Posted October 2, 201015 yr Duh, just some random words, but these could be poems, come to think of it O_O see: how could you be so immense, with all the heartbreak and hearts, why the yeild of rally doesn't take the table turn? In the light/right of darkness, fall beyond the ocean of same colour, lies inbetween dream and reality hall with dark, empty corridor, manifested with thin air, jammed with clocks and their ticking sound Murmured in pain, ganged with toasted fill, my heart echoes to the depth of my heart Bear with it, it almost reaches balance Hearts of agony, hearts of yelling nature, hearts of too much hearts, I'll eat it all, again (kokoro or abstract heart)
October 2, 201015 yr "my heart echoes to the depth of my heart", not very clear on that one mate, but totally fine. If it t'wer me, "My heart echoes its silver screams to the depths of my soul hereafter..." Or some such sorts, but all in all the poem was a nice dark one. Now make a nice light one, if you can.
October 5, 201015 yr Author "my heart echoes to the depth of my heart", not very clear on that one mate, but totally fine. If it t'wer me, "My heart echoes its silver screams to the depths of my soul hereafter..." Or some such sorts, but all in all the poem was a nice dark one. Now make a nice light one, if you can. Heheh thanks for the critique, I was kinda hesitate at that part, too. And just for the record, it's not actually all dark: it's about someone who lost his most precious one then seek for the answer then eventually he knows what to do, to fight for the good, since the bad had killed her. So good end, actually.
October 6, 201015 yr Author Uhh, cheerful thoughts, mate. What? It's not cheerful enough for you? It begins with and end then ends with a beginning, isn't that beautiful. (In morale language: Tells you not to give up no matter how things seems to have come to an end). And, btw, the "my heart echoes to the depth of my heart" actually means his heart screams, but just echoed inside, he can still bear that inside to rejuvenate him. That's pretty much it... Well, maybe a bit different than normal thinking...
Duh, just some random words, but these could be poems, come to think of it O_O see:
how could you be so immense, with all the heartbreak and hearts, why the yeild of rally doesn't take the table turn?
In the light/right of darkness, fall beyond the ocean of same colour, lies inbetween dream and reality
hall with dark, empty corridor, manifested with thin air, jammed with clocks and their ticking sound
Murmured in pain, ganged with toasted fill, my heart echoes to the depth of my heart
Bear with it, it almost reaches balance
Hearts of agony, hearts of yelling nature, hearts of too much hearts, I'll eat it all, again
(kokoro or abstract heart)