GothicSlenderman 173 Posted October 10, 2015 I've been working on a new series I want to do for my YouTube channel. It's called The Incarnation of Cruentus Demonia. Unfortunately it won't be in any fancy animated form but instead animatic. For those who don't know animatic is just like a storyboard but with voices behind it. I know, it doesn't sound too interesting, but I really want to spread this story I've been working on sense 2013. I want people to focus more on the story rather than the visuals at hand. Here I have a few character designs I've made recently, some I think are pretty decent. Others tell me I need more work. If you have any thoughts or advice please share down below! I really want to improve on this. It's my passion to make this story a reality! Thanks for whatever you can offer! Zack Shadron is our main character. A 19 Year old College Goth with a heart of compassion and desire of protection. At first he will not seem like much sense he's seemingly thrown into the mix with no warning, but later on he proves that he is strong and has a will of 1,000 men. Even with a broken heart that Alice Darksin is mending. Alice Darksin is the love interest...for the first episode. Unlike most stories, the story will focus on them in their current relationship rather than how they get together. This adds more of a sense of chemistry in their actions and less awkward moments. Alice is the strongest character in the group and is usually conceived as the leader but even she has her limits. Alice is strong in muscle but Zack is strong in emotion. She has just as much compassion as Zack Cruentus Demonia, while his name is in the title he is the series antagonist. A blood sucking monster who gets stronger with the more blood he drinks. While he has the shape of a human, he is definitely not human. No emotion and no sense of care. Gem Kyoko. 7 Years of her life her waste by a group called the DSA. For that she wants revenge. She has no common sense when it comes to speaking to others, but controls herself in combat Razoth Noziroh's parents were killed by Cruentus 7 years ago. Similar to Gem he wants revenge. Opposite to Gem however, he controls himself in conversations but not in combat and often needs someone to hold him back The first story arcs antagonist the Warden/Priest Jonathan Blagee of the DSA. He believes Magic is man's greatest sin. Force Blagee the daughter of Jonathan Blagee Sync Chronic also known as God's Eye Inflar Expind a close ally of Jonathan Mr. Tuggles the anti Social stuffed penguin with frost magic. Bisexual Boxers the literal pair of Bisexual Boxers with Sexuality magic TERROR the Red Skull who loves to torture with literal Torture Magic all comedy relief characters Track is a comedy relief character to be along side Mr. Tuggles, Bisexual Boxers & TERROR Raiden, the Shadow of Zeus' Lighting Snow ??? I attempted to give Zack Shadron armor like the keyblade warriors 1 Captain Swagblader reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Captain Swagblader 280 Posted October 10, 2015 Better than my fanfics. 10/10 dude! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
GothicSlenderman 173 Posted October 10, 2015 Better than my fanfics. 10/10 dude! Thanks! It really means a lot! 1 Captain Swagblader reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Minato arisato 253 Posted October 10, 2015 Are you open to References to take inspiration from? i feel like you could make use of them Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
GothicSlenderman 173 Posted October 10, 2015 Are you open to References to take inspiration from? i feel like you could make use of them Yes, in fact I have taken some inspiration from multiple anime and video games. For example: -Zack's jack and hair is based on Yu Narukami from Persona 4 -Alice takes inspiration from Alice Liddell from Alice Madness Returns, Mikasa Ackerman from Attack on Titan & Erza Scarlet from Fairy Tail -Raiden takes inspiration from Gajeel from Fairy Tail -Force takes inspiration from both Kagura from Fairy Tail & Lady Satsuki from Kill la Kill -and Sync takes inspiration from Houka from Kill la Kill Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Minato arisato 253 Posted October 10, 2015 Yes, in fact I have taken some inspiration from multiple anime and video games. For example: -Zack's jack and hair is based on Yu Narukami from Persona 4 -Alice takes inspiration from Alice Liddell from Alice Madness Returns, Mikasa Ackerman from Attack on Titan & Erza Scarlet from Fairy Tail -Raiden takes inspiration from Gajeel from Fairy Tail -Force takes inspiration from both Kagura from Fairy Tail & Lady Satsuki from Kill la Kill -and Sync takes inspiration from Houka from Kill la Kill the guy from kill la kill was very noticeable lol but i meant could I refer you to stuff to check out to expand this concept? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
GothicSlenderman 173 Posted October 10, 2015 the guy from kill la kill was very noticeable lol but i meant could I refer you to stuff to check out to expand this concept? Oh! Sure thanks! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Minato arisato 253 Posted October 10, 2015 Oh! Sure thanks! Have you Checked out H.P love craft's Novels? it involves a lot of omnipotent beings or unknown horror Bloodborne takes a lot from this, but has a concept of the Night of the hunt with beast with a gothic aesthetic And if you like Persona, check out Shin Megami Tensei series as it has unique concepts that you could take notes from Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
GothicSlenderman 173 Posted October 10, 2015 Have you Checked out H.P love craft's Novels? it involves a lot of omnipotent beings or unknown horror Bloodborne takes a lot from this, but has a concept of the Night of the hunt with beast with a gothic aesthetic And if you like Persona, check out Shin Megami Tensei series as it has unique concepts that you could take notes from I absolutely love H.P. Lovecraft's creations! And honestly, they would fit the mood for the incarnation considering it's supposed to be a action/horror hybrid. And I've never really gotten into Shin Megami Tensei but I'll take a look and see what I can get! 1 Minato arisato reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Minato arisato 253 Posted October 10, 2015 I absolutely love H.P. Lovecraft's creations! And honestly, they would fit the mood for the incarnation considering it's supposed to be a action/horror hybrid. And I've never really gotten into Shin Megami Tensei but I'll take a look and see what I can get! Great to hear, hope I gave some good references 1 GothicSlenderman reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
