Hello, i am creating my own version of kh3d.

here goes

 

Chapter 1

Mickey, donald goofy set a course to Destiny Islands.

"so sora, u made your mind up?"asked mickey

"i am sure." said sora

"lets go to where Yen Sid is. U 2 Riku." said Mickey

They flew to the mysterious tower and yen sid told them the situation.

" Sora, Riku, u have done well to repel darkness twice" said yen sid

"it's nothing" said sora while folding his hand backwards

"but, the real xehanort have came back." said yen sid

"HUH" everyone said except mickey and yen sid

"Why?" riku said

"Xehanort heart and body have been restored so his whole will be complete" said yen sid

"we gotta stop him now."said sora

"it will take some time for him to be back. but first, i shall hold the mark of mastery"said yen sid

"what is this mark of mastery?"said sora

"it's a tradition for keyblade bearers like u to become true masters"said yen sid

"even without taking the test, i will still pass"said sora

riku turn his head down and said"i once chose to walk the path of darkness making me think i am not suitable to wield the keyblade. this test is good enough"

"if u 2 get out of the dream, i shall call u masters"said yen sid

"huh?"everyone said

riku and sora passed out

 

long intro right. got inspiration from trailer. hope u like it

My only complaint is that you used too many abbreviations and not enough caps. Other than that it seem like a plausible traslation.

Pretty plausible. Keep it coming to keep me satisfied with a sane mind while the game comes out lol.

Maybe fix a few words here and there....like "you".

cut me some slack

p.s. what does plausible means?

cut me some slack

p.s. what does plausible means?

 

Can you believe I copy pasted that exact question on google, first link I see, some other guy asking the same thing and like 7 different answers. Google that s***. lol

 

Edit: But I'm already here so, it means something probable.

chapter 2

sora woke up in traverse town restaurant 2nd flour

"where am i? huh, my clothes changed.where is riku and the others?"said sora

"riku, where are you?"sora shouted

"man, your so noisy."said a floating guy(which he is neku)

"huh?aaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh"screamed sora because he fell off the balconey

thump

"you alright there sora?"said neku

"thanks. how do u know my name?"said sora

"huh?your not a player in this game then?"said neku

"a player"said sora

"like usual, this is a game.players have this timer on their hands. i cant afford to lose this game."said neku

there is some numbers on neku hands

"i dont get this game but can i help u"said sora

"only if u dont get in the way"said neku

"by the way, what is your name?"said sora

suddently, monsters came out of nowhere

"Dream Eaters!"said neku

"what a weird name"said sora

"not me, them. they are our targets"said neku

"Ok... (darn, they look so cute. i should get one for kairi)"said sora

and they engaged into combat

elsewhere...

riku woke up by the sound of water

"where am i?"said riku

"u are in twilight town"said a mysterious voice that riku reconise

OH SOOO COOL!

chapter 3

riku look at the person who just answered his question

it was at first Diz, but then he changed to Malificent

"embrace the darkness now"said maleficent

then, riku felt a headache

then maleficent turn to a guy riku didn't reconise

"embrace the darkness. TERRA"said the mystery man(spoilers:xehanort)

"terra?"said riku

then riku blacked out

.............................

riku woke up at a bell tower

"your awake, huh"said a hunchback man

"hi"said riku

"rare to see a guy lying on the streets huh. i took pity on you and brought you here"said the hunchback man

riku was about to ask lots of questions like where he is or where are his friends but he needs to be polite

"my name is riku. what's yours?"said riku

"my name is quasimotor(sorry if i spelled the name wrong)."said the hunchback man

"where am i?"asked riku

"don't you know, we are in (i am making a false name since i dont know the place) Kelstin town"said quasimotor

sora point of view

"can i have your name"asked sora

"Neku, Neku Sakuraba"said Neku

"Neku Sakuraba, what an interesting name" said sora

"It's nothing interesting"said Neku

just then, a pig/dog and panda looking dream eater appeared

"Dream Eaters again."said sora

"these are not your targets, they are your partners"said neku

"how do you know" said sora

"their symbols are slightly different then the ones we fought"said neku

"oh yeah..."said sora

 

finished chapter 3. took me a long time

hope you enjoy it

awesome

I'm so confused.

this is good

lol 3D ripoff lol.

I just saw the trailers for this game and this looks like it could happen. Good job. :0

chapter 4

riku P.O.V.

quasimotor stared at the parade below

"quasimotor."said riku

quasimotor just stared blankly

"quasimotor"said riku

no responds

"QUASIMOTOR"riku shouted

quasimotor leap of surprise

"sorry about that riku.it just that i have to work here forever or else i get punished"said quasimotor

riku felt sorry for the man

then, dream eaters appeared on the parade and attaking people

"quasimotor, stay here"said riku

riku went down the bell tower and fought the dream eaters

after he defeated them, the town flocks thank him for saying the parade

then, quasimotor was crying

 

sorry for long wait and short chapter, i didn't have an idea for the story

Yknow, i'm actually liking this. keep working on the form of it and things should turn out just fine

i guess is ok

yea i like it.

I'm sorry, but I laughed so much at "QUASIMOTOR".

If you're going to write, please try to have accurate spelling and grammar.

Also fluff things up.

Each' chapter' is like barely a paragraph.

I LOVED IT! i find it awesome and non normal(thats a good thing-KEEP IT Up!

I'm sorry, but I laughed so much at "QUASIMOTOR".

 

i will hunt u down

CHAPTER ONE

"Sora, are you sure you want to take your mark of master test?"asked mickey

"Of course. I've been fighting for too long not to." said sora

"Lets head over to Mystic Tower, then" said Mickey

When they arrived, they talked to Yen Sid.

"Sora, Riku, you have done excellent jobs at repelling the darkness." said yen sid

"Heheh, it was nothin'." said Sora, putting his hands behind his head and interlacing his fingers.

"Xehanort's on the move again. This time, the real one." said Yen Sid

"Umm, who's Xehanort?" said Sora

"Xehanort is a person who has done unforgivable wrongings in the past."

"Why is he back?" Riku said

"His Heartless and Nobody have come together." said yen sid

"Looks like we've got more work to do."said Sora

"It'll be a while before they completely merge. You will have to take the Mark of Mastery test first."said Yen Sid

"I got this in the bag."said Sora, grinning from ear to ear.

Riku looked at his shoes. "But....I....succumbed to darkness. I shouldn't take the test."

"Do not worry. It was not you who succumbed, or, at least, made you succumb. It was Xehanort."said Yen Sid

"You two will now fall into a deep sleep, where you will dream of many things. Awaken, and I will name you Masters." Yen Sid said. Sora smiled at the thought of his name, Master Sora.

Then, Riku and Sora fell back, and went through the ground.

CHAPTER ONE FINISH

 

Like my translation? I can keep going.

Way Better.

Thanks

Damn, the ultimate 2 your making this thread go long.

I'll translate the rest tomorrow.

Thanks

Damn, the ultimate 2 your making this thread go long.

I'll translate the rest tomorrow.

 

sorry and ask my permission first

Ask your permission? You basically just took a game and put it in your own words. I'm just making it easier to read for everyone. It's not like I changed everything. But, I guess, it still is yours, so okay.