Intro

 

Five orbs were created by masters. The orbs created the five elements. Lightining,Earth,Fire,Water,and Wind. A sword was created to contain these orbs. The orbs somehow were setted out into the world. Hunters gathered looking for the orbs. Thery banded together to get the orbs so they can change the world into their image. The sword went out to find a master so that he or she can get the orbs back into the blade. The person who was chosen might be you. If it's you, Then don't trust no one. A person you think is your friend might be a hunter. The orbs can be anywhere on Earth. It's the chosen blader destiny to stop the hunters and get the orbs before them. Read to see if he/she can get the orbs before the hunters.

isent there only 4 elements?

Sounds like a good plot to the story. I agree with Aqua7KH. I really think there is only four elements. But you can always add more anyway

isent there only 4 elements?

 

Sounds like a good plot to the story. I agree with Aqua7KH. I really think there is only four elements. But you can always add more anyway

 

 

Not exactly the elements he used, but there are 5 elements. Plus it's his story, so he controls how many there are in the first place. Just saying.

 

Anyways, I think I am interested in this story, looking forward to the 1st chapter.

I

 

'' They say when we die, Our souls become one with the Earth. I think we just stay with mother nature itself.''

 

Water in the river rose from the shore. The wind blows it's average breeze. Fire at a camp still burned. The earth still gaining cracks by mother nature. As well as lightining erupts from a distance from the city of Setu. The city has many tall buildings as well as small towns inside the city. Birds hitted a window of a boys' house. The boy woke up. He rub his eye's as he woke up. The boy's name is Ra Cortez. He has blue eye's as the color of the sky, Brown hair of the earth, And a height of a small tree.

 

'' Dumb birds. Waking me up.''wined Ra as he sat up in his bed. He then standed up after a small talk to himself. He look around his room to see if there was anything new to it. Just books from school on a shelf thats loacted by the window. A closet that's by his door. He then started walking towards his closet. He took out a black shirt and a pair of black pants. He then change into them. He then got his black jacket on and walk outside. He look around to see if his friend Sifer Gonzlaz was waiting for him. His friend was nowehere to be seen. he then started walking towards the book store to see if he was there. A man then walk out of a store and started following Ra.

Chapter one was suspenseful! I love it!

II

 

'' Elements are one with us. Thats a rule we shall never forget.''

 

Ra walked though the city for about 10 minutes 'till he found the book store. He then walked into it. Ra look at the two shelfs that were on the right and left part of the store. Ra loved the smell of the cafe they severed here with the books. Ra then look at the counter and saw his friend Sifer there. He had short red hair, orange eye's that had the color fire inside them. He was 5.9 inches tall. He was wearing his work clothes. His work shirt and pants were black and green. Ra then walk up to the counter.

 

'' Hey Ra. Anybook you might love to read?''asked Sifer as he said hi to his best friend. Ra had the felling that he was being watch. He turned around to see if there was anybody watching him. There wasn't. Ra then faced Sifer again. '' Say, Sifer. Is there anybody that looks werid to you?''questioned Ra as he look at his friend. Sifer then started acting werid. Then a man walk into the store.'' Hello. How can I help you?''asked Sifer as he walk from the back of the counter and went up to the man.'' We have some new books in. Will you like to see them?''asked Sifer as he was ready to lead the man to the books.

 

'' No. I don't want to want those. Sifer Gonzlaz, Where are you keeping it?''asked the man. Sifer made a fist into his hand. Ra then went up to Sifer.'' Ah. Just the boy I was looking for.''said the man. Ra then looked at the man stange.'' What do you mean?''questioned Ra.'' Ra Cortez. Give me the sword.''said the man. Ra then looked at the man.'' I don't know what your talking about.''said Ra as he was confused. The man then made a fist and then everything went white.

This is so good. Great job. Can't wait for the next chapter.

III

 

'' No matter how many times to get rid of them. The elements stay with us.''

 

The city of Setu is at peace right now, But else where. A power destoryed half of a store. Police are on their way to the scene. A man watches over the scene. He then had wind come around him. The man disappeared without a trace.

 

Ra and Sifer layed on the ground with a few burn marks. Ra saw the man in the black coat unharmed. The people in the store got hit by the somewhat magic attack. The man started walking towards Sifer and Ra who were on the ground. Ra looked at the man and then tryed to move. His body was numb.

 

'' How did you like that? That's the power of lightining from close range.''said the man as he acted funny. Ra tryed to get up. He couldn't move at all. He looked around and couldn't see his friend Sifer. The man then pulled out a sword out.'' Now, Good-bye Ra Cortez. The one who we thought had the blade.''said the man as he raised his blade ready to attack. The man then lowered his arm ready to attack. then a fire like attack blocked it. Ra opened his eye's and saw the fire come from Sifer's hand.'' You finally show your power. Now I can deal with you Sifer Gonzlaz, EX-Element hunter.''said the man.

Cool. This story appears to have a good road ahead

IV

 

'' They say the elements were made by people. I say that they were created by a being that's not from this world.''

 

Ra looked at the fire blade. Sifer was serious right now. The man in blade then took off his hood. He had short blonde hair, blue eye's, and he was 5.11 inches. Sifer then back the man up. The man then looked at Ra and Sifer.

 

'' Sifer. Why don't you come back? We gave you so much and yet you left us.''wined the man.

 

'' I left because I felt I didn't belong there. I won't go back. You can't make me Luke!''yelled Sifer as he then made the fire blue. Luke looked at Sifer. He must have know this would've happened. Well, Luke had no other choice.

 

'' Guess you must die then.''replyed Luke as he then had lightining come around the blade. Sifer got ready. Luke then rushed towards Sifer, but wind then blew them away from each other. Sifer and Ra flew out of the store. Luke then hit the ground hard. A man in the same coat Luke was wearing was there.

 

'' Not now. We'll kill these two later. Come on. Master is waiting.''said the man. Luke then nodded and they then disappeared. Sifer and Ra then opened their eye's. They saw the store was half destoryed. Sifer then look at Ra who was really confused.

 

'' I guess I better start talking.''said Sifer as he rubbed his hand behind his head.

 

'' You think?''said Ra as he was angry.

Really good,I like it. Please write more.