Roy 137 Posted September 5, 2013 (edited) Hopefully I don't stop making more chapters, please give me feed back and area's where I can improve in, Thank you Chapter 1: The first day of Memories It was 1:20 p.m, a regular school day in Tetsoya High School. In a classroom was a blond boy by the name of Roxas. There were rumors all about him such as Roxas being a orphan And homeless. Nobody knew where Roxas came from and when he came, he just suddenly appeared said many people. Roxas was always the quiet shy boy since he was born, which lead to him being lonely all the time. The only time a person heard Roxas speak was when he was greatly ill and those words were "Axel...?"That day Roxas had no clue about what was about to happen that would change his life. Edited September 5, 2013 by Lucem Sora 1 advfox reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 5, 2013 If this ends up as yaoi, i'm gonna puke.... mild AukoRoku is acceptable. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 If this ends up as yaoi, i'm gonna puke.... mild AukoRoku is acceptable. I don't support yaoi with my favorite characters...I might update it in two or three days ( depends on of I'n not lazy...heck I might update today) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 I don't support yaoi with my favorite characters...I might update it in two or three days ( depends on of I'n not lazy...heck I might update today) Was Jking about AukoRikuo. Yaoi's disqusting. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Was Jking about AukoRikuo. Yaoi's disqusting. what's AukoRikuo? I agree! Yaoi is disguisting Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 what's AukoRikuo? I agree! Yaoi is disguisting AukoRikuo is Axel+Roxas. <_< Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 no the only time I even would mentain him in the story would be a connection to the story,,,I'll explain the plot after chapter 2 or 3...depends on my mood AukoRikuo is Axel+Roxas. <_< Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 no the only time I even would mentain him in the story would be a connection to the story,,,I'll explain the plot after chapter 2 or 3...depends on my mood Ookie dokie. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Ookie dokie. though what do you think of the story so far...please be honest I don't care if it's harsh or mean Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 though what do you think of the story so far...please be honest I don't care if it's harsh or mean Kinda vauge on the details. That's all. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Kinda vauge on the details. That's all. what does vauge mean? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 what does vauge mean? Few, little attention to, not paying attention. Describe thoughts of your characters, describe the people.. just helping, no trolling. bye. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Few, little attention to, not paying attention. Describe thoughts of your characters, describe the people.. just helping, no trolling. bye. I was doing a third person first since Roxas is can't talk to himself yet...( first chapter usually boring) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Philip Ellwell 5,487 Posted September 6, 2013 I was doing a third person first since Roxas is can't talk to himself yet...( first chapter usually boring) ahhh: i see. nevmind, then. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 (edited) Chapter 2: The Strange People It's 1:35 p.m , 3rd block is over and just one more hour until school is over. As all the students rush to leave the classroom, Roxas with a emotionless expression is slowly picking up his supplies. In the hallway, a certain group seems to have a certain interest in Roxas " Hey are you serious? I mean he seems like a weird kid to me" " Come on! let's give it a try! He seems rather lonely" After a minute of talking, the strange group have devised a plan to meet up with Roxas, as they finish talking, Roxas steps out into the hallway. as Roxas passes by the odd group he noticed a particular boy snicker and felt a emotion unknown to him. He decides to ignore it and heads towards his next class After a hour, school was finally over. Just like in the classroom, Roxas was the last one to leave out of the school. As Roxas exits the school, he is surprised to see three people outside waiting for him .Then a guy with blond hair, blue eyes, and green vest speaks up. " Hey kid! So what do you think of school!?" "..." "Ahahaha I hate it too man! I already like you! So what's your name?" "..." "Ohh I see, still not comfortable being around a cool guy like me! Hahaha Alright I'll start. I'm Hayner and the guy here is Pence and the girl there is..." " Hayner! I'll introduce myself! I'm Olette, I'm the responsible one around here. It's nice to meet you." " It's nice to you meet you too. As you heard from Hayner, I'm Pence and i tend to just follow them. Umm Hayner can we go, I'm hungry." " We'll see you around tomorrow." said Hayner As the group was about to leave,Roxas again felt a strange feeling. As Roxas notices that new feeling, he subconsciously said "...Roxas..." " Huh did you say your name was Roxas?" said Hayner "...Yes..." " Well nice to meet ya Roxas! Wanna hang out sometime?" "..." " Hmm I guess I'll invite you tomorrow to our special place since your still not comfortable enough yet" As Hayner said those words, the group left and after walking for sometime they turned around and waved goodbye. Roxas again taken by surprised, tried coping the good bye but stopped himself midway. Then Hayner, Olette, and Pence noticed something odd happen that nobody has saw Roxas do. Roxas was smiling. Edited September 6, 2013 by Lucem Sora Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jake 1,488 Posted September 6, 2013 Awesome story im enjoying it already! will sora be in these stories? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Awesome story im enjoying it already! will sora be in these stories? Sadly no...I will make reference to Sora. I'll explain the plot later Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jake 1,488 Posted September 6, 2013 Sadly no...I will make reference to Sora. I'll explain the plot later Its ok im still enjoying the story Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 6, 2013 Its ok im still enjoying the story Glad you like it so far...but what parts don't you like? I'll try to make chapter 3 as soon as possible...and then I explain the plot after I post the third chapter Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jake 1,488 Posted September 6, 2013 Glad you like it so far...but what parts don't you like? I'll try to make chapter 3 as soon as possible...and then I explain the plot after I post the third chapter I actually like all of it Theres no problems as im concerned Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 7, 2013 (edited) Chapter 3: The Long Wait As Roxas woke up, he woke up with another strange feeling, excitement. Roxas always feeling lonely, now has a chance to finally make friends. Though new to one feeling leads to a opposite feeling,he also feels fear. He feels fear of being rejected and being cheated on. Yet Roxas just ignores the new feelings. As Roxas walked to school, he couldn't help but wonder about the strange feelings he had. His mind raced with questions, that only lead to him being more confused . Though there was one question he really wanted a answer to: Why is it that he now is starting to develop feelings, when he should've felt something in his heart years ago. That one question was the question that bother him the most, yet also the only one he wanted a answer to.This was nothing but a confusing matter to Roxas but also made him wonder what else in life is he missing of. "Roxas!" said the Teacher after calling Roxas 20 times. "..." " Roxas you dazed off in my class but since your a good student consider this your warning." "...Sorry..." Everybody in the class was surprised to hear Roxas actually talk, even the Teacher was surprised to hear him talk. There was chatter everyone about Roxas. but Roxas like always just ignored them and continue thinking about emotion. Though this time his mind was blank since he only experienced three emotions so far.Causing Roxas a great deal of frustration. It was almost lunchtime for Roxas, Roxas usually hated to go in a very socialize place but now he was now excited to go. There was three minutes until lunch starts. Those three minutes to Roxas felt like a slow death to him. He wondered if he would meet up with the new peers he made, he couldn't stand the wait anymore. One minute left, when Roxas glanced at the clock, his mind couldn't stop but fill with excitement to the point where he could barely control it.. He needed to keep his cool down for if he gets on trouble again, he'll have no other option but to socialize with the teacher *RIIIIIINNNNNNNGGGGGG* Upon hearing that sound, Roxas mind started to relax and like always was the last one to go to a place. As Roxas entered the cafeteria he felt a great deal of depression. Roxas couldn't see Pence, Olette, and Hayner anywhere, Roxas gave up on trying to meet with the new strangers he meet and got his lunch like always. Once Roxas sat down by himself he ate slowly and felt lonely. Roxas thought he felt depression, for that is a feeling Roxas usually feels everyday when he see's that he has no friends, but in fact he felt disappointment. Three hours later, 2:45 p.m. Roxas again started to feel excited, since he might have another chance to see them. Roxas deep inside has never gave up the idea since he truly wanted friends. He couldn't wait until it was 2:50 p.m, those five minutes felt like being tortured and dying slowly at the same time. Roxas was all packed up and ready to leave, in fact he was actually crawling slowly to the door so he will be the first out of the door. 2:49 p.m, just a minute until the bell- *RRRRRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!* Roxas ran with all his might outside the door and didn't stop to look back. What lies ahead of Roxas path, betrayal or a new beginning? Will Roxas Impatient waiting be worth for nothing or in fact actually be worth it. All the answers lie ahead in that door. Edited September 7, 2013 by Lucem Sora 1 advfox reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jake 1,488 Posted September 7, 2013 (edited) YAY CHAPTER 3! DO MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM FILLED WITH THE POWER OF LIGHT! Edited September 7, 2013 by CyborgHD13 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 7, 2013 YAY CHAPTER 3! DO MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM FILLED WITH THE POWER OF LIGHT! you actually like it? what's so good about it? I just wanna know? I felt like I did half my best on this one Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jake 1,488 Posted September 7, 2013 you actually like it? what's so good about it? I just wanna know? I felt like I did half my best on this one i like the story it entertains me i never get entertaned besides playing Kingdom hearts Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roy 137 Posted September 7, 2013 i like the story it entertains me i never get entertaned besides playing Kingdom hearts is this a good thing? well I decided to put the plot later in chapter 4...the plot contains to many spoilers. Thanks Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
