Hello guys. I've sent this first part of the story to some members here, and they liked it a lot. So, I thought it'd be better to share it with everyone. Hope you like it

 

 

 

A Frightful Prevision

 

At a night, of May 29th of the year 2049, to be exact, something strange happened. But, before discovering what occurred, it’s better to know what had been happening in some time before that day. In the next lines, you will be able to read and put your imagination to work -- or at least give it a try -- in order to understand everything that this story has to tell.

 

-> March 11th <-

 

Today was an excellent day. Why? Because I got a promotion, and the rumors of some kind of “threat” coming to earth have been almost completely destroyed.. But, there are still some people who believe that we may be in risk of facing the last days of our lives -- of the humanity.

 

There were already many people who predicted a lot of things like that, but in the end, we are still here and alive, after all. Yet again, it’s still too early to say that this prediction is completely impossible to happen... Even I, who was instructed to calm the people, and tell them not to panic, still have doubts if this is really only a false rumor, or if it’ll really happen... But I pray that it doesn’t happen.

 

However, you might be interested in knowing what that prevision has to say.. But I think it’s still to early for me to tell it.. After all, what IS supposed to happen is only in some months, so I’ll tell about it in the near future. At least I managed to accomplish my duty; the people seems to be more calm now. We just need to carry on with our normal lives, that’s it. No need to worry.

 

 

-> March 30th <-

 

It has already passed some days since I last wrote in this diary. I can’t believe I am really enjoying this -- although it was an idea of my own daughter. But, returning to the main subject, there are more and more people supporting that prediction.. My duty has become very hard, even though people do respect me. When I’m not around, many of them begin to talk about it. I have been busy during this time I was off.. Me and the other politics -- we need to make sure that the people are not attracted by that idea -- but what if, we ourselves are?

 

I am not saying I believe in it, but I can’t tell the contrary as well.. Something just tells me this is not really wrong at all. But, who knows? It might be only my imagination. Maybe I’m just getting old. With almost fifty years, it’s hard to face what I face everyday. Well, let’s stop talking about my personal life... My main goal with this is to find out more about the rumors...

 

So, as I’ve said before, many people continue to fight for these ideas... And look, we haven’t fought since 1927... And, with our own people.. Where will this world end? Can’t people have different opinions without respecting the others? Maybe this is really the end of this race -- which was once a pure and good race, in which people treated the others well, and not only worried about their interests, the money -- its name? Humanity.

 

But, if we think properly, this wouldn’t be a bad end at all.. You might be calling me a crazy or something like that, but see: We’ve killed thousands of animals, and don’t come with the argument: “we need to eat”, because in those thousands, many were only killed because men have their own interests.. They want to make new things, and don’t care with what or who they have to cross down to achieve their goals. With time, the humans have been more and more selfish.

 

I remember.. In thirty years ago, we weren’t so bad as we are today. We had water, but what have we done with it? We spent it without caring about the consequences.. And who is going to pay for that? We. It can be sooner or later, but we will end paying for what we’ve done. Nowadays, it’s very rare to find the old and good water. With the new technology, and since we don’t have the food we used to, we have to eat some strange things made by these scientists.. But I can’t badmouth them, can I? Because, if it weren’t for them, we might have met our end sooner.. In 2040, 91.56% of the entire rain forests of the world were completely destroyed, and with it, many species of animals, our natural resources... But I ask: Is this really good enough? We have to get rid of the forests to get more technology? Really?

 

My answer to this question is this : No, we shouldn’t have done that. But who am I to say this to the entire humanity? I would end up being killed by the owners of the factories and others.. But, while our great technology doesn’t build a Time Machine, we have to hang on. Do you know how we live today? Thanks to the Factories and their gases that have destroyed our Ozone Layer, we were forced to build new houses.. Ones with Oxygen. Why? Because it’s very rare to find some nowadays. The rays of the sun have turned the temperature to 58.5Cº, which makes it almost impossible to hold on that temperature for more than twenty minutes.

 

Ahhh.. If only I could go back to 2012 or 2014, when our world was so amazingly good to live.. But I can’t blame it, because it was our fault -- we were the ones who didn’t listen to what was right in front of us -- The terrible future we were creating. Those amazing campaigns for the reforestation.. Nowadays, it doesn’t exist anymore. The Humanity is too busy to think about protecting the less than 10% we still have.

 

Oh.. It’s late. 11:59p.m. I need to go sleep now. Might come back and write more in this diary in a week or so. Who knows? Maybe more and more people will continue to support that prevision. Bye for now.

 

->April 12th <-

 

I guess I haven’t had much time to write here. More than one week, eh? But don’t worry, I have a good reason for that. Nowadays, our population is around 5,000,000,000 of people. Why am I informing this, you ask? Because between this incredibly big number, 1,000,000,000 of people have just began to support the prevision! My duty has become more and more difficult with time. So, I have to spend most of the time doing it. I’m getting tired of it.

 

Besides that, do you know what’s the worst? The day of the prevision is coming. It’s in a bit more than one month. As time passes, I’m getting more and more frightened. I know nothing will happen, but still... What if this time, the prevision is right? Well, you might be curious to know what the prevision says. However, I’m afraid I don’t have a proper definition , since it’s strange, because there are subgroups. Some say that it foresees the end of the World, others say that it’s the end of our Planet, that the world is going to be rebuilt, that some other species are going to invade the Earth... That’s why it’s so hard to block its advance, since it has many currents.

