Chapter 0: Memory of Death (intro)

 

The Sanctuary, a place where vampires, humans, and werewolves live happily in harmony. Vampire children(by appearance, not actual age) have the ability to go to school with humans and werewolves seem content with their own methods of life. The Sanctuary is a pretty peaceful place Or at least it was. You see, a new vampire bloodline was born from the evil experiments created by a group of scientists who started something called The Ark. The Ark is said to be the name of a series of projects that involved creating a new species of the undead. The new species is a hybrid of vampires and werewolves, a very unholy mixture.

You may wonder how I know this much info about The Ark projects. Well, I used to be one of the scientists working on The Ark. However, I am a human who owes his life to a vampire and couldn't possibly continue working on the demonic experiments of those lunatics. I am deeply ashamed for working on The Ark and I hope those who read this document, especially vampires, forgive me for my sins.

My only wish is to see my little brother and sister again, although I'll never be able to tell them the truth about The Ark experiments.

[align=center] Please forgive me

Taro Namatsu[/align]

 

 

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I have edited the intro to its original version, which to me isn't much better.

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Character Profiles:

 

Name: Hajiro Tashiro

Age: 15

Vampire

 

Name: Genotakin Shugo

Age: 14

Vampire

 

Name: Sin

Age: 19

Vampire

 

Name: Kikyo Namatsu

Age: 15

Human

 

Kon Zanasu

Age: 21

Vampire

 

Megan Haruya

Age: 6

Human

 

Name: Genjon "The Dragon King"

Age: Unknown

Vampire

 

Name:Cenzi Kotsu

Age: 20

Vampire

 

Name: Ellen

Age: 15

Vampire

 

Name: Doom

Age: Unknown

Vampire

 

Name: Alice

Age: 14

Vampire

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These are not all of the characters but the main characters of the expository.

Very fantasy-based. Which is good, but not much of my interest. The use of almost every character as a vampire is freakin' lame. I myself try to stick to the myths as they are told with no added thoughts. There is 1 HUMAN! And you said Vampire/Werewolf HYBRIDS?! What freakin' genetic experiements are goin' on in your little mind? If I were to be really sinister I would have said it was the future and humans have entraped werewolves and vampires as genetic experiments, ruthlessly beating them for fun until tests are to be done, childishly pulling away limb by limb, tasting their sweet blood and testing it for more, creating sick and twisted creatures of the inimaginable, muscle popping, bulging flexes, puking everywhere because the stomach is deformed. Dying from internal bleeding because there are no structures to hold inside the freak body of this artificial nature. This is a completely horrible epilouge I can't even tell you how wrong you are, using an epilouge as a prelouge is as stupid as Hell, you should have called it a dairy entry or something, quoting the epilouge as the prelouge. But this is my way and this is your way. Idiot.

 

-This has been a Brutal Review by Sorage55 *edited*

I like it it is fantasy based which makes me interested I like it

I liked the intro.

well now the intro is being changed(not cuz of Sorage) because I am fully awake and I am writing the original version of the intro.

I'm still liking this story, I'm curios about it.

Very fantasy-based. Which is good, but not much of my interest. The use of almost every character as a vampire is freakin' lame. I myself try to stick to the myths as they are told with no added thoughts. There is 1 HUMAN! And you said Vampire/Werewolf HYBRIDS?! What freakin' genetic experiements are goin' on in your little mind? If I were to be really sinister I would have said it was the future and humans have entraped werewolves and vampires as genetic experiments, ruthlessly beating them for fun until tests are to be done, childishly pulling away limb by limb, tasting their sweet blood and testing it for more, creating sick and twisted creatures of the inimaginable, muscle popping, bulging flexes, puking everywhere because the stomach is deformed. Dying from internal bleeding because there are no structures to hold inside the freak body of this artificial nature. This is a completely horrible epilouge I can't even tell you how wrong you are, using an epilouge as a prelouge is as stupid as Hell, you should have called it a dairy entry or something, quoting the epilouge as the prelouge. But this is my way and this is your way. Idiot.

 

-This has been a Brutal Review by Sorage55 *edited*

 

I like brutal review . I didn't read the first version I wonder how it was like.

 

 

So this is a report then? I'm waiting for the real story and coz I'm fallin for Genjon (and unknown ages always kill me to bits) please hurry up make his appearance:angel:

Chapter I: Attack

 

Hashiro walked down the streets of Area 1 in The Sanctuary. He was looking for some nice ramen to eat for dinner, Hashiro's parents weren't home so he decided to eat out. When Hashiro walked towards the restaurant door he saw a man in a black cloak who smiled at him maliciously. Hajiro ignored the man and decided to walk to another store that sold ramen.

 

Then it happened...

 

The man ran toward Hashiro lightning-fast and punched him in the stomach. Hashiro fell on his knees and started coughing up blood. His ribs felt like someone hit his ribs with a sledgehammer.

