Need some help with Beowulf essay!

[Kaneki Ken 1,516]

Anyone who read Beowulf, I need u to read this thesis (beginning paragraph) I have:

 

Beowulf is an epic poem that tells the story of Beowulf in an oral-manner. The author of the poem describes Beowulf’s life as an epic hero that is courageous, fierce, and loyal to his king, and his people, but also boastful and a flawed man as well.

 

In ur opinion, is it good? or needs more detail, and if it needs more detail, what should I include?

 

Keep in mind that my three paragraphs are gonna be about Beowulf's courage, his fierce strength, and his loyalty.

 

This is a serious topic, no jokes!

[Amon 4,279]

Be sure to make connections to all of the gay sex metaphors. If your teacher plays video games, you can probably get bonus points for comparing the ending to Skyrim

 

kyrim.

[Kaneki Ken 1,516]

Be sure to make connections to all of the gay sex metaphors. If your teacher plays video games, you can probably get bonus points for comparing the ending to Skyrim

 

kyrim.

 

every topic gotta have a troll...

 

But seriously need help

[Oishii 3,987]

Anyone who read Beowulf, I need u to read this thesis (beginning paragraph) I have:

 

Beowulf is an epic poem that tells the story of Beowulf in an oral-manner. The author of the poem describes Beowulf’s life as an epic hero that is courageous, fierce, and loyal to his king, and his people, but also boastful and a flawed man as well.

 

In ur opinion, is it good? or needs more detail, and if it needs more detail, what should I include?

 

Keep in mind that my three paragraphs are gonna be about Beowulf's courage, his fierce strength, and his loyalty.

 

This is a serious topic, no jokes!

 

You're only going to write about the loyalty, strength and such but leave out the character's flaws that are also mentioned in the thesis? Personally, I found that last statement to be very interesting in contrast to his strengths.

 

I can see two things you can do. You could always omit the last part of the thesis so that the thesis still illustrates the structure your paper will be. If it were my paper, I would probably make the first paragraph about his strengths, the second about his flaws, and then do a third on what his strengths and flaws mean to the piece as a whole. You would have to rewrite the thesis again, but to me it would be something I would find interesting to write.

 

Also, make sure your thesis makes an argument rather than a statement of fact. I'm not familiar of Beowulf, but can someone potentially disagree that Beowulf isn't strong, courageous and loyal? If not, then it's probably a statement of fact.

[Think Pink 1,967]

What was the question?

That will determine if your thesis statement is okay for use. If you just restated the question, then there's a problem.

[Kaneki Ken 1,516]

You're only going to write about the loyalty, strength and such but leave out the character's flaws that are also mentioned in the thesis? Personally, I found that last statement to be very interesting in contrast to his strengths.

 

I can see two things you can do. You could always omit the last part of the thesis so that the thesis still illustrates the structure your paper will be. If it were my paper, I would probably make the first paragraph about his strengths, the second about his flaws, and then do a third on what his strengths and flaws mean to the piece as a whole. You would have to rewrite the thesis again, but to me it would be something I would find interesting to write.

 

Also, make sure your thesis makes an argument rather than a statement of fact. I'm not familiar of Beowulf, but can someone potentially disagree that Beowulf isn't strong, courageous and loyal? If not, then it's probably a statement of fact.

 

OMG! This helps me! I have never truly thought of the Flaws! Thank you Oishii!

[Dave 5,715]

Anyone who read Beowulf, I need u to read this thesis (beginning paragraph) I have:

 

Beowulf is an epic poem that tells the story of Beowulf in an oral-manner. The author of the poem describes Beowulf’s life as an epic hero that is courageous, fierce, and loyal to his king, and his people, but also boastful and a flawed man as well.

 

In ur opinion, is it good? or needs more detail, and if it needs more detail, what should I include?

 

Keep in mind that my three paragraphs are gonna be about Beowulf's courage, his fierce strength, and his loyalty.

 

This is a serious topic, no jokes!

 

It's been a while since I did a high school essay, but are you limited to the three paragraph structure?

 

For your opening paragraph, you might try and provide a bit more context for what you intend to say. Try and provide more details establishing the subject (Beowulf), what there is to consider (thus setting up your reader to see where you're coming from and where you're going to go. It also helps to show the reader what it is you intend to argue), and then provide your thesis to establish what the essay is about and what you intend to prove. You have the third part down very well, but Ifeel it would be worth to elaborate on Beaowulf a bit more. Say what the story is about (generally), who Beowulf is and what he does, and from there, you might also add some hints at your thesis by giving a few notes on how he does certain heroic things, and then allude to certain flaws. It helps give the reader a better idea of the subject material, garners more interest, and sets up the thesis and the basis on which you plan on arguing.