Hunter Hawk

Wow! This is really good, keep up!

Pretty good poems, but I really think you should work on your grammar a bit more, cuz if you won't some things will come out with no sense. Like this one I noticed: but now I don't fell nothing I'm pretty sure you wanted to write feel (sensing emotions) and not fell ( past form of falling down ). But that's ok. Believe me, if you put enough effort in writing, amazing things can come out. And don't give up on those mistakes just keep going. Even I made a lot of mistakes at first, but with a lot of hard work I managed to write a lot of stories. So, never give up just keep going!

Awwwww such beautiful story!!!! Your stories are freaking awsome, but this made my heart melt. Don't ever stop writing, cuz you're my inspiration for writing. And merry christmas to you too.

Chapter Eleven: Snow Ven was about to head back, when his back was hit by a snowball. He looked back, seeing Ienzo with another snowball. Ienzo:*smiling* Gotcha! Ven: Why did you do that for? Ienzo: Don’t tell me you don’t know how to play snowballing either. Ven: Is that some kind of game? Ienzo: Yeah! You just make a ball from the snow and throw it into the other person. It doesn’t hurt much cuz balls are made from soft snow. Ven did felt a bit pain. Snowball hit his wing, but either way he was happy to see Ienzo. Soon after they were both wildly play snowballing. In the end they were all wet from the snow. Ven: That sure is a nice game! Ienzo: Told you! Do you need a break? I could really use one. Ven: Sure. Kids went to the nearest bench and sat on it. For some time they were just looking on a bright white snow. Ienzo: I missed you… Terra said you were sick… so I waited until you recover. Ven: Yeah… I missed you too. Ienzo: But you know the cool thing? Just three days before… Christmas!!! Ven: Really? Oh… Ienzo: What’s wrong? Ven: I don’t know what I should give Terra for Calm… I mean Christmas. Ienzo: Don’t worry. You still have some days left… but speaking of which… what’s that? Despite the bright white snow, Ienzo noticed some white things in it. White feathers! They must have fallen off Ven’s wings during their snowballing game. Ienzo picked some of them when Ven turned completely pale. Ienzo: Weird… I didn’t see any birds during the winter… Are you ok? You seem pale. Ven:*trembles* No… I mean yes… I’m ok. Ienzo: Are you sure? *looks on feathers again* Uncle showed me some feathers that looked exactly the same as those. Ven:*turns towards Terra’s house* I think I should go home… or Terra will be worried. *is about to walk away* Ienzo: Wait! When Ienzo tried to pull his arm, he pulled his entire coat. Ven’s wings were completely revealed right in front of his friend. Ienzo:*shocked* Ven… you’re… you’re an angel? Ven quickly put the coat back. He sadly looked right in Ienzo’s staring eyes. Ven:*sadly* Please! Don’t tell your uncle about it. If you do… Terra said something terrible will happen. Please, don’t tell anybody about this! Ienzo first took a deep breath then slapped his face and looked at Ven again. Then he went slowly to him, touching his face and ruffling his hair. Angel only looked weirdly on him. Ienzo: Sorry… I needed to check if I’m not dreaming… So you are real. Uncle told me many times that you exist, but I thought you’re just a fairytale. Ven: No, we really are real. I just… ran away when somebody wanted to kidnapped me…then found myself here. Ienzo: Wow! Can you tell me the whole story? Ven: Maybe inside. It’s very cold here and… what are you doing here if I can ask? Ienzo: You mean here? Oh, I wanted to play with you and I ask uncle if I can go visit you. He said yes, but only until the evening. Ven: Great! Together they went back to house, where Terra was still snoring. Ven: *shakes Terra’s arm* Come on Terra! You’ve been sleeping for the whole morning! Wake up! Terra: *mumbles something* Ven: Terra! Ienzo came to visit! We need to make breakfast! Terra: *finally wakes up* Um… what? Ienzo: Hi. Terra: *quickly stands up* Ienzo? What are you doing here? Ienzo: I asked my uncle if I can go play with Ven and he said yes. Terra: Well, that sure is nice. Wanna breakfast you two? Ven and Ienzo: Yeah. Terra stood up and went into kitchen along with the kids. He began putting things on the table while Ven was talking about their snowballing game. Ven:*excited* … and then I threw snowball right into Ienzo’s face! *laughs along with Ienzo* Terra: *making pancakes* Sounds nice. *turning pancake in the air* Ienzo: Aren’t you gonna put your coat off? It’s pretty warm here… Ven: I’m… Terra quietly went to table, when Ven was about to remove his coat. He carefully looked into Ienzo’s staring eyes that were looking straight in Ven’s back. Terra: *whispers* Does he know? Ven: *sadly nods* Terra sighed when he took coat from him. His wings were still bright white and soft. But when Ven looked down his wings folded. Ienzo and Terra both look at them with an interest. Terra could clearly remembered Ven’s