I DON'T OWN ANYTHING THATS PART OF THET KH SERIES

Intro

This is a story about two hero's who saved the world that was all the worlds as one. They name's are Kuto and Uni. They will go though a a walk to save the world from an evil force. Will they win and save the world or will they destory it. This is up to you. Hope you love the story when it comes.

 

If you want a story of how they destory then say it. The same thing goes for saving it. The most votes for the two things our heros can do is up to you. vote now and chose a side of the story you want.

Before you even BEGIN this story, let's see what we should work on so far...

 

- Spelling

Without proper spelling, a story is very flawed, and it looks very unprofessional. There is a spell checker button, and it would take two seconds of your life to put it to work. If you can't bother to do the work, then don't even bother writing.

 

- Grammar

Again, without grammar, a story is flawed and unprofessional-looking. Words sometimes don't even make sense if they are used in the incorrect context, which would be grammar right here. For instance, everytime you write "heroes", you write it as "hero's". "Heroes" means multiple of the heroes. (Did that sentance make any sense? ._.) "Hero's" is possesive--you're talking about something that one hero owns. Do you get it now? I repeat: if you can't bother to do the work, then don't bother writing at all.

 

- The Story

I like the idea of the people who are going to be reading this story voting, but that's also problematic. Before you even being a story, you should have an idea of your characters personalities, their lives, and at least the main plot of the story. You wouldn't be able to start for a while before you came up with all of this, and I'm doubting you'll wait.

 

/end rant

 

I always like the stories about good guys more, haha. I'd say probably making them nice. Do try to improve your spelling and grammer, though. ;3

Do you use the word "forgoton" in every single thread title?

Wait a second txa. Before you even start:

 

Spelling: Use the spell check. If your spelling is not very good, then people will have a hard time understanding the story

 

Grammar: You need to use better grammar if you are going to write a good story. If not, then people will have a hard time understanding the story.

 

 

Plot: The plot looks ok, I guess

 

 

 

And one final Question: Do almost all of your characters end with the suffix "uto"?

Before you even BEGIN this story,

 

 

Wait a second txa. Before you even start:

 

 

 

 

-sigh-

Shouldn't you be writing the storyline YOU want to write?

Ok the winner of the poll is destory. I'll start it right now.

 

Chapter 1: I make a fire blade(Uni.

I was walking in my village which was called Tekui. It was a nice village. It had a statue of the founder in the center. A church behind it. It also had a blacksimth that can make weapons for the warrior's here. I was the pupil of the blacksimth. I went to the shop and saw my master. He had had long black hair, Red eyes, and he always wears a piece of clothing that protects him from the heat.'' Hello master. I'm here to start my day.'' I said. He looked at me.'' Hello Uni. My name is Jack. You can call me J or Master.''yelled Jack as he was yelling over the fire noise. I started working on my frist sword. I started to put flame marks on it to make look like a fire blade. I finished it in 30 minutes. My master looked at me and said something under his breath. I heard what he said.'' Hes unless. I need to kill him.''. I freaked out and got anger. I got up and picked up the blade and stabed my master in the heart.'' Fire blash.'' I said while being quiet. My master died and his heart went into the sky. I started to wonder what just happen. I got out of the amroy and went in the forest. I saw the village people starting to look for me. I ran deep into the forest and i was getting sleepy. I started to fall asleep. I went into a cave and fell asleep hopeing i would be safe.

I hope you like the frist chapter.

It's not perfect but it's not bad. It good and I think you should write the other chapters. Grammer could use a little work though.

Ohhhh, boy -_-' You didn't listen to anything we said. -sigh-

 

I know you're not really listening to me, so here's just your little overview:

 

-Spelling

 

-Grammar

 

-When you use parentheses, you have to put TWO of them (like this)

 

-Don't capatalize unless it's a name or the beginning of a sentance

 

-Some of your sentances are short and choppy--combine them to make them flow.