Web
Analytics Made Easy - StatCounter
Jump to content
  • Sign Up
Sign in to follow this  
Heartless666

Poems (I write them)

Recommended Posts

Yea so I'm a poem type of guy. It depends on my mood mostly. So here is a short sample poem I'd like to call Darkness. Sorry if it's a bit saddening

 

 

Trying to hold this pain in

Nothing more than a little whime I seem to be

Forveer falling into the sleep of eternity

The passage of the dark is long

So I seem to walk on

On and on I walk through this blinding darkness

The darkness like a fog around my eyes

Will I find the light I need so much?

Or will I become so out of touch?

My heart devoured and my mind feeling soured

I seem to have lost all my powers

My strength is fading away

And now I just have this feeling of dismay

When oh when can I turn away?

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

There was one or two spelling errors, and I didn't quite comprehend this line : 'On and on I walk through this blind.' I don't understand what you mean by walking through a blind?

 

It wasn't too shabby, though.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

Loading...
Sign in to follow this  

×
×
  • Create New...