words. But I don’t know how to fly. I don’t even know how to move my wings. But now, Ven was able to move them. Well one step forward for healing. Ienzo was still staring at them. Ienzo: Do you know how to fly? Ven: Not yet, but I’ll need to learn if want to go home. Ienzo: Where do you live by the way? Ven:*smiles* In Heaven. My friends and Guardian are still waiting for me. I don’t want to make them worry. Terra:*interrupts* Ienzo… it’s very important to not tell Even about this? If you do, he’ll definitely take Ven and do terrible things to him. You have to keep that as a secret or your uncle will hurt Ven. Ienzo: No way I’m telling him about that! He doesn’t care about me and in the end he’ll take my only friend! After that was just silence. Terra put pancakes on the table and sat on chair. They all began eating, while Terra and Ven told the whole story to Ienzo. Axel: Ok, just one more. *pulls the last metal shard from Aqua’s wing* Aqua: Thank you so much Axel. I really don’t know, what I should do if I wouldn’t meet you. Axel: *smiles* Glide to help. *takes bandages from first aid case* Axel used almost two hours to take all the shards. Now he began to put bandages around her wounds. Aqua: Where are those two kids? Axel: You mean Xion and Roxas? They are still in their room, probably playing video games. This reminds me, I need to make dinner. Aqua: I’ll help you. Axel: You sure about that? What about your wing and arm? Aqua: It’s ok I can help. What are you going to cook by the way? Axel: Some noodles with a sauce. Do you know how to cook that? Aqua: How do you think that I became a Guardian? I need to cook for myself and four wards three times a day! Axel: Wow! You have four wards? I only have two and they already need to be watched over every minute. To think about four? Phew… Aqua:*smiles* Yeah, but I had the feeling like I have only two of them. Sora and Riku always had their sword fights while Kairi and Ven quietly drew or read. Axel: Yeah, Xion and Roxas are kinda like that too. They can be quiet or very noisy. Depends on what happens. *smiles* Like now… they’ll be very nice cuz they’re hungry. *remembers on something* And… oh yeah. I promised that we’ll decorate Christmas tree tonight. Man, I still need to get it from the woods. Aqua: Don’t worry, I can make a dinner and you can get the Christmas tree. Axel: That sure is a brilliant idea!*puts his coat on* Aqua: But what if those to come to look? Axel: Just say that you’re my girlfriend who came here for Christmas. *goes out while Aqua blushes* And don’t worry, they’ll believe any nonsense you’ll say. Aqua began making dinner. While cooking the noodles she looked on the pictures on the wall. Most were of Roxas and Xion, during their childhood. While looking on Roxas she felt sad, cuz he reminded her on Ven. Xion also looked a bit like Kairi duo to the same hairstyle, but not same color. She could also hear children’s footsteps when they both entered the kitchen. But they seem surprised when they saw Aqua in cape and not Axel. Roxas: Who are you, miss? Xion: And where’s Axel? Aqua: He went to pick Christmas tree. And I’m Aqua… *embarrassingly* Axel’s girlfriend. Kids smiled when she said the last sentence. But they didn’t mind that and sat at the table, waiting Aqua to make dinner. When she has just cooked it, Axel came pulling huge Christmas tree. Kids went helping him while Aqua put food on the table. While eating Roxas was telling about video game that he play with Xion. Axel was listening whole Roxas’s speech while Xion tried to talk with Aqua. Little girl really like Aqua, dou to her calm voice. When they finally finished the dinner, they decided to decorate Christmas tree. Aqua agreed to clean kitchen during that. But Xion decided to help her, so only Roxas and Axel went to decorate it. Xion: Are you really Axel’s girlfriend? Aqua:*smiles* Yes and no. Xion: What do you mean, I don’t understand? Aqua: You’ll found out when you’ll be older. Xion: Oh… Remains of the cleaning were quiet. Xion didn’t want to be annoying so she just helped her clean and after that she dragged Aqua into living room where the Christmas tree was. It really looked beautiful with so many ornaments on it. Most of them were handmade, what reminds her on Ven on Kairi who always made homemade ornaments. Sora and Riku only helped a bit. Her memories were broken by Roxas who tried to stick Christmas star on the top of the tree. He was a way to small for that. Roxas:*jumps* I can’t reach it! *sadly* I’ll never made it… I’m too small. Aqua: Let me help you. She took him in her lap and lifted him right to the top. Boy smiled and put Christmas star on the top. When Aqua put him on ground he happily hugged her. Roxas: Thank you so much! I couldn’t do it without you! Aqua: It’s alright. While having Roxas in hug she had a feeling like Ven is there. His small warm body and those ruffled blond hair. Soon Xion joined too and after some time even Axel did. They all look like a one big happy family.

