Chapter 1: Falling into the Black...

A smoky haze covered the air in the small tavern, the room was barely decorated except for a few odds and ends placed on shelves, the room smelled of dirt, smoke, and alcohol. Drunkards sat in their chairs and played poker while the bartender dished out concoctions as if they were water. A man came into the tavern wearing a tattered brown hood. He walked up to the bar and sat down on a stool,

Nice!!

What a great description of the facts! The plot interests me as well and the way you write is kinda mysterious and/or dark: I like it so much.:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

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There's no problem :D:D:D:D:D:D

I was talking to sis about your story and I commented about the vision you impose to the reader about the apparently main charater - Erik - it's very nice: it gives us a mysterious impression of him, as if Erik was a mysterious fearless person; with an interesting past that connects him to Helst - sorry, it's just my crazy theories, you can ignore them if you want -

Very good Antruim, see what I said? You don't need to wait for others to like the story if you like it yourself everything will be fine. Who am I to be saying this anyway? I only have this to say: this story is great! You know how to lead our vision of the facts making the readers see not more than you let, making the curiosity grow, wanting for more. Good work!

Thanks guys! Oh and Namine your theory is very close to one of the many plots in this book. Gizelita thanks again because you probably already know that I second guess myself on my books a lot;)

Why would I be saying this if I didn't know? Anyway, continue your story 'cause I really like it.

Chapter 2: Renegade Soldier

Wow! I can't even wait for the rest of the story! It's better than I ever imagined. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Chapter 3: The Hunt begins

Mistery.... the wolf, the assasins, are they connected or not, why and how? Please continue, I can't wait :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Chapter 4: Encounters

This is too good, I can't understand how you could compare my storys with yours.

This is too good, I can't understand how you could compare my storys with yours.

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Thanks Gizelita most say that I am not going to make it in the publishing world.

This is too good' date=' I can't understand how you could compare my storys with yours.

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Thanks Gizelita most say that I am not going to make it in the publishing world.

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Sorry I keep commenting as him. I never look for who I logged in as.

Thanks Gizelita most say that I am not going to make it in the publishing world.

 

That's sad, this should be a book, I'm sure you have potential.

 

Sorry I keep commenting as him. I never look for who I logged in as.

 

I really know that, it happens sometimes with me and sis as well, but not so often.

This is a book lol. I have been pasting the chapters on here that is why they are so long.

I like long chapters, I hope one day I can pass in front of a famous book store and them look at the Top 10 sold of the month and find "Redemption" on the list.

I like long chapters, I hope one day I can pass in front of a famous book store and them look at the Top 10 sold of the month and find "Redemption" on the list.

 

I really hope that happens... along with the titles, HUNTED, LEGACY, THE ASSASSIN CHRONICALS, TYRIN'S JOURNEY, DESPAIR AND REPAIR, NIAMI'S NOTEBOOK, ADEL'S DIARI, MATT'S JOURNAL.... and many other's lol

So do I, and one day it's going to happen. You can be sure, I loved the titles btw.

So do I, and one day it's going to happen. You can be sure, I loved the titles btw.

 

Thanks, I am working on the next chapter now so it will be posted tonight or tomorrow.

Ok, I'll be waiting.

Chapter 5: just a Start

Alexis diligently rubbed her wet clothe over the table as she hummed a sweet song. Only her and two men were in the tavern, the early sun light lit up the room. She finished her cleaning and headed behind the bar.

I <3 this. You're an amazing writer! Besides minor grammatical errors, this was great

HAR HAR DERES AN ALEXIS IM PART OF DIS HAR HAR /shot