 

"So, your not a vampire yet? Looks like a get a fresh meal." The man knelled down and examined Hajiro.

 

Hajiro attempted to punch the man in the face but the man effortlessly grabbed his fist and twisted it, breaking his wrist.

"Your stubborn, but I can fix that."

The man grabbed a knife from his pocket and stabbed Hashiro in the stomach. As the blood seeped from Hashiro's stomach the man began to have a crazed look in his eyes. He cackled as two people walked up from behind him. One was about twenty years old and the other could have been a ten year old boy.

 

"Let the boy go." The twenty year old man said.

The boy next to him walked closer and looked at Hashiro for a second then glared at the insane man next to him.

"You will pay for injuring this human. That is against Sanctuary law." As the boy said this The group could feel the world shaking violently with rage.

Hashiro became less and less conscious every second the world trembled.

"Genjon, stop! your hurting the boy!" The twenty or so year old man said touching the young boy's shoulder. Genjon hastily stopped remembering that his power's could kill a human easily.

"I forgot, Kon, sorry."

"Don't apologize to me, apologize to the human."

Kon then pointed to the man that attacked Hashiro.

"You will be condemned by God for your sin."

Kon snapped his fingers and with that, the man exploded into ashes. Hajiro hadn't died but he was close to death's door.

"T-thank you..." was the last thing he could utter out his mouth before he passed out.

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That was Chapter 1. An introductory chapter. I will spoil some of the 2nd chapter for you(even though its probably obvious what will happen). Hashiro will be turned into a vampire in the next chapter.

I'm so curious:D I can't even wait to see Hashiro as a vampire:)

Great story i think is interesting you write what you think yours ideas i guess.

Chapter II: Blood

 

Genjon and Kon carried Hajiro into the SVC(Sanctuary Vampire Council) base. The lobby was meant for human employees to get to their stations. The floor was marble and well polished. There was a red couch in the left corner by the sliding door entrance. There were various plants in pots on glass tables in the lobby.

 

"Well, the janitors sure are going too be mad, this kid's blood is all over the floor."

"Not all of it, we patched his wounds up. Just some." Genjon and Kon fought hard to keep their fangs from shooting out their gums, and forcing them to go into a frenzy. Kon pressed "up" on the elevator and the steel doors opened. The trio(Hajiro counts) stepped inside the elevator and pressed "close door". The elevator rose to the third floor and opened. The group walked into the Grand Councilmen room, which is where all the members of the three main councils met. Councilmen Juron stood up at the site of the two vampires walking in with an unconscious human over Kon's shoulder.

 

"What is the meaning of this!" Juron barked.

"Its not what you think Juron. Please calm down." Genjon said, motioning to Kon to put Hajiro inside the Emergency Room(ER). Kon did so and hooked up a monitor and a scanner, to patrol Hajiro's condition. Kon called everyone to come inside.

"What's wrong Kon?" A vampire named Alice said, slightly worried.

"The boy is in the critical zone. One of us will have to turn him." Kon walked closer to the group by the door. The room was tense. No one felt like doing it, especially since he was a stranger.

"I...I will do it." Ellen, the youngest(based on the date she was made) vampire, said stepping forward slowly.

"Are you sure? Once you do it, he is your responsibility."

"Yes, I am sure."

"Very well then." Kon and Ellen walked toward Hajiro's bed. Ellen bit her lip and blood streamed down to her chin. She then kissed Hajiro. The vampire's blood slid down Hajiro's throat and his eyes opened wide in pain. Hajiro screamed as fangs began to grow in his mouth. All he saw were visions of vampires in armor marching with swords in hand, two full moons, and a red sky. Hajiro's heart thumped so loud and hard it felt like it was going to burst from his chest into millions of pieces. After about five more minutes of agony, the transformation was complete.

 

"What...What just happened to me?" Hajiro said in a raspy voice.

"You were blooded, turned into one of us. Although we usually let the person make the decision themselves after we explain what will happen to them and the rules, there was no time left for that. Since your attacker was a vampire and this happened near a crowded area, we didn't want to have to erase everyone's memories and kill you and all the people close to you. That's why Ellen chose to tun you."

"Ellen..." Hajiro turned his head and looked at her, "Twin sister... fraternal."

Ellen laughed and hugged Hajiro.

"Yes its me Hajiro."

Genotakin, the leader of the Sanctuary military, stepped forward.

"Ellen, do you mind if i train him. He will be your protector after all."

"Of course i don't mind! You can train him if you'd like."

Hajiro looked at his sister then nodded.

"Training begins tomorrow, five o'clock sharp." Genotakin said leaving the room.

 

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All done Chapter II. I'll try to finish Chapter III in a few days.

I'm still curious about this story. Keep writing! Keep writing!:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

that was pretty cool plz continue writing