 

Although the politicians don’t seem to believe in that, I’ve been told that they’re making some new vehicles, which are capable of flying without oil, and that can use its lasers to destroy anything. What they do not know is that, even I am building a new escape route, for myself and my family. But I can’t talk about it now. However, I am praying that I don’t need to eventually use it in the future.

 

Wait! What? My friends -- the other politics responsible for maintaining the peace between the people -- have just warned me that the leader of the prevision has been spotted! I’m sorry, but I need to go right now. If we kill him, we may have a chance to stop the rumors right from the source! I’ll try to report the results of the battle as soon as possible. Good-bye and see you soon!

 

How was it? Did you like? I'll write more about this story with time. Just share your thoughts below, please

Yay.

That was really nice of you Lu Xun we read your stories because they're amazing.

A read it Lu! Pretty good

It was very cool

Nice work my friend.I keep forgeitng to read your storys lol.Anyways keep it up

_{Hope you guys that have read this story still remember it}

_{So, as I had said, I'm gonna ask a question once in a while to keep this thread alive}

 

_{Today's Question: Who was your Favorite Character?}

None.

Drak!!! Such awsome name and cool personality. It will always stay in my heart.

 

I kinda imagine you as Drak. And we readers are your Religion!!!

Drak!!! Such awsome name and cool personality. It will always stay in my heart.

 

I kinda imagine you as Drak. And we readers are your Religion!!!

 

Oh yeah.

_{Today's question: If you were the writer, would you change anything in the end? Would you change the side who won?}

No one won.

I didn't vote in the poll because 2 out of 3 of the questions were for people who read the story while it was being updated. You've improved as a writer since this story so some of my dislikes might not be applicable now. I liked the story overall and will list my reasons for such:

 

“Madness of the Devil” Awesome name, I did not see the baby getting shot coming. The fact they followed communism was hard to believe, it seemed to work in the story but in history communism never works. Then again I don't know too much about all the differences, like Marxism or if you meant the "True" communism. "It was fun to tell everything about the battle." This quote just seemed out of place, he described this awful battle of people dying and such and then said it was fun to write about. I mean I guess he could be sadist but I didn't get that vibe from him.

May 12th

Drak

 

I liked seeing the war from a different perspective, but considering the other protagonist just described this battle and there was no mystical element kind of made Drak's entry redundant. I can understand if it was a forced thing because it would be strange for Drak to not write about but still it bored me.

 

I did not like the videos being included. On their own the music is fine, and I can understand wanting to create an immersive experience but seeing "Hear this:" kind of took me out of the story. That and I don't like to stop things in the middle so I felt I couldn't read anymore if one of the songs wasn't over yet, although that's kind of a personal thing but still I think a story needs to be known for it's writing and not what was included with it.

 

"We are soul sisters." I can kind of chalk this up to how the english language is confusing but it was very strange to hear that from a man talking about his wife. I mean maybe it's just because your english skills were still being developed, but it just seemed so far from soulmates that I had to mention it.

 

"Phappy, his best friend. Phappy" That name, it might be too late to change it now and it might not even be appropriate to mention why it feels wrong. Then again, my mind just might be in the gutter.

 

"Drak stood writing two letters." By this point in the story he already had someone write one of his other letters due to lack of strength, this might have fallen under his body giving one last shot before giving up but if it was I think it should of been mentioned. If it wasn't it seems to kind of ruin the continuity.

 

I'm glad Eirwd and Das got a happy ending, I also like how you used the "Arc words" trope.

 

"he decided to keep his friend commaning it – for now at least." Sequel now pls.

 

"God seems to be very angry with what you, humans, are doing." This feels like Drak suddenly doesn't consider himself a human, unless it was just a small mistake and you meant to say "we, humans"

 

"I wonder what kind of King you will become... it is truly the only regret I have for dying now... But you will never be alone... I will be always watching for you, wherever I go... and you can remember the good moments we’ve spent together... I will always be in your heart, you must never forget that.

Now, I need to take my leave. I wish you good luck on your mission -- which will not be very easy... But you will do the right thing... I am sure of it. As the new King of Europe, you and the woman you choose to marry -- you both will be very happy, I’m sure of it. " How did Drak know he would be a king? I guess this could be explained by his talks with "God" but since there's no mention of it, it just seems like he randomly guessed everything that would happen.

 

As for the questions of the day, which I'm really late for: Drak is my favorite character due to everything he overcame. For changing the story I would of wanted Tligh to see Drak dead, since their whole fight was kind of what I thought was gonna happen. I guess I could of read it wrong but it seemed to be going towards that direction.

 

 

No one won.

This, I mean the politics or whatever basically won but they have to allow for a religion now. Not to mention all the deaths. I guess I would of wanted the "God" to come and own it up and win. Because it was never really explained who or what it was.

 

Edit: And

Edited January 15, 201312 yr by Indecypher

Lu Xun, I must say that this story of yours was truly epic.  I enjoyed every aspect of it. This is one of the reasons I got inspired to write The Keyblade War, and I'm happy that you've managed to write so many more stories!  Your a great writer bro, and as for as I can see, you have a bright future as a book writer!  Thumbs up bro! Oh, and my favorite character was Drak, because of his communications with God, and because of his devotion to making sure Earth survives.  And for the ending, I would have liked for Drak to have lived.  But hey, your story was amazing either way!  I salute you!