Hey guys. This is just a draft of a possible idea for a story I just thought of. I'm also writing this from my iPhone so sorry for any mistake. Please reply with what you think so that I may consider writing more about this. Thanks!

I might edit and make it better once I get my new laptop

 

The Tragic Kingdom - (Small) Prologue

 

In a Kingdom named Fyluna, peace was kept for more than 50 years. There had only been one war, which happened when it was first built. Two friends named Jiin Hilton and Kevin Klaytob were the ones who decided to create that kingdom.

 

However, once it was finished, one of them had to become the King. But things like this never end peacefully. Both of them desired the throne, and civil war seemed inevitable. The war lasted for many years, and only finished when Kevin died of a serious illness.

 

Jiin was already an old man by that time. He had a son and a daughter, but even so, he felt like no one cared about him. He regretted everything now-- the war, his best friend's death-- even though he clearly knew nothing could change the past.

 

Some years later, he died from the same illness that had taken his best friend away from this world. A nation, named Retart, ruled by Reynald II, ended up discovering about the King's death, and saw this as an opportunity of conquering another territory. The kingdom was going through chaotic times since they lost their King. A spy managed to tell Jorge, Jiin's son, about the plan of attacking the Kingdom.

 

But it might had been too late. They prepared a plan to at least defend themselves from the enemy's massive attack. But in the end, they lost the war, and were forced to leave their home. Rafaella, Jorge's sister, together with him, promised to get their kingdom back, and kill every single person from that terrible nation, which took advantage from them during the worst moment of their lives.

You asked, and here it is! Again, I'm still on my iPhone, so sorry for any small mistake! Enjoy

 

Chapter 2.1 - The Consequences

 

Two years after the war's end, Jiin's soon, Jorge, was already an eighteen-years-old man, even though he looked a lot older than that. The cause might have been the fact that he grew up in the middle of an endless war, but the consequences were pretty noticeable.

 

His once beautiful, colorful, blue eyes had become sad, cold and frightened. Unlike his father, he did not feel any pain at all for those who had died during the war--or rather--he thought they were just fulfilling their duty as citizens of that Kingdom. Mercy was something he could never understand. To him, if your enemy lets you live after winning against you, they would only be mocking you.

 

In order to protect himself and his father's authority and power, he learned how to use a sword at a very young age. Before the war ended, he started learning how to wield it properly with one of the best fighters of that time. And he learnt a lot--at the point of which he started patrolling the Kingdom and facing personally whoever tried to destroy the "peace" created after the war's end.

 

In a rainy night, Jiin summoned Jorge so they could have a serious conversation from father to son.

 

"I've seen how you act, my son... Don't be such a heartless. We have feelings, we all cry--there's no exception." said Jiin, calmly trying to understand his son's mind.

"Your highness, I have feelings of course, but I learned that unless I pretend they do not exist, I'll be crushed by this world's cruelty." replied Jorge, showing that he could never forgive nor forget all that had happened in the past.

"But life's like that, my precious son. We can't flee from our problems like that--we've gotta face them head-on." said Jiin with a sad yet calm tone.

 

Before Jiin could hear any reply from his son, a soldier entered the room, apologizing for troubling them at that late hour of the night, but unfortunately, he had come to report that bandits had attacked the castle. Swiftly, Jorge left his father's chamber and reunited with Kyre, the Commander of the Royal Knights.

 

Kyre was a twenty-years-old man, secretly raised by Jiin as his own son. Years ago, the boy had earned his admiration. The boy had been through so many bad things--he lost his entire family during an accident--but even so, he never gave up hope. Feeling pity of that young boy, who had lost everything, he decided to give him a decent life.

 

Unfortunately, Kyre and Jorge didn't like each other. Kyre had also fallen in love with Jiin's daughter, Rafaella, a lovely seventeen-years-old girl, with sparking blue eyes, black hair and the most beautiful smile on this Earth--or so that was how she was seen by Kyre.

 

A hundred soldiers were gathered in the War Room, about to fight back the bandits and save the King and his Castle from any and every threat they could possess.

nice chapter man! i WANT MMMMMMMMOOOOOOORRRRRRREEEEEEEEE also i love when the title of the chapter is used in the chapter! awesome

Another great chapter! Nice work! Can't wait for the next one!

I think i'm thrown off on the timeline due to reading your other stories.

 

"they will be only making fun of you" might sound better grammatically if you said "they would only be mocking you" Unless you count grammar as an iphone mistake.

 

I think i'm thrown off on the timeline due to reading your other stories.

 

"they will be only making fun of you" might sound better grammatically if you said "they would only be mocking you" Unless you count grammar as an iphone mistake.

 

 

I think 'mocking at you' would suit better

 

And wonderful as ever Lu Xun! Well, yeah, had a few eeny-weeny mistakes here and there, but definitely good Sorry for latepost again Dx

Thanks for the tips, guys. I edited a few things here and there. Chapter 2.2 might come today. I was thinking about maybe doing a timeline soon so you don't get lost!

I think 'mocking at you' would suit better

 

And wonderful as ever Lu Xun! Well, yeah, had a few eeny-weeny mistakes here and there, but definitely good Sorry for latepost again Dx

I've never heard that before, but then again I can't read.

Good job! I enjoyed the chapter like always.