I keep listening that awsome song... and I finally found a music video with disney!!!!

You don't need to change it!!! I like the way you're using now and it's very readable. Keep up that style cuz I'm freaking loving it!!!

Hey there!!! Nice to meet you, your Majesty! Just kiddin! Welcome to the best kingdom hearts site ever! Hope you'll have fun here . I'm hawk, but you can call me Hawkie. I'm a writer with wings, so if you have too much time, check my kh stories at writing. Soon I'll post chapters for my christmas related story!!! Well, nice to meet you princess and don't worry, I don't bite, so you can chat with me any time you want.

Story of Ven - The Fallen Angel is always in my head. So much that I'm making little sketches of Ven in my notebooks during the class hours!!! The first one was drawn during Biotechnology hour, when teacher was talking about stuff that I have already known from primary school. I kinda like this one... how's Venny peeping from that picture. The next one was drawn during German hour ( where I completly suck ). Here I managed to draw wings too, hope you like it. PS: Sorry if you thought that I posted the new chapter, but I will soon. The next two chapters will have christmas's theme!

Poor Kuma... hope he'll survive... Your chapters are getting more and more interesting!!! Keep writing! Can't wait to see what happends next!

"Kingdom Hearts hear my call and streak those two idiots down!" (Xoline and Vanitas) Just kiddin! Story totally rocks! Keep writing!

I know there's still one week... but I might not be able to do this on a day before christmas. So I wish everyone Merry Christmas, Happy New Year and a lot of great moments with Kingdom Hearts and Disney. I especially wanna say Merry Christmas to DChiuch and all stuff members, who created this site and connected all our hearts, just like Sora did in entire Kingdom Hearts series. I also wish Merry Christmas to my best friends: replika 13, sorakingdomhearts, Lu Xun, Nisie, PikminVentus, king of hearts and everyone else who are giving me motivation for writing. I promise I'll update my stories as fast as I can to show how much that means for me, if somone likes something that somone put a lot time and energy to do it. Thank you so much all of you. I also wish merry christmas to Destati_Dream_XIII , member who is unable to be here anymore. But she will always be in my heart, cuz she inspired me to draw again and also gave me motivation for writing. And for the end I have very beautiful disney's christmas song. Hope you'll enjoy! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jZy7JNFJ82U Merry Christmas and Happy New year everyone!!!

Good luck!!! Didn't know that you're a break dancer... but that's freaking awsome!!!

Yeah!!! Just one more week and.... Christmas is here!!! Yay! I'm gonna decorate christmas tree today! It will be so awsome!!! We have a big plactic one, cuz when we had a real one, spruce needles were all over the living room. Anyway which one do you prefer? Real or plastic one? I also care a lot about nature and I kinda don't know which one is the best. Plactic trees are made of oil, gas and some other things that hurt nature, but it can last for over ten years. Real ones are taken from the nature and can only last for one year.

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaa... this is so freaking awsome!!!! Phoenix!!!!

Weather is going crazy over here!!! I can clearly hear the wind's scream!!!

