By the time they hit land, nearly three hundred of them had died from disease. After burying the dead, the people held a ceramony to honor the dead, and celebrate their survival. This later came to be known as "Ceremony of Rebirth" which we still uphold today. Though it seemed that the rebellion had seemed in vein, it was not. This new land had no inhabitants, except those of strange animals and many strange tree's and fruits that had never been seen before. The people then took a vow. A vow claiming that they would uphold what they fought for. Freedom and Equality amongst all people. They wrote the vow on paper, naming it "The Constitution of Equality." They had named the land 'Valetia" in honor Vale, the one who opened the eyes of many. Today, the constitution is still upheld, and the peaceful country grew into something marvelous. Towns had been settled, and trade routes with other countries had been established. This is the history of Valetia."This is what I basically had for the history. The story itself is told through the point of view, of a young Mage named Caymen.Does the history sound interesting enough? What I did pretty much was look at the history of many countries, and add my own twists and turns, but I feel it may need more spice. What is your opinion?