Please tell me if this story is good or not not the first story I've written before. I might write more to this but I'm not all to sure yet. So I hope you like it.
I sat by the end of my window. I had my eye's closed just lost in my own thought. The sun was setting around this time of the day. It was about time for the fireflies to come out and light the whole town. Or maybe parts of it actually, but whenever they came out it seemd to have everyone forget about the war that was takeing place. Sometimes I would even forget myself. I'll admit I do alot.The fireflies seemd to have that effect on the villagers here. I opened my eye's when I heard the door behind me that led to my little brothers room open. I turned around to see my little brother was in his pj's. A stripped shirt and pants that match it and a little sleeping cap on his head. You could see some of his kinda curley brown hair come out of it but not much. His bright blue eyes were looking at the fireflies that were in my window already."Kasumi, the fireflies are out already. Do you want to come outside with me and look at them?"He asked full of joy. I smiled at him and got up and walked right over to him."Sure Shino. come on let's go."I said to him and picked him up. We walked out onto the porch and sat down in our favorite spots. We sat there for a long time not syaing a word to each other at all. He looked at the fireflies. I looked at the stars.I looked at each of the stars. They were so pretty tonight. Each one sparkled more than the next one. It gave a good effect for the time of night. The glow the fireflies made and the glow from the stars made everything seem so peaceful. "Kasumi,I'm getting sleepy."Shino said rubbing his eye's with both of his hands.I smiled at him and got up and held my hand out for him to take. "Come on let's go to bed."I said to him still holding my hand out and smileing at him. He took my hand and we both walked back into the house. I walked with him into his room and tucked him in. "Goodnight Shino."I said to him as I was about to leave I could hear him say in a sleepy voice."Goodngiht sister." I walked into my room and sat by the window like I did earlier. I gazed into the starry night sky. "The moon is so pretty tonight."I said outloud but quiet enough not to wake Shino up. Shino always seemd to make her happy no matter what kind of mood she was in. I guess the reason is that there mother and father died when they were both very young and they don't have contect with no one else really but that grandmother and grandfather but the lived in China so they didn't see them much. So Shinno was all she really had left really. She missed her parents dearly so did Shino, but they were murdered right in front of there eyes. The enemy that Japan is fighting agaistant killed there mother and father because they were simply in the way of things. A tear came down Kasumi face as she thought of her mother and father. She got up and walked over to the other side of the room and walked over to her table with pictures and papers everywhere. She picked up the last photograph that was taken of there parents and her and Shino all togather. Shino was toodler then and Kasumi was 14, but they all looked happy as can be.She held the picture close to her heart and started to cry quietly to herself. She walked over to her bed and sat down with the picture still in her hands. She creid and cried. Even though she was 16 now she missed them more than anything in the world.Soon later she fell asleep with the picture in her hands.
Again hoped you liked it and please tell me what you think!
Please tell me if this story is good or not not the first story I've written before. I might write more to this but I'm not all to sure yet. So I hope you like it.
I sat by the end of my window. I had my eye's closed just lost in my own thought. The sun was setting around this time of the day. It was about time for the fireflies to come out and light the whole town. Or maybe parts of it actually, but whenever they came out it seemd to have everyone forget about the war that was takeing place. Sometimes I would even forget myself. I'll admit I do alot.The fireflies seemd to have that effect on the villagers here. I opened my eye's when I heard the door behind me that led to my little brothers room open. I turned around to see my little brother was in his pj's. A stripped shirt and pants that match it and a little sleeping cap on his head. You could see some of his kinda curley brown hair come out of it but not much. His bright blue eyes were looking at the fireflies that were in my window already."Kasumi, the fireflies are out already. Do you want to come outside with me and look at them?"He asked full of joy. I smiled at him and got up and walked right over to him."Sure Shino. come on let's go."I said to him and picked him up. We walked out onto the porch and sat down in our favorite spots. We sat there for a long time not syaing a word to each other at all. He looked at the fireflies. I looked at the stars.I looked at each of the stars. They were so pretty tonight. Each one sparkled more than the next one. It gave a good effect for the time of night. The glow the fireflies made and the glow from the stars made everything seem so peaceful. "Kasumi,I'm getting sleepy."Shino said rubbing his eye's with both of his hands.I smiled at him and got up and held my hand out for him to take. "Come on let's go to bed."I said to him still holding my hand out and smileing at him. He took my hand and we both walked back into the house. I walked with him into his room and tucked him in. "Goodnight Shino."I said to him as I was about to leave I could hear him say in a sleepy voice."Goodngiht sister." I walked into my room and sat by the window like I did earlier. I gazed into the starry night sky. "The moon is so pretty tonight."I said outloud but quiet enough not to wake Shino up. Shino always seemd to make her happy no matter what kind of mood she was in. I guess the reason is that there mother and father died when they were both very young and they don't have contect with no one else really but that grandmother and grandfather but the lived in China so they didn't see them much. So Shinno was all she really had left really. She missed her parents dearly so did Shino, but they were murdered right in front of there eyes. The enemy that Japan is fighting agaistant killed there mother and father because they were simply in the way of things. A tear came down Kasumi face as she thought of her mother and father. She got up and walked over to the other side of the room and walked over to her table with pictures and papers everywhere. She picked up the last photograph that was taken of there parents and her and Shino all togather. Shino was toodler then and Kasumi was 14, but they all looked happy as can be.She held the picture close to her heart and started to cry quietly to herself. She walked over to her bed and sat down with the picture still in her hands. She creid and cried. Even though she was 16 now she missed them more than anything in the world.Soon later she fell asleep with the picture in her hands.
Again hoped you liked it and please tell me what you think!