Awsome!!!! Write more! Man, this story is so freaking epic!

I been just wondering... what was your biggest pain and biggest fear? Mine bigest fear was when one older boy, from the school, threw a firecracker right in front of me! It exploded so laud that I still have a fear of loud noises. And biggest pain... when I had a small injury and I needed to go on operation. It was really painful and I remeber that a cried from the pain that lasted for an hour. So what was your greatest fear and pain?

All right!!!! Keep doing your awsome work!!!

Chapter Six: Abby Memory of the past seemed like a long lost dream. Even thought it already happened once, it seemed like something entirely new. Girl with two long pony tails, black haired boy and smaller brown haired boy were running through the rainforest along with three hawks who were flying above their heads. They were chased by at least fifteen men, led by a woman named Lam. She laughed, while shooting at them with gun. Suddenly one of the hawks was shot in the leg. Smaller boy screamed from the pain, when his hawk fell on the floor unconscious. Black haired boy quickly placed him on the back, while his hawk changed into wolf and picked wounded hawk. “Get Dimi out of here! I’ll buy you some time” girl said. “Are you sure about that?” boy asked. “Definitely!” girl shouted while running towards the men. That was the last time, when she saw black haired boy, carrying his younger brother. After that she managed to beat up all the men. But that woman, Lam disappeared without the trace. Girl had no idea that Lam followed black haired boy in secret. Without a warning she attacked both of the boys and totally beat them off. But in the end she only took younger one along with his hawk. Lam’s evil laugh was the last thing that black haired boy saw, before passing out. Roxy loudly woke up from her memory dream. She was in abandoned mansion, not in forest like she remembered. Spark was also there, sleeping with bandaged wing. Girl’s arm was bandaged too. “Glad to see, that you’re ok.” boy’s voice said. “Leo? What are you doing here? I thought you were looking for Dimi.” “A simple thank you would be enough, you know. Taking a bullet from Spark wasn’t exactly easy.” “Oh, sorry… I mean thank you for helping me. What were you doing here anyway?” “I was about to leave this city, when I heard a gunshot. I followed it and found you, bleeding like torrent. And while bringing you here… I saw your memory dream….” Girl was quiet. She knew that was Leo’s saddest memory. But she wanted to change subject. “Where’s Cloud?” she asked. “Outside, checking the area. He said that he senses men in gray. Are they the ones who shot you? And why?” “I was here on mission… to protect new Rookie. But… I failed… they captured him.” she said sadly. “I know how you feel… but you must know… accidents do happen.” he said while sighing. Spark suddenly woke up. She happily went to girl who gave her a big hug. Soon after, black wolf came whispering something on Leo’s ear. “By the way… did you check your cell phone by any chance?” he asked. Roxy quickly looked in her little bag where she always kept her cell phone. Cell phone wasn’t there. When she was about to panic, Leo took it from his pocket with a smile. “Hey! Give it back!” she said kinda angrily. “It rang for like five times. I answered once and guess who called… Os.” “Jeez! He’s gonna kill me!” she said and quickly typed phone number. Person on the other side sure picked quick. “What the hell happened to you? I called you for like five times and the only time it was picked up was by a guy who left four months ago!!! Plus he didn’t want to tell anything! What were you thinking!!!!” boy’s voice shouted from the phone. “Os… I… didn’t know you called… and… sorry… it’s kinda hard to explain.” Boy’s voice sighed. “Sorry… I was just worried. Since that last call yesterday... and then when Nai sensed men in gray… I didn’t want you to get hurt.” “I know how you feel… but the things didn’t turn out as we thought… “ “Please just talk… I’ll listen.” “Men in grey knew who the next Rookie is. I tried to hide him until that portal appears. But Lam appeared on the train. I fought with her while Spark led him to the hiding place. But I didn’t realize Lam called backup. So, they captured him and shot Spark.” “Holy Jesus!!! Are you ok?” “I’m alright now, really. Soon after Leo appeared and treaded my and her wounds.” “Can you give him on the phone?” She passed it to Leo. “Eh Leo? I’m really sorry for…” “… yelling on me because of your worried mind? No