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I don't do this often because I'm terrible at creative writing but I had this idea for a story or, more likely, a comic. It's not really fleshed out yet, so I'll just put down more of a description than an actual story

It has a lot of cliche`s, a reluctant hero, and gem collecting being the most prominent. 

The idea is taken from partly from Kingdom Keepers and Castle of Illusion. The whole thing takes place over the course of a single night in The Florida Magic Kingdom park.
 

The main character, a man in his early 20s' (I'm thinking between 21-23) is visiting the park with his aunt and uncle and their two kids. Like many Disney kids he still enjoys it but, being an adult, no longer sincerely believes in Disney Magic. This is a problem, because the park is in danger and can only be saved by someone who truly believes, with all their heart, that it's real. He falls a sleep on a park bench and wakes up after hours, Merlin (who he obviously thinks is just an actor working overtime) appears and strikes up a conversation. He finally gets the guy to come to the Cinderella castle where he and the Fairy Godmother explain that  the villains are attempting to awaken Chernabog and that the only way to stop them is for a true believer to gather the seven gems scattered around the park. When this is done, the gems will resonate with his heart and allow him to fully draw the Sword in the Stone from it. By this point he thinks this is all a dream and when he fails to wake himself up, decides to go along with it, but still doesn't believe.

 

After gathering said gems and encountering many memorable characters, both good and evil, the characters are distraught that the gems still show no reaction. It is at that point that Chernabog bursts from the top of the Cinderella Castle,  mirroring his introduction in the Night on Bald Mountain segment of Fantasia. Out of time they send the main character to attempt to draw the sword, while his allies try to stall the demon.

When he arrives the Sword doesn't budge an inch and the characters are getting the snot beat out of them. seeing all of his childhood icons being hurt awakens a part of him that has been long buried and he cries. Just a single tear, but that's all it takes. He now truly believes that all of this is real and the gems react. They fuse together and the new, single, gem embeds itself into the cross guard of the sword. He draws it and, as fast as he can returns to the Castle. He arrives just as the sun begins to rise. Remembering Fantasia, he raises the sword above his head just as the sun breaches the horizon. the suns light is drawn to the gem and infuses the bladed, and the man, with it's power. He leaps to the top of the tower ('cause, magic) and impales Chernabog with the sword, Much like Philips' sword did to Maleficent in Sleeping Beauty. Chernabog, being a creature made of pure evil and all, can't be destroyed, but he is imprisoned in the form of a small statuette. The battle was not without cost however. An entire section of the park was destroyed, but the day was won. As opening approaches the characters must return the their stations and the hero returns the Sword to the Stone. As it still has some of the suns energy it creates a seal to prevent to villains from ever leaving their attractions again, even after hours, so the park will remain safe. As for Chernabog, he is put into the Vault (yes, that vault) never to be released again. The young man returns home, with no proof of his adventures, but no doubt that Disney Magic does, and will continue to exist, so long as there are those who believe.





I have the cast list figured out (All names of official Disney characters are canon)

Heroes:
as of yet unnamed OC

Peter Pan

Taran

Captain Phoebus

Hercules
Tarzan
Milo Thatch

Jim Hawkins 

Villains:

Chernabog
Maleficent
Jafar

Ursula
Queen Grimhilde ("The Queen")
Hades
Captain Hook
Pete

 

Princesses:
Snow White
Cinderella
Aurora
Ariel
Belle
Jasmine
Tiana
Minnie Mouse (Honorary)

Princess:

Prince Florian ("The Prince")
Prince Henry ("Prince Charming")
Prince Philip

Prince Eric
Prince Adam ("Beast")
Aladdin
Prince Naveen (of Maldonia) *He'd never let me hear the end of it if I didn't put the whole thing* 
Mickey Mouse (Honorary)

 

Support:
Merlin
Fairy Godmother
Yen Sid (undecided)

Flora (undecided)
Fauna (undecided)
Merryweather (undecided)
 

 

I'd like to add more characters like Donald and Goofy as well as villains such as Clayton and Gaston but I'm not sure what capacity they'd be in, especially the villains as each of the villains already listed, save for Chernabog, are tasked with collecting one of the gems. I also have an angle where characters can't use the gems themselves so the villains try to win my OC over to their side, rather than destroying him. And I have yet to name the character. I'm trying to go for something normal but that also sounds cool without being a typical "rich boy" (i.e Maximillian, too many syllables) name. I also don't want to use a name that's been beaten to death (for example Finn. I can name at least 3 fictional characters with that name off the top of my head)


Input, such as critiques, name suggestions for the main character, and additional Disney Characters, would all be very much appreciated.
Thank you.

Edited by Isamu_Kuno

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I red it, and ummm....          I wish it was a movie.

 

LIKE!!

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I red it, and ummm....          I wish it was a movie.

 

LIKE!!

Well, Disney is working on a movie about a small group of people who get trapped in the park after hours called Tomorrowland set for 2015, but that's all I know about it. It probably won't be anything like this.

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Time constraint for Rapunzel,Ralph,Dr.Facilier, and other popular Disney characters?

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Time constraint for Rapunzel,Ralph,Dr.Facilier, and other popular Disney characters?

Not time constraint exactly, I just can't think of a place to put them. I have a theme of "7+1' in my head, meaning since there used to be 7 areas in the MK plus the hub (Cinderella Castle) I wanted the main groups to reflect that number, the 7 gems join into one. There are 7 Princesses+Minnie 7 Princes+Mickey 7 Heroes (even though it's not an official franchise)+the OC and 7 Villains+ Chernabog. I don't think I would add any more princesses or princes. But I could add more support characters and lesser villains as underlings and have the main 8 as akin to "Boss battles" I could add any kind of character as long as I can make it clear they aren't part of the main 4 groups.

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Well theres cameos that would work.

Milo Thatch? The movie Atlantis finally getting recognition? Sold. 

Wow! Great idea! It kinda reminds me of Enchanted with all the Disney classics!

 

Gimme credit for this xD ahahaah : But I think instead of a Park, the person should somehow get lost in the park by following, maybe a white rabbit xD and fall in a hole so it would be kinda like a referance to "Alice in Wonderland" then he would discover that he gets transported in a magical world and that the villans will try to attack the real world and then he would have to get the gems by visitng some places in that magical world. I think it sound better instead of a park :)

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Wow! Great idea! It kinda reminds me of Enchanted with all the Disney classics!Gimme credit for this xD ahahaah : But I think instead of a Park, the person should somehow get lost in the park by following, maybe a white rabbit xD and fall in a hole so it would be kinda like a referance to "Alice in Wonderland" then he would discover that he gets transported in a magical world and that the villans will try to attack the real world and then he would have to get the gems by visitng some places in that magical world. I think it sound better instead of a park :)

The point of the story though, is for him to learn to believe that Magic exists even in the real world, To rediscover his inner child and realize that it's okay not to grow out of some things.

The point of the story though, is for him to learn to believe that Magic exists even in the real world, To rediscover his inner child and realize that it's okay not to grow out of some things.

Haha alright then ;P

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