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Queen Tery posted a status update
Alright, I'm trying to write a query letter to send to a literary agent. I'm not exactly sure about the way I wrote this premise and I want to know what you guys think.
Queen Tery replied: Dameon Black is a high school outcast who has spent the last seventeen years of his life bouncing around from town to town. On the first day of his senior year, his life is flipped upside down as he is thrust down a path leading to his destined battle with the Devil… who happens to be his father.
Queen Tery repliedlol Thanks. I just feel like it's a bit too straightforward. I kind of want to come up with something that will hook them in better. I'm very confident in the script, but I'm worried that they won't give it a shot, just because I can't condense the premise into two sentences.
TheApprenticeofKingMickey repliedThe ending is what has me hooked, but the beginning needs work to grab my attention.
Queen Tery repliedWait you mean the last sentence has you hooked, but you feel like I should rework the first sentence?
Queen Tery repliedAlright. lol I'll look over it. Thank you for taking the time to comment and help me out. I really appreciate it.
Queen Tery repliedHm, this is really frustrating. lol What do you think of "Dameon Black is a lonely high school student who can't seem to find his place in the world."
TheApprenticeofKingMickey repliedDaemon Black can't find his place in the world. You gotta love feeling like every teenager.
Queen Tery replied"Dameon Black is a conflicted high school student who just wants to find his place in the world, but doesn’t want to deal with the work that comes along with achieving that." How about that?
TheApprenticeofKingMickey repliedHow about rewording it to say, "But doesn't want to put in the effort that comes along with it."
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Queen Tery posted a status update
...And here we go. Looks like I have a date with depression tonight.
Queen Tery repliedThanks, but I'm not sure there's really anything to talk about. But again, thanks.
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PLAY AS A PANDA AND TELL ME WHAT U THINK OF IT, ONCE UR DONE
Shana09 repliedOkay.
Pandaren (aka Panda) is a race.
It's the new race that just got released today.
I want you to play it.
Go to google to see what the "Horde" or "Alliance" is.
Also u can see them in the character creation screen, blue meaning alliance, red meaning horde.
Realms are like servers, go to the ones i listed, if u want to make ur panda a horde OR an alliance c:
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CloakedSchemerX posted a status update
everyone posts on RP: Im away. i post on RP: Everyone else is away.
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Sora96 posted a status update
Google Chrome V 22 released. "Where is my wrench?" "I miss my wrench!"
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xoblivionx13 posted a status update
I have the sudden urge to kick some Noise butt.....but it's my friend's game and I don't have it anymore
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Nora Valkyrie posted a status update
What Vocaliod song doe u know how to dance to?
CloakedSchemerX repliedLike every song. How do I dance to them? Simple on all of them. I just dance like all the characters on there who die...every time. Simple, very simple.
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love ur ivy yayy jb
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kingskater4 posted a status update
still getting used to everything on here, there's so much to do.
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King Riku posted a status update
Ew, I have to go in 9 minutes. Guess this is goodnight for those of you without my 3DS code
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grandma!!
VanitasisKirby repliedGrandpa!!!!!!!!
How have you been?Ven hasn't seen his grandfather in a while
VanitasisKirby replied
You can't sleep?Don't do anything before going to sleep
Be soft and drink warm milkVanitasisKirby replied
Don't do anything that might give you energy *coughcandycough*I will never learn
And don't eat before going to sleep. It keeps you up
xXVentusfanXx repliedoh grandma i worry about you sometimes
and i dont do that since that will get you fat o3oVanitasisKirby replied You shouldn't worry. I'll learn. Eventually.Possibly. Maybe.
It makes you fat?
I didn't know thatVanitasisKirby replied I really didn't know that. Btw, love your new avy. Is it an anime or something?
VanitasisKirby replied Yays, I love learning Sometimes. Depends on the subject of what I'm learning.Ooh, what "anime" is it from?
btw, baby Ven says hi, and he wants to see his grandpa
xXVentusfanXx repliedyou seem to get distracted alot right?
its called disgaea aww i want to see him to VanitasisKirby repliedErr, yeah
I think I may even have ADHD.. Whatever 8DHm, I've never heard of it but I'll google it ^^
Comw visit Ven~ He's outside right now, bouncing on his belly
xXVentusfanXx repliedthats not bad dear
you do that lol poor kid is this what he does all day? VanitasisKirby repliedYou sure it's not bad?
It's fun being random, though~ Nah, I just finished giving him a shower. He did the usual routine of running around to dry off D'awwww, he fell asleep now Come quick!!xXVentusfanXx repliedyea your fine
are you encouraging him to be this lazy?? -pokes his tummy- VanitasisKirby repliedI don't seem fine Dx
Eheheheheh... He learns from his mother
But all babies are lazy, right?? *rubs belly*xXVentusfanXx repliedppl dont think your crazy do they?? o3o very true but what if he gets overweight? D:
VanitasisKirby repliedO.O IRL, just a little. No one here has called me crazy, though.
Our widdle Ven is already overweight
Let's take him to the park~
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