problem.” “Do you really mean it?” “Yes, you worry head. Is there anything else?” “Well… what are you planning for now?” “I found out about new abby. Dimi might be there.” “And how is Roxy planning to save Rookie?” Roxy already had a plan. “Just before we left I gave him Searcher. It was hidden in that necklace around his neck. Maybe I can found a signal… but I don’t have Quick Think Do set.” “Don’t worry, I brought some reserves.” Leo said while showing on little bag, next to the door. “I broke into three different abbies. You can easily go in if you know how to meddle with cameras.” “Then I’ll go… oh, what about you Leo?” “I already found the signal of Rookie. But I was there about three weeks ago… Dimi wasn’t there. I’ll go to the new abby.” “Ok, be very careful… both of you! And especially you Roxy! This is your second time mission!!!!” “Cut the worries! I’ll be ok!” “Well, I’ll go now. Cloud is very nervous you know!” “Right! Bye Leo!” In that moment Leo merged with Cloud. Black wolf was now bigger, darker and had Leo’s eyes. “Farewell Roxy, good luck. You’ll need it.” “You too Leo. Hope you’ll found your brother.” “I will.” wolf said and ran from the house. Roxy said good bye and took Quick Think Do set. “Are you up for this Spark?” “You bet I’m!” After being injected by weird liquid, Alex lost consciousness. Now he was slowly waking up. “Where the heck am I?” he asked himself. He was lying on metal bed covered by sheets. Someone took his clothes off and replaced them by bright white shirt and pants. He also noticed steel rings on his both wrists and ankles. While looking around the room he almost completely freaked out when he saw another person on another bed. “So, finally decided to wake up… that’s nice.” boy’s voice said. Alex took a deeper look on the boy, sitting there. He seemed around thirteen years old with messy brown hair and brown eyes. Boy also wore the same clothes and steel rings. “Who are you?” Alex asked. “I’m Dimi. You?” boy answered. “I’m Alex and… wait… you’re Leo’s brother!” “You met Leo?” “Sort of… he was a wolf when I saw him…” “Then he’s still looking for me…” Dimi said sadly. “What are we doing here anyway?” “We were both captured to be test subjects. Men in gray are doing terrible experiments just to get some certain answers. I’ve been captured for about four months and… as you can see… they didn’t actually tread with me nice…” Alex could now see what Dimi meant. Dimi’s face was full of bruisers as well as his both arms had several deep cuts and wounds from injects. But the worst part of his body, were his eyes. They seem so empty with only a bit brown color that proved he’s still alive. “What did they do to you?” Alex said shocked. “Experiments… if I struggle, they punish me.” “What kind of people are they anyway?” “I don’t know for sure…” Dimi said while sighing “I miss Whirl.” “Who’s that?” “My Spirit Mate… don’t you have it too?” “You mean hawk or wolf or something? No…” “Then you’re still Rookie… that’s not good…” “Why?” “Cuz you still didn’t receive your powers. Without them you’re weak... they will overpower you in second. Also without your spirit mate… you’ll...” “Could you at least tell about that spirit thing? Is that bird or something?” Boy took a deep breath. “When you die your soul leaves your body. But ‘cept disappearing, it goes to the Realm of Spirits. There it waits until it’s reunited with its person, receives powers and gets a name by it. Mine was Whirl and I could use… ahhh… chu!” Dimi sneezed so much that he totally trashed the whole room. Wind from his sneeze was incredibly strong! “Jeez! Guess your powers are oversized sneezes.” Boy started laughing as well as Alex did. “You could say that but… I’m not that strong to run away. They took Whirl much away from me and I’m weak without him.” Suddenly door opened. The man, who injected Alex, was there along with three men dressed in lab coats. Dimi started shaking when that man look at him laughably. But his eyes were soon pointed into Alex. “Bring him into lab number six.” he said to the men, while pressing on button. Alex’s rings suddenly stuck together like magnet. He was unable to move while two man carried him towards the lab. PS: Word abby, which is the place where men in grey keep captured ones, is taken from the word Abaddon that means destruction in Greek.

*trembles* creepy, but I love it!

Is this.... the end?

Wow!!!! So cool!!!! Keep writing!!! And your grammar is better by each chapter you write!!!

You bet!!!

Keep going!!! This is getting better by each chapter!!

Nice one!!!