Cellar Door

LOLOL well that was close eheh x:

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are you ok ???

i want to be qt like koko ): @sorawillprevail youre attractive jsyk i like yo hair

Yes, exactly. So that you correct them, and the poem get's better. Then good things can be pointed out because there will be more good things there. That is critique. It is to help you improve so that people can compliment it.

Read the rules of this forum. If you post a thread here, it is open for critique. It is not us attacking you. We are trying to help. If you don't care about improving your writing skills and want to always post with poems/stories/etc. that are full of mistakes that make people not take your writing seriously, go ahead. Because honestly, with the point your writing level is at right now, it is hard to take your writing very seriously. We are trying to help, and you are getting defensive for no reason.

Either you're lying to me or you need to learn how to properly reread your writing and check for mistakes. I would make a thorough correction but it's late and I don't want to. If you actually care enough for this to be corrected I will though. One common mistake is you add 'h' to your 'were's. You have random long sentences in between shorter ones; this prohibits flow of the poem and makes it choppy. You add puncuation to the end of some of your sentences and not others. You frequently misspell things. Near the very beginning you have a random ">". If you want to improve your writing I suggest taking more time when correcting your writing, or getting someone to beta your writing to help you find mistakes. edit: also, again, it is in fact 'think before you act', not 'think before you do'.

I think you should go back and check your grammar and spelling mishaps, but other than that it's not too bad. The flow is kinda wonky at some parts, and i think the ending line should be think before you act. just remember to reread everything you write.

i don't hate twilight. i don't like it either. it must be pretty interesting though if it can invoke such strong emotion in people.

ooooh missus koko ooooh

hi

lol ur funny erry1 noez it comez frum a stork u so dumb stop spredin ur laiz

why do people say i love you no homo? its not like i say to my sister 'i love you, no incest xxxx'

locking this before it escalates

and cella sat there in agony as the point flew by the members with lightspeed

that doesn't make it ok...?im not attacking her, im trying to explain

im not trying to make you feel dumb, im trying to get you to understand that stereotyping a gender is not ok.

it's a poemthat lists things really it's just another thing that tries to list out what the perfect girl likes while ignoring the fact that girls aren't another species but in fact human beings and we do not all like the same things. =/

DO IT

~*~ GIRLS LIKE ~*~ different things just like other normal human beings so stop trying to list out what they like

oh wait ur still at school HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

hey we should tinychat cuz i dont hav msn on dis comp ):

LOL<3

or it means i didn't like your post

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