Naminé15

So, what do you, people, think of my drawing skills? I don't like them, truely.

Wow! I can't even wait for the rest of the story! It's better than I ever imagined. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

The story keeps being so cool. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Sorry it took quite long for me coment. We - readers - are no longer seeing Faith as a poor confused boy but as a decided adventurous person. Thi chapter -Hiro - seems to be realy the beggining of the adventure. Is this chapter the point where you said things would really change? It' seems so. I got a good feeling about this story's future. Write more 'cause i'm waiting for it.:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

It's complicated to understand what's happening, probably if you ponctuation and grammar it would be easier to aunderstand. However the plot seems great, you know how to present it, the story wuill be fantastic. I'm putting faith on you: continue writing. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

You say you are a beginner at wrting, but I really like your writing, r-e-a-l-l-y. The plot seems fantastic. Please keep writing. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

There's no problem :D:D:D:D:D:D I was talking to sis about your story and I commented about the vision you impose to the reader about the apparently main charater - Erik - it's very nice: it gives us a mysterious impression of him, as if Erik was a mysterious fearless person; with an interesting past that connects him to Helst - sorry, it's just my crazy theories, you can ignore them if you want -

What a great description of the facts! The plot interests me as well and the way you write is kinda mysterious and/or dark: I like it so much.:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

It it all? Is that the end? I wanted moreT.T You write so well and the plots you create are always so good...

If the story won't change so soon, you could try to describe feelings to make the reader feel what Faith is feeling, that would keep us reading the parts when the the climax hasn't arrived yet. :D ---- ]I'll be waiting the "Aladdin" part - sounds cool somehow. :D:D:D: ---- It truely reminds Domo Chronicles, but I'm not saying you've copied, it's just the fact that a "non-human" prince appears training in the 1st chapter. Anyway, this can be just concidence. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

- I don't know d.gray man-.- - I agree with everybody who said that you should watch your grammar, so we could understand the plot more. Writing a text isn't like chatting, that's it requires rules of grammar - they make the text clearer-. You could also try to make longer chapters, adding dialougues, descriptions of the characters and sets, explanations and description of feelings.

I agree, about your grammar - you could use Microsoft Word to type the text-, but the plot is getting more and interesting. I got only one doubt: what's an Earl?

The story reminds me a bit Domo Chronicles: Adventures of Vinx Poisenberry -http://kh13.com/mybb/showthread.php?tid=3509 - . The title "Beleive" plus Loothor's phrase: "all you need to do is ...beleive in yourself" makes me think the entire story will be about Faith tryoing to inprove his skills to become a king. Maybe a more mysterious title would make the reader expect more. Anyway, I'll waiting for more. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Your grammar is not perfect - neither is mine -. I'm curious about the end of the story.

-Here I am, Gy! - Such an incredible story. - Does Mood remember about all this when he appears in Time Wanderer?- I can't wait for ther rest and I'm cheereing up for Mood to beat Manticore. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

The first time I read about Mood, I tought he was Doom himself. In this story, on the first time he appeared, I tought he was a liar, that Doom had surviveed and was still after Veinx. When I read the next chapters I saw that I was completly wrong. He's one of my favorite characters now. I'm enjoyng the story very much. Please write more. - fans are waiting - :D:D:D:DD:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Name: Warden Age: 16 Side: Good Biography: Warden was born in a very rich and powerful family, but she wasn't happy, all that mattered to her father was honor and his own ego, the only ones who she really loved and cared about was her mother and older brother. One day her mother was possed by a spirit, who made her kill Warden's brother and try the same with her and her father, but her mother wouldn't give in that easily, she managed to take control of herself for a short period and Warden's father locked her up in a room where she would stay sedated untill she was free or untill her death, the girl begged to her father, trying to make him call an exorcist to save her mother from that horrible destiny, but he wouldn't listen. It would be too much for him to call someone to solve familiar problems. One night, Warden was crying on her mother's bed praying that somehow she would be free when somebody touched her shoulder, she looked up and saw a tall man with a hood on, he told her he was an exorcist and that he would save her mother. The girl waited and watched the whole proccess happy for being helped, at the end that man jumped through the window, saying good bye to the girl, who never saw him again. Since that day Warden promised herself she would become an exorcist to save lifes and help other people. Appearance: Personality: she is a very happy and friendly person, easy to talk to and perceptive. She doesn't have a home anymore, always travellling through countless citys trying to help anyone who passes through her path, she isn't a very experienced exorcist, but in any ocasion she will do her best. Rawr.

I tought I had already replied on this story, but now, when I was reading it for the 2nd or 3rd time in my life I saw hadn't. So here is my coment: AMAZING!!!!

Continue! It's getting even more interesting! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Sorry, that was the only pic I had here and you don't need to be sad: my drawings are also terrible anyway.:(:(

I almost tought they wouldn't scape from this one :D:D:D:D:D

Just for you to know, I edited my post, now the story looks much better. Soon, I'll post chapter 1. Thanks for reading the new version of 32nd's arrival.

What a pitty:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:

3 days of hardworking and lots of failed projects later... If I open my mouth wider my sister will get annoying...

I still carry within me all my regret for posting Challenge on the internet. However, this story is completly different, despite having some elements from my old terrible story. Hope you nejoy, and I know I'm not good at writing and creating. Introduction(new) 2 years ago, started appearing different people, innocent and guiltless for being such a threat. The Atrox